So I wrote these lyrix yyh.

[Kady.52]

So I wrote these lyrics for a song a few weeks ago, tell me what y'all think 

Lonely In America

LYRICS: K J?AIN
MUSIC: J?AIN/VENDETTA

Don?t you know why I?m waiting?
Whisky bottle in hand,
At a cold, grey station;
In a foreign land.
My head humming loud with
Rock n? roll rhythm, and blues   
My lone ten-dollar bills
Tucked in snakeskin boots

Darling, don?t be difficult;
You ain?t yet seventeen.
Since I?m gonna die young;
Least I?ll have lived your dream.
Why you?d want to be promised.
To a wealthy town man;
Instead of life on Mars,
In a rock n? roll band.

Good times and bad times
Lock them in your drawer
Use it or lose it, ?cause
You always want more

You?ll never be
   Lonely in America
No, no, I?ll never be
   Lonely in America
I won?t be
   Lonely in America

Perhaps they?ll string me up by,
Some Wichita crossroad.
Or I?ll drift by down the
Wrong end of Melrose.
Love, lost, no lawyers concern,
My broken home keeps him,
Living like a prince, yeah,
Life?s got nothing on me.

Good times and bad times
Lock them in your drawer
Use it or lose it, ?cause
You always want more

Won?t ever be
   Lonely in America
No, no, I?ll never be
   Lonely in America
I won?t be
   Lonely in America

SOLO
       
CHORUS 

[highway C]

sounds like your trying to write something thats similar to AFD
lyrics are okay , theme , not so much

[gnrfanxxx]

i like it

[Kady.52]

^ cheers. I'm not sayin it's meant to be a deep, meaningful song or anythin, its jst good,clean fun. 

[Verasa]

it's cool man...do what you do and do it to the best of your ability. got a .MP3???

[Kady.52]

cheers man.

no not for that one, but I got one for a diffrent song here:

www.myspace.com/vanittivendetta
 

[Verasa]

^  Oh yeah... you guys are good.. the guitarist has got some chops