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[Dave_Rose]

This is my latest song I wrote for my band I was wondering what u think of it...

Stranger
Waking up on
A Sunday morning
This old man went walking

Looked at the stranger
In that mirror
Don?t know him any more
Is that me?

All you need is
Something I don?t
Want to be And I
Can?t take it anymore

And you?re eyes look
So far away, but it?s
Only when I?m gone
Far away from you

But you and I got something
But I don?t where it belongs
Maybe in my head, Maybe in
My dreams

And we wake up on
A sunrise that almost
Blinded me with you?re beauty
I want to get away

But I don?t want to
Hold on any more
Because I?m fed up

I got no solutions
To all my problems, yeah!
This is not the answer
That?s why I am looking at
The stranger in the mirror

I?ve lost my ways
Somehow I?m not the
Same any more,
I feel something between
Us

All you need is
Something I don?t
Want to be And I
Can?t take it anymore

I want to be yours
And yours only
I know your out
There

I can?t get away from
You, because I know I
Will dream of you
Always

I feel wrong inside
My mind again, I?m
Screaming for help
But you don?t care

I?m looking for answer
That I can?t find, Tell
Me what did you see
Because that?s not me

Because I got no
Where to go home
Because it?s to late
All the beautiful images
That light your face

I live a big lie
That?s all I believe
Because I got no
Where to go home
Because I am down
On my feet

Take it easy
Take it away
Find you?re self again

All you need is
Something I don?t
Want to be And I
Can?t take it anymore

These lies I believe
From you, Even though
Deep down I know what?s
Right and what?s wrong

Let?s take it away
And I hurt
I don?t want to
Say anything to you

Because I don?t
Know, where I stand
Anymore, this aint easy
To say, but I?m going
Insane day by day
Because of you

Because I cant find
The answers to why
You?re gone, I can?t
Take this anymore

I?ve been torn in two
I hope its not over
Any more

Just tell me the answer
I?m looking for answer
I can?t take much more

I haven't wrote any music to it yet I will do soon though

[wonderall]

Dave_Rose;

Very indepth thoughts buddy...I really thought it was down to earth and real towards the middle. I really connected with the chorus.  The tune will do it for ya.  Good job.

[Sin Cut]

Please tell me if you like this, it took quite some time to make it


         Disaster
         of one



my heart it's full of broken glass
once it held something and now it's dark
can you live with a broken heart?
if past was a disaster then what can you expect to come?

You couldn't help yourself
Then what's left for you?
I thought I knew you, my disaster of two
And in the photos there's just someone in your shell
someone nice, but so surreal
I had no reasons - since she dissapeared


;My comitment to you
was a disaster to come
you can't help yourself
you're a disaster to come, my disaster of one;


So my heart may be full of broken glass
but I'm still so fine
I don't feel bad knowing you
I'd just like to get back my wasted time
eventually I'll heal much before you - my disasters of one
Though seeing tears in your eyes hits still like a drill
I hope you can't hurt me
though we both know you all ready did

Being paranoid was something you coulnd't see
I saw it - disasters to come
And now I see a rising sun making the sky gold
I won't lie, I'm much better of now


;My comitment to you
was a disaster to come
you can't help yourself
you're a disaster to come, my disaster of one;


You think there's always time to start to try
you think you can buy time only if you cry
You say you love and miss me, even if it didn't show
you were my disaster at home, and now you're just disasters to come

[Mattman]

Blue Cut  -  cool lyrics.  I like the way it seems to play around with time, perception and all that.  I especially like the line, "I hope you can't hurt me, though we both know you all ready did."  Weird shit.  If you've got good music to go with the lyrics, and the lyrics fit with the music, you've definitely songwriting skillz.




Here's a song I wrote a few weeks ago after seeing the movie Taxi Driver with Robert De Niro, which basically inspired the lyrics.  Musically, it's a dark punk-type song, reminiscent of the Misfits.  Tell me if you like it.

