Here Today... Gone To Hell!

 Hey,
  I have a lot of poems and songs I've wrote, but, I never share them with anyone. I'm sure other people on this board have stuff they have written, so, why not share it with people on this board, I'll start! This is a poem I wrote about 2 years ago. Tell me what you think, be brutally honest, I won't get mad.
                 -Justin [peace]



It feels good to be alive,

I know this because sometimes the taste of your own tears is better than the finest wine. Some times the weight of the world on your shoulders is better than the freedom and happiness that luxury can provide.

Sometimes if you stay out in the sunshine too long you get burnt. The same fact goes with life.

I've heard that you should always wrap your arms around the people that you love. Somehow over the last 2 years I haven't been able to wrap my arms around myself. Sometimes out of shame, sadness, and the darkness of depression you learn to see light that's at the end of the tunnel. I think that light at the end of the tunnel is really just our hopes and dreams.

I believe our dreams are like seeds, our effort is like water, and with no water the seeds aren't ever going to grow. I learned its better to stick to your own garden than to try to help someone else work on theirs. Especially people who won't appreciate the help.

Sometimes I wish touches that give you that warm feeling inside your stomach were lifelong promises of commitment, but, I've realized that the world doesn't work that way. People don't live by promises they make; they live the way they breathe. Now I know why the air is so polluted. I've learned that promises are no more than a combination of words you can look up in a dictionary.

Give me a grain of sand for every promise I've heard that has been broken, I'll take you too a beach I named deceit. We can swim in the ocean I named sorrow. Hand in hand.

It feels good to be alive.

                             

i thought it was good! i liked it...however, the only critisisim i have is that it switches moods too much.  at the beginning its kind of happy and content, but then you get sort of violent and angry and by the end i just wound up sorta confused. but other than that i liked it [ok]

wow i really think that that frase is very cool specially this "Somehow over the last 2 years I haven't been able to wrap my arms around myself" i like it.

seb i also like your lyrics . it would be interesting if you tell us the story behind the song.

 i think its very cool to see people that put their way of see things in a poem or in a song or story.

Okay, this is like Hippiechick improv, so me not really sure how this is going to go, so uhhh, let's just say this is like Hippiechick Live and Unplugged or something.  Okay here we go:

"Cat Fight"

I'm not a bitch
'Cause that would leave me with little room left to classify you
So until I can suit you with a better name
I will call you on all the things you do

If you have a problem with me
Then tell me to my face
'Cause if you decide to spread lies to my closed eyes
I will be all over your fucking case

I don't know maybe it isn't so much of a girl thing to fight
Put I'm in a pissed off shitty mood
And if you cross me right now I'll punch out your motherfucking lights

If you have a problem with me
Then tell me to my face
'Cause if you decide to spread lies to my closed eyes
I will be all over your fucking case

Therapy sessions can begin in the street
When your relaying your story to the police
On how your ass got violently beat
Just thank your lucky stars that your sorry ass is still in one piece

I can acurately visulaize story time now
Once upon a time would be a better time anyhow
And if I could begin to learn how to control myself
I would have killed you in the first place
Instead of taking all this shit out on everybody else
And not punching the shit out of your face

If you have a problem with me
Then tell me to my face
'Cause if you decide to spread lies to my closed eyes
I will be all over your fucking case

You know I've always had the greatest time
Fucking with your sanity and your piece of mind
How sweet it is for me to dictate to you your fate
You just better hope I change my mind before its to fucking late


Ummm yeah ::).  Fucking Rock and motherfucking roll dudes :D.  Okay, I uhh know that was kind of violent and shit, but I just feel like beating the shit out of somebody right now.  Like, not because I'm mad at anybody, I just feel like kicking somebodies ass for the hell of it ::).
Okay, I am pissed off at people, 'cause I realize I just couldn't beat the shit out of anybody for the hell of it, unless of course it was for some unexplained sexual reasons, and then I wouldn't consider that fighting but just play time. So I guess this is like Hippiechick hardcore or something [nervous].  

Power to the people's, unless you piss me off and then I will feel the need to kick some ass [hihi].

