Here Today... Gone To Hell!

Soon I am gonna post some of the songs I have done and hell some ones I started on but are stuck on.
I am thinking at least the stuff for Rock N' Roll Joe (first song!!!) will be on at least in two days just got to copy it from the master notebook at my house (where I put all my stuff that I think will sound the best!!!!).
Since people are intersted in what they have seen I will post all the stuff I have done so far.
If you got comments, question, advice, or whatever just let me know and post whatever.
Hope you guys will enjoy it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!





Joe

I want to give you guys a idea of what I want Rock N' Roll Joe to sound like.
Think of it as a ACDC song lirics, mixed with the feel of Dont Dam Me and some Mr Brownstone.

Honestly I havent looked at it for like a year. It seems that the song is not complete at all compared to what I thought it was. So I am going to work on it as soon as I am done with my ACT stuff (I am a junor in High School and real need to study for that ACT shit :( )

So I will give you guys a little taste of it though since I dont want to keep you all waiting forever.






Joe

Yeah im Rock N' Roll Joe
Fuck lets get to the show
Got some hookers and blow and im ready to go


O Yeah im Rock N' Roll Joe already knows you cant run from shit when your loaded ya know

I got a whole bag o trouble so ya better know

Thats in no particular order of how the song goes just parts that I am more satisfyed with and most likely there will be a bunch of changes made to it when compared to the finished product.
Sorry that it does not have a bunch more in it for you all...  I will get on it as soon as my shit is together probobly after school is out at the vary least.
But let me know what you guys think ok!!!








Joe

Just want to say I got at least 2 other songs that I was working on a little while after I thought of Rock N' Roll Joe.

Caged Bird- It has a obously blues sound that I want it to have. It is more in order than RNRJ but still needs some tweeking for it.

Feeling like a caged bird
Feeling like Ill just o never learn
Dosent really matter to you
For every winner four or five lose yeah!



Gonna Change the World- Its really up in the air on how I want it to sound. This one needs more work as well.


Im gonna Change this world till my last breath
Gonna change the world got to do it fast
Yeah we can make it last







Joe

Hey Joe, I have some feedback

for "gonna change the world" the lyrics don't really flow you know. I can't imagine those 3 lines working together, I'm not sure you'll have a melody that can work with it. I guess it'll be some kind of a ballad?
Let me tell you when I first read the lyrics to This I love. It was days before I actually listened to the song but I could still feel a flow and imagined a melody along with the lyrics when I read them. It sounded nothing like the actual song but the lyrics had that flow. I still remember the melody that I imagined TIL.
 Of course it's too early to tell when you've only written 3 lines but have that in mind when you try to complete it. The subject of "changing the world" rarely appeals to me, unless it's man in the mirror by the great MJ. Probably because I don't believe in one person changing the world. It's too cheesy and too 1985 for my taste. Lots of people believe in it though and you're not writing that song for me so you don't really need to think about that.

On RnRJ. It seems like the lyrics are more about fantasy than the real deal, which I'm not a fan of. It could might as well be about dragons and medieval stuff. The real deal rarely lasts, fakes never last. So if you want to at least have a chance of making it, make it real.
As you said the lines are in no particular order there but I still can't make much if any sense of it, maybe it's because Swedish is my first language but if you want some Swedish fans, you better think about that ;).

in Caged Bird I can actually feel some what of a melody, pretty 80's. Whitesnake actually, don't know why :P

Caged bird stands out among your songs, even if I have no idea of any actual melodys and maybe what I just said only makes sense to me but I figured I'd share anyway.


EDIT: oh and that "give those hoes the old push and squeeze" .. Don't disrespect your ladies as "hoes" and I think i've heard push and squeze before...

Ok thats all good RNRJ actually has alot more in it its just getting hard to weave through all the good and the bad. Yeah I need to work on that shit alot it was actually just made to be something that just sounds fun like some kind of a cool party kind of song but its basicly weaving through the bull shit to find the dimond in the rough.

Gonna Change The World is more of a song you would understand if you had the instrumental in it. In my head the instrimentals complment the song and I am sure I can make that a reality.

