Lyrics I wrote, song is called "World"

[DnR]

Look at the people
look at how there fighting
This makes me sick inside
That this world has come to this
(slowly bulid ochestra violin, with piano)
How could this world come to this.
It started off with peace and love
and now its all about war and hate
These days
all we hear is bad news
Rather than good
makes me wonder what the fuck is going on.
(guitar changes from acoustic into heavy)
Why cant we all find that little bit of peace
we all have inside of us
maybe the world would be a better place
if we could all find that bit of peace in us.
Maybe we could loook at tomorrow
in a better light than what where looking at now.
Can we forgive those people
who pulled the soul right out of the earth
and those people who have loved and cared for the world
why do we keep treating them like dirt of the earth.


And now cant we forgive these people
Who have destroyed this world maybe with abit of help they can see
we can change this world for better
and we can have more good news rather than bad news.
ahhhhhh tell these people, that they would not save anyone
but when it comes to them
maybe they would see it in a diffrent light.
And when disaster strikes
Would we all be the ones that could save the world
Could we reunite and put our diffreces
That destroyed this world
If I thought everyone was crazy
Maybe now ill find out the truth
(guitar solo number 2)

Now a cheap investigation
To find out
all these dealings
that the noone can understand
that leads to death
of innocent people
and noone will no exactly the truth
because we all know that
the world isnt full of peace
just like it should be
should be
should be
*whisper* should be

*bass solo, slowly building to acoustic guitar"

Oh
How could it get like this
Surely this isnt what we wanted
and why cant we all just get
along........
"slow build up to heavy guitar"

Ohhhh because this place
has just gone full of government
influence that we cannot
change
even with full investigations
noone will  ever know the truth
about this world.

Opinions? 

[BluesGNR]

Don't quit your day job 

[Gunnerfan23]

The words "read" ok dude.
But constructively it's flowing more like a poem the way you've written it.
Without the Melody the words don't stand on their own (but it seems you have a concrete idea happening there with all the parts laid out with production notes)


Record something with an acoustic guitar. After of course, doing all the legal mumbo-jumbo to ensure your stuff doesn't get ripped off.

Don't quit your day job, but keep that hope alive!!!!

RNFNR!!!!

GNR4LYF!

[KeyserSoze]

Sounds like a speech Axl might make before singing Civil War 

[GNRreunioneventually]

Oooooohh ooh I got one

It's a parody of disturbed down with the sickness-

Your momma came up from being down on my dick-ness
She took off her panties N' I was down with her thick-ness
Turns out though she wasn't down with my quickness
Two weeks later she contracted a sickness
I asked her if it was before she road my dick-ness
She said yeah now we're down with the syphilis