Peace in the name of play time with sexy people  [peace] :-* [peace]

Spankies  :-*

Ladies and gentlemen...Hippiechick914! Back with a vengeance!

I love Hippie so.....yes I do, yes I do  [yes] :-* ;D

I'll post some of my songs next week.

They'll be copyrighted next week so I can post them freely. ;)

Some of my lyrics can be found in the "works" section of my website. Just click the link below and enjoy!  :)

ok this is a song of my bands called end of the road.

dont you find it funny how winning aint the same without a prize
and why people hold there pride above there lives
the road is winding,but it leads us to the promised place
past hills and valleys,ditches and snares without a trace(whats to come)
come to a cross road,this is where the road becomes a path.
so do we walk on or do we let the world take us back(or do we let the world take us back)

oh weve come to the end of the road,how can we turn back when the whole world has turned to stone
come to the end of the road
oh weve come to the of the road.

if theres a light at the end of the tunnel then how come all i see is black,
every clouds got a silver lining but mine flew away and didnt come back,
and so we walk on trying to get to the othjer side.
ever trying to keep in tact our pride but more importantly our lives.

oh weve come to the end of the road....

Nice. [yes]

 Hey,
  Good job guys. Keep the poems and songs coming. I like some of the lines of the songs I've read by the people who posted so far! Don't be shy, I'll post another one of mind next monday.
  To the guy who complemented me thanks. The poem I wrote is supposed to be confusing as I was confused when I wrote it. I was in jail for 3 days under intense questioning from Police for drug charges against me. A best friend of mine got caught with a bunch of "E", then said he couldn't rat on the guy, I was the only one who could set up a deal. So, these cops expected me to fuck someone over and I didn't. They held me in jail for three days, so, I had nothing better to do than write. By the way, all charges were dropped, they had no evidence on me. But, I lost a best friend out of the whole situation.
                                               -Justin [peace]

that sucks :-(

 Yeah,
  I mean my friend Ryan was a great friend 99.9% of the time. Then he got caught with 500 pills of E. Told the cops he got them from another friend of mine Wes, but, I was the only one who could give Wes the ok to give more to Ryan.
  Ryan thought I would buy all the cops B.S. about me going to jail and set up a deal with Wes. Instead I told the cops to fuck off, the charges against me got dropped, but, I found out Ryan's true colors. When he has to be held accoutable for the decisions he made he wanted to pass the blame. You don't do that! You take responsibility for what YOU have done.
   -Justin [peace]

That was cool, even though I haven't got the best opinion about cops, from personal experience...

i once wrote an edited version of november rain that i think probably would go in here. (i edited it to relate to my ride to college every day)
but i seem to have lost it
hhhmmm
maybe my good friend chinese democrat has it
i know i'll ask him

shlump

This is a really fucked up weird song.  It is about love and everything, but sort of about all types of love, between all types of different people, and relationships in general with people.  When I write stuff I like to leave a lot of room up to interpretation and how other people relate to what I have written.  The moods in this are kind of conflicting, and it is kind of raw and just really pure. Kind of about realizations in a sense, and having to make decisions and shit.  


"Is it Enough"

It's time to see things differently
It's time to change things I feel
It's time to change the future's history
Instead of learning how to accept it and deal.

Do you know me
Then show me
Who I am
Is it a part of you
Or another persons point of view
'Cause I honestly don't give a damn

When it all comes down to it
Its never just about love
'Cause when it all comes down to it
Love is never enough
Everybody wants something
That there is to little of
'Cause when it all comes down to it
Love is never enough

Its come to the point where caring seems to not be enough
'Cause all their fake smiles last only a little while
And none of them come out of love

To your face sincerity
Is such a rarity
That it is almost nonexistent as it is
So tell me exactly how you feel
Tell me this

Assure me that you are not hiding behind a mask
That the words you are saying are true
'Cause if I'm going to be willing enough to give up a part of me
Then you need to be willing enough to give up a part of you too

'Cause when you hide from me on the inside
Only to be a different person on the outside
Bitter revenge forms
These feelings I can't hide

Do you know me
Then show me
Who I am
Is it a part of you
Or another persons point of view
'Cause I honestly don't give a damn