Breakdown

When darkness falls
The streets come alive
Scum of the earth
With their guns and their knives
I drive the city at night
I see her out on the street
Selling her body for the man
That's not the way it should be

Someday a rain will wash this away
But 'till then it'll stay the same
I need a change, I don't care how
Breakdown

Innocence lost
She shouldn't live like this
One last saving grace
Before I fall into the abyss
I'm your street life saviour
I'm living dead
He won't sell souls anymore
With a bullet in the head

Someday a rain will wash this away
But 'till then it'll stay the same
I need a change, I don't care how
Breakdown

[Sin Cut]

Mattman, I'm still working on the music, it's not so easy

I liked breakdown, even if I couldn't put any melody to it but

I'm your street life saviour
I'm living dead
He won't sell souls anymore
With a bullet in the head

was great, but my twisted humor would've put it

"she won't sell her anymore
with a bullet in the head"

but I'll hand it to you, I found it somehow catchy

[Mal Brossard]

Here's my latest.  Feel free to comment.

Working Title: APOLOGY
Written: A.M.P., 3-24-04, Boston, MA

VERSE ONE
It all went by too fast
No chance to take it back
I'm alone and left to fade
No one else would understand
I see a change in you
See it coming for a while
See it coming in your smile
I see a change in you
I ask myself why
Feeling like I could die

CHORUS ONE
What can I do? To say I'm sorry
What can I do? To make things right
What can I do? To bring you back to me
I want you in my life again
Please tell me what I can do

VERSE TWO
I am sorry for the pain I've caused
Wishing we could start over again
Time brings healing to our wounds
I won't make the same mistake
Why did you have to change?
Everything was going fine
And I felt the world was mine
Why did you have to change?
Wasn't what I had in mind
With you leaving me behind

CHORUS TWO
What can I do? To say I'm sorry
What can I do? To make things right
What can I do? To bring you back to me
Don't want me in your life again
Please tell me what I can do

To put you out of my mind
Out of my mind
Out of my mind
Out of my mind
Put you out of my...

When I first played the tune for the guitarist in my band, he said it sounded like something you'd hear by Staind (odd, considering I hate Staind, mostly because of Aaron Lewis' whining; but I digress).  This was actually part of an idea I had the other day for a whole album.  It's basically an allegory for my last failed relationship-- I liked her, she didn't like me.  It's like a combination of NIN's "The Downward Spiral" and Stabbing Westward's "Darkest Days."  Here are the track ideas, with current songs I've written for it in (parentheses).

1. You see the girl (no song for it yet)
2. Meet her, and start hanging out (no song yet here either)
3. Intrigued by her (still nothing)
4. Debating over whether to ask her out (How Will I Know?)
5. Further fixation (nothing)
6. Obsession (Be There-- still under construction)
7. She finds out (Obsession)
8. Hatred between the two of you (nothing yet)
9. Desire for revenge (I've Had Enough)
10. Remorse for the situation, and wondering why it had to happen (Apology)
11. Hope for future relationships, and putting this behind you (Exit)

Let me know what you think.

[Mattman]

Good lyrics, Duffman...OH yeah!  I can see the Staind comparisions...it's got that same kind of style in terms of sensitivity and everything, but it's not quite so self-absorbed, either.  The album thing is a good idea...maybe it can be your band's Tunnel of Love.



Here's my latest.  These lyrics were a collaboration between me and my rhythm guitarist, who just broke up with his girlfriend.  The music is somewhere between Blink-182, the Ramones, and the poppier side of The Cure.  It's very much a pop-punk song.

Making A Mess

To me she was an angel
To me she was the best
Turned out she was the devil
Tore my heart from my fuckin? chest

Forgetting all my optimism
Watching our future?s end
Will I be another memory
Be her lover or just a friend
[pause]
SCREW IT ALL YOU?RE DONE!

Now all my hopes are gone
What the hell is going on?
They say wounds heal with time
Someone please fix this mess of mine

To hell with all those rules she made
Controlling my every move
She just wanted me to be her slave
And in the end what did that prove

Her voluntary deafness
Causing my frustration
Blame it on a
Failure of communication

Now all my hopes are gone
What the hell is going on?
They say wounds heal with time
Someone please fix this mess of mine

[Interlude]

Goodbye to romance
Goodbye to her hand
Goodbye to sanity
And sex in the van
I?ve seen it all before
And it?ll happen more I know
I don?t have time for girls
When I?m under their control

Now all my hopes are gone
What the hell is going on?
They say wounds heal with time
Someone please fix this mess of mine

Someone please fix this life of mine

[Sin Cut]

Mattman - this was great, I can relate to it, it really hits the issue

Duffman, great lyrics, especially:
"Everything was going fine
And I felt the world was mine"

[Drew]

Mattman's(Making A Mess) and Blue Cat's(Fathers Son):

Both are very powerful. Gives me something to think about. Great writings and cheers to both of you.