Caged Bird by far though is going to feel the most real for me. I am sure other people can relate to it even more than I can but its gonna be about stuff how I feel.


But all of this stuff is back in the working process so who knows how RNRJ or any of my songs turn out in the end all I know is the flow I felt from them feels right as long as I have that then I am sure I can get a real good finished product!!!






Joe

I've seen lots of lyrics and also been posting them myself.

One thing is to write a kickass lyrics and whole another thing is to make it into a song. Anyone can write a some words.

Lyrics don't impress me, but when I hear even a rough-demo that sounds good, hell, that does.

Writing lyrics is a way of therapy for myself. To make it work with music is work.

So here's my feedback;
First of all it's "instrumental" not "instimental". Instimental sounds like some disease making insects go nuts.

RnRJ
Hell, the guy sounds like a fucker, harrasing me in pub and even worse he turn out to be a freeloading fucker who thinks too much of himself.
Hookers and blow? Know what?! What makes your trouble more important than mine? Yes, I'd definetly punch Rock n' Roll Joe. Seems like a loser who can get shit done on his own for me.

However I like the "you cant run from shit when your loaded" it has a nice double meaning. But the thing that RnR-Joe has the biggest problems is such a cliche.


Caged Bird
You say it has a bluesy sound, ok.
The first three lines could be something emo's listen while they cut themselves, but the sudden "for every winner every four or five lose yeah!" seems out of context.
It's like you start don't cry and cut an paste nightrain in it.

The song doesn't tell what the caged bird doesn't learn, is the birdie just too dumb for school or does he maybe do the same fuck-ups, the same way, time after time after time?

The last one, well sound like a dying man on his sickbed suddenly realizing he need to change the world and fast 'cos he's dying.
I don't know about the "last" tho, just name one change that lasted? Sound like you just put something there to go with the fast?


Look, I'm not trying to shoot you down, but if you're really going to do some of these songs stop attention-whoring with some one verse lyrics and post something tangible.

Yeah I have thought about that issue concerning Caged Bird and its not all gonna be blues. Just a good part of it. Now that I think about it the intro might even end out like Dead Horse.

RNRJ is just kind of when I think about it more of a story of a big rocker in a great band (not me). Kinda someone like Axl you know except with some different issues and a different story.
Hell with any luck it could be me except the parts about the drug abuse and the hookers :hihi:

Its all a big process and yeah I do take alot of enjoyment from writing all this.

I could have sworn I was writing a balid though but I cant find it.




Joe

Ive been writing lyrics etc for over 16 years and my only advice is to just keep writing writing writing

its a craft and u gotta find what u do well and perfect it.

best advice i can give is to be as original as possible. u have to be "YOU" and write as "YOU" as said above, u have to be authentic.

if u haven't lived it, don't write it.

I put a little part of myself in every song I write. How much of myself it depends.
But its all writen by me!




Joe

stick with it. u are passionate about it. do what u love and don't let anybody tell u not to do it.

Remember, when u put out a song, u are guaranteed to have 75 percent of people hate it.So u can't let that discourage u.

Thanks D that helps!!!!
 : ok:



Joe

plus u are very young, so the more  do it, the better u are going to get!

the toughest thing in the world is to read or hear criticism. I know that 100 people can like a song of mine but if one person tells me i suck or i am this or that, it fucking cuts like a knife.

so after a while, u stop taking things so personally. cause think about it, to me Axl is one of the greatest musicians alive and there are people who think he sucks. so how can u expect everyone to like something u do?

Michael Jackson has the highest selling CD of all time which is around 50 million... there are billions in the world who didn't buy it.

so its like i said. Take criticism but also take it with a grain of salt, cause u have to consider your target audience.

another thing i have learned from the internet also is, there are a lot of hobby guitar players as i call them. they can play u every GNR,Metallica etc etc song in the world but can't write one single song of their own and they are full of hate. Had a dude one time tell me a song of mine sucked right, so i challenged him to post something of his so i could see how its "done" fucker posted a Bush GLycerine cover...... LOL GTFO! haha.

so embrace the fact u write original material cause that impresses me a hell of a lot more than someone playing covers. : ok: : ok:

Yep its not easy to be a writer.
I hate those tools that dont do anything orrignal ever.
If you dont write any of your own music and say your like the greatest at whatever no one would really care since your just copying what someone else wrote and just rearanging it.