When it all comes down to it
Its never just about love
'Cause when it all comes down to it
Love is never enough
Everybody wants something
That there is to little of
'Cause when it all comes down to it
Love is never enough

Its come to the point where caring seems to not be enough
'Cause all their fake smiles last only a little while
And none of them come out of love

Love wasn't made to hurt
So why the fuck to you treat people like dirt
Then expect to be treated differently
If your so better than everybody else
Then go and love yourself
'Cause I don't need you loving me

When it all comes down to it
Its never just about love
'Cause when it all comes down to it
Love is never enough
Everybody wants something
That there is to little of
'Cause when it all comes down to it
Love is never enough

I have so many things
But the one thing I dream of
'Cause when it all comes down to it
Love is never enough

Okay I feel all like naked and exposed now :-[.  Me going to go and hide in a dark corner.

I don't write all that much, I know im not the best at it.
I found this in a notebook and its unfinished, doesnt have a title or anything. its kind of short, and i may change it a bit if i feel like it, but here it goes anyhow..

I know that its hard to find
The love that?s hidden deep inside
You gave your soul I lost my mind
Anger makes emotions blind
You succeed every day
To find something so sweet to say
It makes the hatred go away
Then you?ll leave me behind

And its so hard just to describe
The feelings that I feel for you tonight
You?ll resist me till my dying day
I never thought that it would be this way
No words are fit to shine your light
Though I can go on without you
I?ll find a way to tell myself
Carry on

This is a song i wrote like 3 years ago, i felt with a lot of anger inside of me , and i just wanted to blame God for what was happening to me. BUT i took the idea of the lyrics far beyond its meaning. I hope you understand, and after it, i hope you like it!  I would like you  to reply for what Ive posted (lyrics)

thanx!
 [ok]


WHAT GOD NEVER WANTED TO HEAR
(Lyrics:CCC)


God went on vacations when I needed him
Now he’s back to fix the danger
But now I got some little things to say
Or better hide away from my anger

This is what God never wanted to hear
….and now he’s doing  motherfuckers

Sunday’s church is full of loathsome sinners
They went there to clean therir feelings
But then they go out and do what they want
And bible’s word is on the ceiling

This is what God never wanted to hear
…..and now he’s doing motherfuckers

Pardom me I’ll never do that again
Now you?re fucked you cant be saved
If you’re “so good” why don’t you lend me a hand
Or you’re  just another bad angel

This is what God never wanted to hear
…..and now he’s doing motherfuckers

The rain wet the dry, the laugh destroy the cry
The lies denies the truth and danger
My soul is cheap I’d like to sell it
And you can give me 10 bucks cause I don’t wanna save it

This is what God never wanted to hear
…..and now he’s doing motherfuckers


25-26/10/2000 (date when i wrote it down)
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here ia great song i wrote: tell me how u like the 1st verse

I come over ur house
every day
for reasons unknown to u
cause u might say
that i am sick

but face the facts
ur mom is fine
oh i everytime i see her
she just blows my mind
i love her hair
i love he eyes
oh iwish i wish
that she was mine
ur mom is hot
 [peace]

Okay, I don't know what I was thinking about when I wrote this, okay I do, but not in that way guys, well not entirely.  It is a weird song, sort of taken from two perspectives. The first one is from like a little boy relaying to his friends about what a whore his mother is and of all her uhh "extracurricular activities," and service to the community.  The second perspective is still from the same boy, but when he is older.  He is relaying to his uhhh "therapist," about his mom's lifestyle, but also how much he sort of loved his mom too, and the hmm "education" she provided him with.  I wrote this about two years ago while baking Christmas cookies. It is sort of punk rockish and very raw, nasty, and sick.  I know I have issues :D.  