Thankyou for sharing.

[MCT]

A guy I know wrote this little haiku.......enjoy.......

_______________________________________________

both my arms broken
both in slings around my neck
will you wipe my ass?


black hair on my soap
my wife will surely freak out
someone get a rake


love is powerful
no having to say sorry
so bite the big one


my face is melting
it must be something I ate
what is brown acid?


LED flashlight
batteries last forever
I think I left it at work


butterfly coming
makes landing on my windshield
scrape it off next light


rodeo next week
lots of rednecks drinking beer
not enough restrooms


sex can be quite fun
we could do the wild thing but
I need window shades


copter searchlight scans
cross my backyard late at night
skinnydipping ends


xponent is done
haiku motor out of gas
time for bed maru

--Rob--

[Christine]

 

[yanks1]

Ok, this song may really suck cause I'm just making these lyrics up as I type them here. The name of the song just came to me and I thought I'd try to put some words to it.

Internal Inferno-

There's a burning sensation deep within your flesh
A feeling totally new to you
It certainly is wretched
The pain is not so much physical, but mental in nature
Emotions seem foreign, oh, what anguish
The angst you feel has no reason for existence
Worrisome lives we lead seem almost distant
From the logical path normal people take
Friends tell you to change your life for THEIR sake

(chorus)
There's an inferno building inside you
It'll eat you alive
It shows no sign of stopping
Surely this creature is not divine
You've gotta change your ways
You've gotta seek some help
You can't defeat this demon on your own
This soul must take the proper steps

Bullshit and rumors have taken their own toll
Coworkers, friends, and relatives seem sold
On putting you away and throwing away the key
How can you live in a world where you aren't even free
Your actions are submissions to a mind that is not yours
The doctors admitted they could only treat your cold
How much you wanna bet they've been hiding all along
From the so-called rumor that you're just a "lost cause"
These liberties we are granted upon our sacred births
Are nothing but objective misconceptions which are given from a perch
They are taken away by a force stronger than you or I
The government is no match to this which I despise
I'd love to limit this qualm to the discussion at first sight
But my mind has been fried, I'm unable to see the light
I can't stop thinking about how unlucky I have been
Too fucking bad that we can't all just begin
Start all over, a new beginning, a clean slate

Reaching deep inside in order to reword the inevitable demise
To beseech from God a new tally up on the board
Please just spare me the effort an the time
Sometimes I don't feel like living anymore
The predicament of life or death seems endlessly profuse
Unlimited supply of arguments to give an take
Don't you understand, I don't want you to be confused
Life is too complicated to be for our sake

(chorus)

This internal clockwork has now returned to a sort of normal
A burst of watery synapses have put out the inferno
Now you have until the next time this comes around
Hopefully you've learned your lesson
And can keep your mind an spirit sound

[AxlsMainMan]

Here are some of my poems, i borrowed the last line from Madagascar for the first one :

I am an Island
Lost in the wide and vast ocean of life
While others be part of island chains
My island is left alone where no others will find
Below the waters surface an island may be forged together
With a significant other
My island stands strong and proud by itself
The love of others it sometimes seems
Is closer then I realize
Yet such love is yet to reach the shores of my island
If I am to be left so out from the shore
May I never find my way back anymore


Clouds in the wide sky
High above the cold calm breeze
Soaring over trees
Even on the grayest days
The greatest of clouds arise
Unleashing rainfall on to us

PS, sorry if they suck, i just started writing for a hobby lately

[Imfuckincrazy]

Well, this is my first post on this site... and I probably shouldn't make this my first, being that this isn't all that great (I wrote it in maybe two minutes or less, and haven't revised it). I haven't even titled it.