And thats not being true to yourself at all.


Joe

Ok, some constructive criticism based on what you just said: You might want to check out the "hookers and blow" line and decide if that is something that is really true to your life or if you've heard it somewhere else. It could come off kind of phony otherwise.

 :rofl:

btw I remember reading in Heroin Diaries that Nikki Sixx had no problem getting ideas from other peoples songs and using them himself.

Like I said before all my songs have a part of me in it. I only gave you guys a small taste of what I thought sounded cool from the songs.





Joe

Planning on jaming with some of my friends today since I am not going to be able to run at the track meet since I hurt my knee when my friend accdently kicked it durring soccer practice and it just locks up whenever I run.


I will be sure to tell you guys about how it goes!!!




Joe

I think it was Paul stanley that said, if u are gonna rip off or steal something,just make sure u steal a diamond!

Gunner80?

Not gonna lie we got high! :smoking:
But I did have a idea for a new song that I am working on.


ps: The new song is by far going to be a huge tip of my hat to GNR. At least from what I got so far.

Joe

Just want to give you guys a update on that new song I am working on I have a name for it.

I named it Appetite For Destruction!
This song I got a real good feeling about!!!



Joe

I should be hanging out with my one friend today. This time I will get some stuff done!!!
If any of it sounds good I will tell you guys about it.

Since Summer is coming up for me real soon I am going to be really working on my songs and will tell you guys about anything thats new or changed.

Joe

you can't do that son, remember your parents don't let you use the computer at home

Appatite For Destruction.

That's awesome.

Not.

that is almost worth a "smiley only post" with this   :no:

I ment at school which would be today but I didnt get the chance to go. I got in a car accdent. It was just a fender bender but I was swamped with stuff so I did not have the time unfortunatly.


Joe

Tell me do you have any songs Sin Cut?
If so why dont you tell us the name of one.

Joe

You're just lover (don't be bitter)

One hell-of-a Stalker (One In A Million cover with altered lyrics)

Not yet a star (but living like one)

Just to name a few that we're working on at the moment.

O so you have a band I am assuming or your just working on them with some friends.

Tell us more.


Joe

A bit of both since they're friends and bandmates at the same time.

We're rehearsing for a few acoustic gigs. I talked about in a few pubs I work occasionally and they're interested. If we're any good. There's a lot less stuff to carry when acoustic. But well just see how it goes from there.

The plan was just to cover songs, but when we were hanging out I wrote some stuff and the rythm guitarist is working on making some music for it.

It's OK as long as you misspell one of the words. Intentional?  :no:

Maybe it's a visiting card? Something cool to do like using "u" instead of "you"?

Sin Cut cracks me up  :rofl: :rofl:

:hihi: I did not even notice it was spelled wrong :hihi:

Joe

you misspelled appetite for destruction, that's as bad as spelling axl like axel or even worse axle :no:

Yeah but Axl is only 3 letters AFD is a bit more than that. :hihi:

Almost done with school this year!!!
As soon as track and the finals are done I will have a bunch more time to work on my music :)

Joe

What do you expect from a kid who is always on the hookers n blow and hes always ready to go?  :hihi:

Yeah but hes going to his show to play Fuckin great music.

Thats where the fuck he's going!!!!
 : ok:

Joe

thread of the year.

Oh yeah, definetly. The lyrics you've posted are solid and the demos just freakin' awesome.

 :rofl:

Actually, AFD is three letters also.





I'll leave now.

He is the next Bob Dylan!   :hihi:

Those werent the lirics thats just the meaning.
He is a musican and as we all know some musicans like to do certain rituals before they play.

Rock N" Roll Joe needs some more work but with the right instramental sound its gonna fuckin rock!!!


Joe

I wouldn't count on it  :P

Always got to be haters.
O and by the way I am only 17 so its not like you should expect everything to sound fucking great.
If you dont like any of it then why the hell are you posting here?
Just to say some bullshit comment.