"Mommy Came"

Guess what Guess what
Your mommy told me
Guess what Guess what
My mommy got to see
She told me she slept with your dad
And he's the best that she's ever had
Just guess what guess what your mommy told me
Guess who guess who just did your daddy

I bet you never thought that mommy was that good
All the boys tell me she gives it to them like she should
She's the best mommy on the whole entire block
If you don't know why then that's a complete shock
Just guess what guess what my mommy got to see
Guess who guess who just fucked your daddy
This doesn't really come as a shock
Mommy has slept with the whole entire block
Giving it all out but not for free
Guess what guess what mommy gave your daddy

Maybe she'll visit your house tonight
An daddy will go up inside her an make her feel alright
Everybody deserves enjoyment from somebody
Just guess what guess what your daddy got to see

Oh mommy mommy give some to me
I've been such a good good boy can't you see
I really really need to see you tonight
Oh mommy mommy make me feel alright
Oh mommy can't you see
I'm not just your baby

I guess I guess I guess you just never knew
All the things that mommy could do
I guess I guess you just never knew
All of the people mommy has screwed

'Cause you mommy such a whore
I got up and inside her trap door
And you would just never believe
All the things mommy's done to me
She took me deep inside
And I took her for a test ride
My mommy made me feel soo good
She screwed me up the ass just like she should
Ohh mommy mommy can't you see
I'm not just, not just your baby
I don't need a car to ride
I don't need a house to get inside
I don't need a key
'Cause all you need to do is screw me
Mooooooommmmmmmmmyyyyyyyyyy

Ohh mommy I just guess I never knew
All the things, all the things you could do
Oh mommy, oh mommy now I see
Why you are always so busy
Ohhhh mommy I just never knew
All the people you have screwed

Shut Up And Pray
(Christos AG Stypaggidis)


I listened to my God tonight
He couldn't tell what's wrong from right

He knows he fucked up with this world
He thinks he might be getting old

He tried to save me from my sins
To save us from our kings and queens

And then he tried to cure my pain
But in the end he called me insane


Chorus:

It's needless to lie
It's needless to cry
It's needless to try
And fall from the sky

It's needless to say
You'll do it your way
When all you can do
Is shut up and pray
shut up and pray...


2nd Verse:

I listened to my God tonight
But couldn't help him end his light

He said that people shouldn't die
By all those guns they had to buy

He tried to talk me into church
He said "Believe but never search"

But He could see inside my eyes
I knew my truth, I knew His lies...

Repeat Chorus x 3

Closing:

I listen to my God sometimes
Because he always stops my crimes...


2003 (C) Christos Stypaggidis
All rights of these lyrics reserved. Unauthorised copying and broadcasting of these lyrics prohibited.

Hey jaked21 welcome to the board. I think it's not bad but, I would chnage  "hot" to something else.   [peace]

Hey guys this is something ive written.  Sorry if its bad im only 15.


cutiConnect

forget about what they have done
let their lives...live on
and hope that they will be safe
from the world they tried to take

Pray that they r not lost
that their past is not re-crossed
help so that they find a way
so that the sun may shine even on a rainy day

Try 2 undertstand and forgive
so that they can truly live
please let them drink from a pond
instead of being a proton

You made a mistake
the consequences create a heartache
Your life will be lost, either way
black,white,straight, gay
the laws are fair for who ever will dare
to grab and waste
the last breath to give...to taste

nice words
i kinda got stuck on the proton line, though
didn't seem to vibe with the rest
to me, anyway
but i dig the lyrics

This is the shittiest shit ever.. like you cannot get any shittier than this. I can't even tell if its a poem or song.. it could pass for both.. maybe. It rhymes atleast. Man.. I need to evolve in song writing. Seriously. Anyways, this is like my song I took a good five minutes on..j/k. I spent like three hours because I kept getting distracted. It's inspired by me talking to my freind and saying Izzy looked like a rock n' roll mob man..

watch out, here he comes
with his rhythm guitar
a bag slung over his shoulder
headed to the nearest bar

don't run, don't hide
he don't care
he lives his lies
he takes his time

whats that you say?
i cant hear you.
you saw him the other day?
i doubt it.

hes a rock n roll mob man
with jet black hair
smoking his cigarette
without a care

(Yeah its short, but would you really want it to go on any farther?)

For the ones who hadn't seen them :
***********************************************

After painful memories and cries
After finally deciding to change it all
After shouting my anger away
There comes the night for a last fall

Intoxicated by this growing pain
Infuriated by the dirtiest of all, fate
Anguished to the thought of all in vain
There I now lie helpless in my bed

Quitting the strong attitude for once
Leaving my arrogance away in sorrow
Trying to understand this last dance
And why there might no be a tomorrow.