Shut up bitch
It's not your voice I want to hear
You're behind me all the way
But I feel nothing there
I'll be your bitch just for one day
Just don't say a word
That's the price you have to pay
Don't let me see your ugly face
I'll pretend it's someone else
I'll close my eyes
And see a better place
There are many things we can do
I just don't want to look at you
You can put your arms around me
I just don't want to know that it's you

Maybe one of these days I'll post something more personal (give it five minutes ) if anyone would want me to post after this.  

[Imfuckincrazy]

This one needs to be corrected, but here it is:

Lost Control

I'll kill you
Don't hurt me
Who are you?
You never met
The other me

I'm sick
I'm going to die
So why do you say I'm healthy?
I'm not one to lie

Don't look at me
I fucking hate you
And now I want to cry

The door is taped
The windows are closed
Because I know
I know they want to hurt me

I heard your voice
But you didn't say
Anything to me

I have magical powers
That were only given to me
You can't touch me or I'll die
I've only lived one hour

And now my story is told
What did I say?
I'll never know
I heard them say
I've lost control

[Mal Brossard]

Alright, a few more parts I'm working with.  None of them are anywhere near completion, so any advice is greatly welcomed.

This first one, which is currently untitled, was written after I went to take flowers to a girl for her birthday.  She's a friend of mine, but I like her as more than that, but can't get myself to tell her my feelings, due to a failed attempt at it with another girl back in September that has left me extremely paranoid (that was a really fuckin' long sentence).  So here it is.

I do what I can
But I don't understand
How I can get through to you
I want you to see
What you mean to me
But I don't know how to do it
Anything I could do
I'd do it for you
I'd be anything you may need
I can't promise much
No riches and such
But at least I can give you this song.

The music is all written for it already, I just need to write the remainder of the lyrics (Pre-chorus, chorus, and further verses; maybe a bridge too).

This next one was written on a Greyhound bus from Boston to Cleveland (The first few lines were written in front of my former dorm as I moved out).  I hated living there (I called it Cell Block 6) and was so happy to get out of it.  The people sucked (partially from fallout of the aforementioned situation of liking a girl who didn't like me, and sucking at telling her my feelings) so I wrote this song about leaving.  It's working title is "Parole".

First half of verse one:
Goodbye now to cell block six
Goodbye ball and chain
Goodbye to a year of my life
I won't get back again

First half of verse two:
Goodbye white walls and boring bricks
So long to skies of grey
Goodbye to people I love to hate
Never thought I'd see this day.

So let me know what you thought of these so far, and if you have any advice.  Post here, e-mail me, AIM (StradlinFan84), or whatever.

EDIT: The first song is now called "Get Through to You".

[Mattman]

I liked your lyrics a lot, Duffman.  In "Get Through To You", for some reason, I really like the line about "riches and such".  It just jumped out at me for some reason.  That song has got a rhythm and rhyme to it that make it stand out; my only real word of advice would be to make every third line rhyme as well.  For example, right now the rhyming scheme of the song is like AABAACAADAAE.  You should try and make it like AABAABAACAAC, if you know what I'm saying.  The added rhymes will give it more of a flow.  Unless it's a fast, hard song and the third lines are sort of like a shouted response.  Anyway, just my advice.  Great work, keep it up.  


Here's my latest.  With my band (now called Purebred Mutt), I'm the main songwriter in the group.  What often happens is that the other guys might bring me ideas and I'll work to develop them into full songs.  Only thing is, both of them separated from their girlfriends not long ago, so I'm starting to get bogged down in "why did my girlfriend leave me, relationships are so fucked up"-type shit with no rhyme, rhythm, or anything.  I've developed a couple good punk-pop songs from these, but I needed to get away from that for a while.  I don't want to turn into an emo band.

That's why I wrote "Rock 'N' Roll Junkie".  Nothing to do with the M?tley Cr?e song of the same name, which I've never heard.  This song is just a straight, hard blues designed for rocking.  It's cut from the same cloth as GN'R's "Dust 'n' Bones", "City Boy Blues" by the Cr?e, Metallica's "2x4", and "Roadhouse Blues" by The Doors.  Although I might speed it up later to shake things up, I dunno.  Also, I might add another verse to it.  I know it's not exactly intellectual, but I didn't want that.  I needed a break from writing "serious" and "emotional" songs.  I just wanted to rock.  Anyway, here it is.