Joe

To be honest though if everyone had to like it to post in the thread it would be only you and D.....

I dont even know why I should even try talking to you chineseblues.
You clearly have no respect for anything I do so again why are you posting here?


Joe

Dude, do you play an instrument or just sing / write?

What are your influences aside from GNR? Just curious.  : ok:

Glad you asked Ignacio!!!

I play a little guitar. I was in band at my schools for about 3 and a half years playing the claranet.
My influences include ACDC, Ozzy Osborn, Led Zepplin, Rolling Stones, a little Green Day, Coheed and Cambria, Moterhead, and a bunch more.

I really got my first experence with rock from just being in the car listening to the radio as a little kid. Boy back then I was scrappy. Ever since I have loved everything rock. Actually it was that and from my older brother who for a time was in a band Tarnish a long time ago. Now he is a electricion. He loves Narvina and has a bit of a problem apparently with how Axl sings so we have our Narvina vs Guns N' Roses arguments from time to time.

My little brother plays drums and has been playing for about 5 or 6 years now. He is good but it seems to me he is being to repetive with some things.




Joe

Good ol'school rock n roll  influences you got there. Hope we can hear some demo soon. Good luck with your band!

Hehe its not a band yet just me writing songs and stuff.
But thanks Ignacio!
I love the old school rock n roll the stuff going on now does not intrest me much.


Joe

I didn't know I had to be a fan of you in order to post here excuse me. If you are that sensitive, maybe you shouldn't have posted your "awesome lyrics" on here. Just sayin'.......

you dare write Ozzie instead of OZZY  :o

I can't take this seriously, with someone posting lyrics I'd expect the to know the English grammar.

I'm finnish myself and my grammar among other things, is bigger than yours.

Lirics, appatite, instrimental, claranet, electricion. I think boys and girls on first grade will beat you. And you make the same mistake over and over again.

And to top of that you expect chineseblues to write something respectful, even when you really have nothing to show as awesome lyrics.

Just a thought, check the "Share Poems Lyrics and Songs you wrote here"-section to see what lyrics are, since you seem to think that a sentence qualifies.

I guess the only thing that could help his spelling, would be if he switches to firefox. That browser has spell checking.

Joe you need to toughen up. My fav scene in the Runaways is where their manager teaches them to deal with hostile crowds. He has people throw things at them, and they hit those bottles back with their guitars. I am very sensitive, and my current job has really toughened me up! : ok:

well, have you posted only your lyrics, or are there any demos available?

cause a good text doesn't make a good sound...

Well if you dont like them or something along those lines then unless if your trying to give advice I cant help but wonder why you would even come back to this thread.

Since you make it sound so terrible.



Joe

Thats also what I am planing on doing soon enough with my singing instructor.
The first recordings will be me doing some GN'R songs and when I get all that down and I think I am finished with my song then yeah I will let you all in on a demo.





Joe

But you forget I am doing this from SCHOOL my time is vary limited and if I dont know how to spell something or mix up my words I dont have much time to fix them.


By the way today is my last day of school this post is from my web page design class!!!
Just one more final then I am free!!!!!!!




Joe

Because I think it's a pretty damn funny thread so far and it seems to me like the majority of posters in it are having a laugh at your expense as well.....

Well Chineseblues I think your just full of shit.
But thats what I think.


Joe

Even though your acting like a jerk Chineseblues I forgive you

Its so hard :'(


Joe

No, it's the truth. 99% sure.

use the feelings chineseblues makes you feel, turn them into a song : ok:

That is excellent advice.

Before I post I want to make a couple things clear.

A ) I'm a 19 year old lead guitarist/songwriter in no way have i MADE it in any stretch of the imagination.

B ) I'm saying all this with sincerity and no hatred.

C ) I hope you perceive this in the right way...

I'm unsure if you want to be taken seriously in the music industry , and I mean that honestly. Rock N' Roll Joe lyrics sound like a very cheesy 80's tribute thing of thing going on. Trust me I know EXACTLY where you are coming from. I started my first band at 14 and the first song we wrote was about hypothetical band in LA roaming the streets. The 1st verse started

" On the strip tonight , looking for a fight..."

It reminds me of Rock N' Roll Joe in the sense that the lyrics are about "RNFR." and I dig that and respect that.But it is going to take a bit more maturity to be able to get songs out there. I had the same idea of wanting ( and still fucking do ) to take over the world, being THAT rock band. But in reality I was writing about situations I had no idea about. If you aren't partying with hookers and taking lines on restroom toilets then it's safe not to write about it ; because there is a slew of indirect situations and environments that are a result of living that sort of lifestyle. You show some promise with Caged Bird and Gonna Change The World ; the latter being a bit more heartfelt.

After being on the scene for awhile I began to LEARN what being in a band was about and not imagine. It's a lot of hard work and a lot of dedication ; a lot less "RAWK N ROLL PARTYING" although that has its time as well. In all honesty naming song Appetite For Destruction is a death-wish on your band/song. What I'm getting at is learn who YOU are and what you are about. The biggest issue I find in younger bands ( and I put myself in this category ) is that the lyrics contain no substance. After leaving my last project I've tried to learn about myself as a song-writer. Get in touch with your political values or your morals ; learn what ticks you off about society ; take a perspective on YOUR lifestyle ; come to grips with your vices or don't and write about it. Dare I say it but expand your musical horizon's ; I'll go ahead and aptly quote Eminem here " Music is a reflection of self ; we just explain it , and get our checks in the mail." while the last half doesn't ring true for a lot of new artists the first part ALWAYS should. Music is a reflection of one's self ; which in turn means one must have a strong sense of identity. I'm not denying that you don't believe in Rock N' Roll or that you don't want to party and all the great things that come with success but to truly be taken seriously in the music business you need to be a bit more than that. Add some depth to who you are.

I slowly have learned this over the past 6 years and I continue to learn more each and every day. I started off as a Blues-Based guitarist who helped write songs with titles like "One Hell Of A Ride" and "Keep On Rockin" ( I was mainly a co-writer as the lead singer did most of the writing ) and now I prefer to think of myself as a Blues-Based Guitarist/Songwriter who has a little more on his plate. I'm learning and taking classes to express my views of what I'm concerned about and what I think this world is all about. So just some constructive criticism , broaden your mind up and write some tunes that have a context to them that is more than hookers n' blow....  : ok:

Without contributing jack shit to the topic at hand.... I have to say this is incredibly mature advice from someone your age! Hell, from anyone any age. The part about finding out who you truly are is the most important question in life. Hence, it's no surprise that those who have some answers to that are also able to express themselves in ways that really stand out.

WTTJ_91 in a way thats how I want to go (without the cheesie part lol).
I like old school Rock N` Roll hell I understand what you mean by that but I dont think Rock N' Roll Joe is finished it needs work most of my songs do.

And I dont think that I am gonna present that into any big music people soon so no worries about that.





Joe

By the way I do have one song I am not sure if I told you guys about I dont have a solid name for it now but its basicly about well the changes that are happening in the world (nothing specific just a generlization view).
It needs a bunch of work so I dont think I am gonna post any of the lirics yet.

Keep on rocking guys and thanks for all the comments it helps alot!
Joe

I am being supportive. he is a young kid, if he has a dream and loves it, he should keep doing it. the more songs u write, the more chance u have at getting better.

it may take a few years, but after trial and error u will start finding what u do well and will start pumping out better stuff.

takes some courage to open urself up though and potentially be made fun of and ridiculed. so i like to offer positive support and advice. :peace:

So jdog, you asked about my band earlier.

Here's one i recorded using iphone.

My rhythm guitarist did the music to it after reading my lyrics.

it's called don't be bitter.

Here's the link:

dont be bitter.mp3 (http://www.4shared.com/audio/ljdGSHgw/dont_be_bitter.html)

Sin i unfortunatly can't use my computer and am stuck doing this from my I touch i tryed downloading it but for whatever reason it's not working.

So I am gonna try looking this up on YouTube I am intersted in hearing it.