Rock 'N' Roll Junkie

Well I'm gonna go hungry and I'm gonna be sick
If I can't get myself another fix
Times are hard and I'm outta control
Need another good shot of that rock 'n' roll
I can't live without it and it won't leave me alone

Yeah I'm a slave to it, and I can't get enough
I just want more of that wonderful stuff
Now I lost my job and got kicked out of school
I might be a junkie, but I'm nobody's fool
So gimme that shit, and you can drink my whiskey too

I'm just a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
I'm just a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
You know I want more when I hear those guitars roar

My knees are weak and I can hardly stand
'Cept when I'm playing in a rock 'n' roll band
So I went to the doctor and got diagnosed
I'm a hardcore addict and I'm getting close
I went to the show and nearly died of an overdose

Well I'm a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
I'm just a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
Don't know if I should, but I know that it sure feels good

[Solos, repeating choruses ensue]

[CasH-MoneY]

Something I just came up with.  
First time I have wrote anything that I could call mine So
I thought I would share it with you guys.

I based it off of what GNR members think/feel now days about the past and where they want to be now.
Keep that in mind when reading it.


Times have changed again
We are living our own lives
In the dreams we once wanted
Because we dont wana to die

What once was our own
Becomes the past of our time
and the things we always miss
wont come back again

But the feelings are the same
and the expectations wont live down
growing deep within
our harts beating to an end

I plan on adding alot more, I will post it when im done if u people like wut I got so far.

[Thorned Rose]

Hey guys! Here is a poem I wrote a while back for my girlfriend. I want opinions on the strengths and weaknesses of it I guess.

Yeah it's really original I know lol.

Robbie Wiles
?Marble Floor?
2-9-04 ? 2-18-04

Turning back the old hands of time
I can still see you in my memory that first day
Oh how you looked so fine
I always kept a thirst for you in my heart
I still remember the tough and unnerving moments we shared
We?re together now, nothing kept us apart
Since I fell for you nothing has compared

When you needed me, I was there
Even if you pushed I still pulled
Our early chapters have come to an end
I?m glad for this
My good will for you I send

A marble floor is how we are
You can walk on it and it is still pretty underneath
You just couldn?t ask for more
What we have is our own marble floor

Chorus:
We stay solid and keep together like tiles on the floor
As I smile and it?s sore, you kiss it and I couldn?t ask for more
Our love in its own way is a marble floor
I just couldn?t ask for more (x2)

Interval

How we ever met is beyond me
You?ve always looked beautiful every day and I?ve always thought it was meant to be
I don?t know how else to get through a day without you
Any day with you is more then I could ask
Like a marble floor

The times alone are harder now
I always will miss you
I can still hear you in my head
You?re the only thing that makes me alive and not dead

Chorus:
We stay solid and keep together like tile on the floor
As I smile and it?s sore, you kiss it and I couldn?t ask for more
Our love in its own way is a marble floor
I just couldn?t ask for more (x2)

Turning back the old hands of time
I can still see you in my memory that first day
Oh how you looked so fine
I always kept a thirst for you in my heart
I still remember the tough and unnerving moments we shared
We?re together now, nothing kept us apart
Since I fell for you nothing has compared


What ya think?

[spiderman]

so impressed with contributions so far i had to send my own....please dont knick my lyrics else ill cut your teeth out....

Before You Walk Away

before you walk away, ive got one more thing to say,
i dont really want to play, your games anymore....
theres one thing that i need, thats to sit aside and bleed,
these tears from my system, you fucking whore.....

before you turn your back, i can sense a certain lack,
of remorse in your feelings, that tears me up,
if my senses are all true, then theres nothing i can do,
all i know is you, and now misery,

(chorus)
everything i had i gave to you,
you gave it all back broken,
my feelings for you grew,
but you kept your options open.

before you walk away, ive got one last thing to say,
dont you show your face, round here anymore,
before you walk away, ill use all my restraint,
cause i really want to hurt you, you fucking whore...

(chorus)

critism please........