Joe

You don't need to download it, just click play.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PEqiWMdAt8c

Sin Cut I am stuck doing basicly everything on the Internet from my itouch and most movies don't play unless they are from YouTube since it's a app or some fucking reason.

I really need a laptop...


Unrelatedly I recent started working on a song that involves well basicly a symphney (I know it's spelled wrong but I don't have time to look up the spelling)

will update everyone on any new stuff going on.



Joe

time to upgrade from IE to Firefox then  : ok: two clicks and BAM! correct spelling.

Lol if I get the chance to use my computer. I am stuck useing my itouch or NINTENDO WII (I capitalised it since i thought it was funny : ) and i am useing it now)

I need a laptop fucking parents are asses with passwords!!!



Joe

Here's another one, The House Of The Rising Sun we did a cover of.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pjf42i1MTK8 (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pjf42i1MTK8)

Vary nice never heard of the song before but it sounded good. Although at one point I am not sure if something happened to the audio I don't know much about that stuff so I could be dead wrong but thanks for the rising sun!!!


Joe

nah, the song is supposed to end

 :hihi:

Hay everybody guess what I'm in a band.
I bet some people are thinking whoopie the fucking do who cares right?
Well as soon as we get some stuff recorded I will personaly send everyone the link to the video in this thread!!!

So far the only song we worked on of mine is Caged Bird and from what I am hearing from everyone involved it's gonna sound great!!!

I am fuckin estatic to be involved in a real Rock band after all the shit it's about fuckin time and the drummer was underestamating me but I blew him the fuck away!!!

I bet he had his doubts since he thought I was a fuckin crazy GNR fan well he learned what the fuck you could sound like from listening to Axl and working on all the GNR songs can do!!!

I hope you all will like what we got to show you guys!!!

Joe

Gongrats jdog!

I've been recording lyrics all evening yesterday, hopefully we get the lead guitar track done on friday and get the track mixed over the weekend  : ok:

Sounds good Sin Cut can't wait to hear what you got for everyone!!!

Working on a song called Green Dream right now I can't tell anymore though other wise my band mates will be pissed!!!

Joe

Is this your band?

http://www.collegehumor.com/video:1940129

 :rofl:
I wish then they could get beer for me super easily!!!

No there is a guitarist and drummer and me so far. And they both are a year younger than me so looks like I am gonna be in charge of geting them cigs o joy  :smoking:




Joe

Just a little update we are half way done with our first song it's called Green Dream.
Progress is a little slow but the sound is good for now although I personally think we should also work on other stuff as well.

I will give you guys the choras part we got so far tomarow because I can't find it right now but I feel like something is missing to the feel of it.

The song is good(in my view point) but I feel a little out of my element it's a clean sounding song for the most part. It doesn't have the shock m' in awe feel to it that I love like GN'R and others.

But I won't rush them since for the most part we are all in sync but like always in some areas me and the drumer dissagree (like with the fact that Axl Rose has a bad ass voice) drummers always fight with the singer  :hihi:

That's it but I will have the choras up tommarow for everyone to enjoy or hate!!!
 8)

Joe

Well me and my band had a practice today and our drummer is working on putting what I wrote all together (I am such a unorginized writer of songs  :hihi: )

Bad news is I don't have the lirics on me but I will tomarow as long as he finishes them.


Joe

So, was the song so crappy that you're afraid to put it online?

No just been working a lot and recently its harder to get online at my house.

Its a decent song just never get enough time to put it up.



Joe

Right...  ::)

Someone got grounded!

 :rofl:

Hey j'dog, I thought I'd help you out a little and made these catchy punk-rock lyrics for ya!

I'm a mothefucking rock star;
Feel like a caged bird;
Like a hidden star;
Authorities are fucked up
'cos my bitch mother, grounded me, that's not right!

But I'm the rock n roll joe;
They cut my internet connection to fuck with my mind;
I'm the rock n roll joe;
I sneak to watch tv at night!;
I'm the rock n roll joe!;
I chat with girls at the libary, that's right!;

I'm a motherfucking rock star!;
I'd call you, but I'm out of talk time cos my ma gave me none!;
I'm the motherfucking Rock N' Roll Joe;
I got something hidden in my pants from the hoes;
An autherities are fucked up
Since homecoming time's at ten, and I go to bed at eleven!;

I'm the rock n' roll joe!
I slack from my chores in my mind!
But really I do em on time
Rock N?Roll joe!
Rock N?Roll joe!
Rock N?Roll joe!

 :rofl: I didnt get grounded my parents are pricks about the computer is all.

Sin Cut I am sure your first song was a little less than perfect when you first started writing. So really I dont care how insulting your trying or not trying to be I still think thats funny :hihi:

So let me give you guys what you have been waiting for... an update and Green Dream!!!


First I will stat off with Green Dream though.


Walking home on a sunny day with a little bit of money saved
Pockets empty appartments clean I got 24 days till I'm out of here
Need a job before I'm down n' out because I feel like I'm reaching the clouds
Got a few day before my girlfriend leaves shes the only thing I got left
Only thing you gotta realize you work till the end till you get your prize
Just keep on moving on dont turn around or youll lose it all

(Choras repeats twice)
Its a green dream everythings up seen
When I'm walking around thinking about that dream
Got a guitar on my back with a little bit of cash
(End of Choras)

I walked a thousand and one miles just breaking my back
Trying to get to the top and never coming back
Been kicked to the side and to the curb
While live keeps throwing its twists and turns



Lifes pretty hard when you get minimum wage
especially when your 42 years of age
My dady told me get to school never back down or be a fool
Theirs a few things I regret a couple of them be making big bets
One is drugs and two is crime Ill never get back my time
Spent a couple of nights with Jimmy Bean
had some good times smoking that green
just having fun not worrying about a thing
Slipping away into a green dream

(Choras plays once)
Its a green dream everythings up seen
When I'm walking around thinking about that dream
Got a guitar on my back with a little bit of cash
(End of Choras)

Stuck in a green dream
People laughing at me
My only regret is making that bet
Its a long road ahead
Gotta keep on moving on!!!

I walked a thousand and one miles just breaking my back
Trying to get to the top and never coming back
Been kicked to the side and to the curb
While live keeps throwing its twists and turns

Joe

Stuff is progressing slowly the other two members have had a lot to do getting in the way of practice.
I owe them for waiting on me when I was playing soccer.

Looking at two bassist this weekend and and someone for rhythm guitar I hope it goes well.

Other than that and the other song were writing I have been working on stuff of my own although its not done yet
and I dont want to put up a crap song.

Hope you guys like Green Dream!!!


Joe

Joe, too many words, try to make it more simple.

Since when you try to put in in a song it\s too hard to make it a song like this.

trust me.

Not to mention, you definitely were grounded.

cool Choras

Yeah when it comes to songs simplicity is vary importaint otherwise you could be stuck writing a song for a long time.

Thanks I really like the sound from it.
:hihi: Except I wasnt I just get distracted when I am on the computer I am a procrastanator.


I cant wait to put the song on youtube when we get everything all locked down.
Just us 3 playing it sounds real good so long as the amp I am singing from doesnt fuck up again :P

Joe

Do you play?

No like I said before my fingers are way to slow and I doubt I could play and sing it's hard.

Joe

Just wanted to tell you guys a little about the other song we are working on right now.
Its a ballid everything I wrote for it is about that girl that I have talked about in the past on this thread.
Its over half way done and I really like how its gonna sound when its done!



Joe

How can you like the way something sounds, when it isn't finished yet?

I have my thoughts on how it will sound from what we have played from it so far.
Besides that basicly the guitar part was done mostly before I even listened to him play his rift.

And right now we got over half of it done and I am close to finishing the ending.

Joe

btw. It's chorus, not choras. Take this as free English language teaching from Finland.

:hihi: Well you are closer to England than me!
And by now I thought you were use to my spelling fuck ups?



Joe

he can only take so much.

Well everyone has their faults and strengths just because spelling is a weakness doesn't mean I should have to deal with his shit all the time I am here.


Joe

It's called spell check  : ok:

So, please tell me about your strengths?

I have no problem with typos, but that your REALLY write "choras" (among other mistakes) in multiple topics and multiple times, well, it just makes you a plain idiot to me.

Really if I am a complete idiot why the fuck would you even talk to me?



Joe

I'm writing, hello?!  ::)



















Really, I'm just busting your chops, but take it as a challenge.

It may end, after a couple of years, when you've learned your grammar.

Which is highly unlikely, but let that be a goal for you. Yes, let that be your goal.

Ok  :hihi: it's all good. I doubt I would have the kind of time to learn my proper grammer!

Now I think I want some gram crackers!!!  :hihi:

I am happy that I found a girl at my school that is a seriously knows music, can sing like a godess, looks like one, is a careing person, I have good chemistry with, killer sence of humor, and has a strong mind and will.

We are going out on Thursday night next week (last day of my schools finals) to a Italian resterant (she loves my peoples food!).

Anyone got advice? I would be extremely grateful!

(I am well aware this is the wrong place for such a topic but I really like this girl and know she has had many boyfriends in the past. Don't want to do something stupid like leave her the bill which I sure as hell won't!)

Joe

Sang to my choir class on Thursday and sounded real good! I almost broke down in the beginging but it pulled be through and I was told I sounded good especially concidering it was my first time singing for singers!


Joe

I'll raise your choir singing stopry with this.

I sang a song at this karaokebar and a guy gave me twenty euros since he was impressed of my singing. He didn't even bother me afterwards, just gave me the compliment, the cash and went to his own friends.

I ordered a round of "free" drinks to me and friends I was with. Anyway it was cool.

O wow goodie for you Sin Cut always trying to one up me.
And it's story not stopry bro.


Joe

Bad chemistry within the band here....

Who's leaving after the tour!

Everyone give a big round of applauds for jdoggie here, first typo noticed!  :rofl:

But hey good luck with the choir, it's hard and will help wou with your singing.

It's 'applause'.





Sorry.

I mean no harm. :D

You are the last person that should be giving people spelling lessons...  : ok:

you missed Sin Cuts other typo, It's "you" not "wou". But seriously, I think Sin Cut is doing this on purpose to see if Jdog can notice his spelling errors.

I have noticed them 80% of the time. It's not easy to notice somethings when your posting from your I-POD TOUCH!
I just don't see why I should play his little game of it though.


Joe

ap?plaud
v. ap?plaud?ed, ap?plaud?ing, ap?plauds
v.intr.
To express approval, especially by clapping the hands.

http://www.thefreedictionary.com/applauds

damn you just got pwned BUYV

Hey, jDog, is this YOU singing? :P

http://koti.mbnet.fi/ossith/hifi/When%20The%20Children%20Cry%2006.08.2010.wma (http://koti.mbnet.fi/ossith/hifi/When%20The%20Children%20Cry%2006.08.2010.wma)

Boy this thread needs to get closed -- Its getting ugly with no topic updates  :hihi:

Ah, but isn't the phrase 'round of applause'? 'Applauds' is a word, but you would use it in this sort of context: 'The crowd applauds the performance'. 'Applauds' is a verb, in the past tense. 'Applause' is a noun, and goes after the collective term, in this case, 'round of'.

GRAMMAR FUCK YEAH

Your right that's because we don't want to show our other song till it's done. With finals this week it's gonna have to wait on band stuff till maybe Saturday. However I am still working on the song myself and when I get a few parts done I will post a few lines from it.


Joe

To be honest, jdoggie, you haven't shown any song.

You know what your right. But I can't speed up time I wish I could...


Joe

Can't help when he's using the family computer and the dog's allotted more time than he is!

Ok then lol! It's just the Hollidays mess with my mind. I love getting together with my family but it's just I miss my Grandparents and I just do stupid things...


Joe

Just wanted to let you guys know I just finished up on 2 new songs but right now I am talking to some people and we might be able to get what we got recorded so wish me luck.



Joe

How could you guys let this promising project die?

My man

Yours truly!

Sorry to bump this old topic but I'm high and found this old thread and I can't stop laughing. What ever happened to rock n roll joe? :hihi:

Come back, Rock N' Roll Joe!

Just one more choras.

Hope everything worked out with the girl and the italian restrant.