Helping myself with words today
Those same words I cannot hear
These little letters to give me delay
The same ones I run from out of fear

One can be a sheep and a coward
Was it worth all the courage after all?
All it takes is a ?god did a fast forward?
And suddenly, a life is erased, total.

Pain grows in the night, I can?t sleep
It?s there at day and all I do is weep
I hope god is there with me today
I want to live another few decades.
*************************************************
Eternally caught up in time, awaiting
My mind going up the same mountain,
Still engraving the same old marbled stones
Carrying this message through my bones.

Guided or lead restricted faith to live
Showed and told to pass the great lines
Feeling or believing in his angry strife
If I fail to show them how to redefine.

Mount Sinai there, Mount Oreb here
7 mountains to save our frail dynasty
Little cave protecting our people here
Until they find the way I called destiny.

Archaeologists from the entire planet today
Historians with a passion, without Greed
People hurrying up to see without delay
All hoping one day they?ll be freed.

Summer time in the mountains is near
Bodies lie there man and wife side by side
Why is it then now that starts my fear?
When all I should feel should be pride?

History will be changing and people with it
Are they only ready to redirect their ways?
Why do I haunt until they finally find it
Isn?t it the way to answer their prayers?

Guided or lead restricted faith to live
Showed and told to pass the great lines
Feeling or believing in his angry strife
If I fail to show them how to redefine.

A piece of a loved one so long gone
All that left is the hope for our people
All that?s there is the only evidence
Why did I have to write ten marbles?
*************************************************
Days of thunder, revenge so bitter
My love has gone , torn into pieces
The world will crumble to my shatter
And forget about ancient deities.

My husband, picking you bit by bit
Egypt is a not big enough for love
A whole life for my craving only legit
You?ll come back and I?ll be mother

They shall crawl towards their queen
You?ll live and through him my fist
You memory never forgotten you Sun
Thunder tears the skys, it?s you I miss

In eternity they?ll pay the price of their deed
We?ll be one for as long as my soul wonders
Until maybe the key unlocks that atrocious lid
Until we find another way to be one forever.
*************************************************
The look in your eyes asking me
Always popping the same question
Trying to blind my sad memory
Never asking about my opinion

I want to melt inside your thoughts
Understand the hidden betrayal
Freak to the invisibles I fought
I want too see you be disloyal

One smile for ten knifes
One kiss for 1000 wives
One word to say sorry
One tear for infidelity

If I could only find those words
That courage to close this door
Just slit your heart with a sword
Throw the pieces of you ashore.

Find the truth to set myself free
Cry a lot until there is no more
Leave all my past behind me
And finally close that door.

One smile for ten knifes
One kiss for 1000 wives
One word to say sorry
One tear for infidelity

Hey guys I'm going to post in here because Conny is a bitch. Anyways... this is a song I wrote on 1-17-03 @ 6:32 EST.

The title is still in the air, and when I write most of my songs I write them in 1 draft, I rarely go over them and edit them. So its like a first time thing. Tell me your thoughts on this one.

"Love Took It"

Why does it all feel strange
I'm here at your side
ALl you wanna do is hide from me
How and why are my thoughts
Anger and falling rots through me
Into another place where golden streets glime

Why does it have to be this way
What do I have to do to pay my price
Dig deep into me
Do you see the debt I owe you
Please let me repay it
I once thought with my life but thats the hard way out

I get one shot at life
Life should be with you and only you
Forevr will I extend my arm to grab you from whatever harm is there

I was mad and down
All I felt was tha tyou shut me out
All I thought was is this what she's about
Remorse and alot of anger left just like theft


Your love took it
Shook it (x2)
Your love took it (x2)

Verse 1

? Robbie Wiles

Yeah its weak in a way it does need work so reply please.

I like it very much, it's a lil heartbreaking in a way..

I'm such a sensitive slob.. [hihi]

I'll get back to you once i've read it over a few times..

BTW : i like the other one too [ok]

 [rofl]

please let them drink from a pond
instead of being a proton

i wrote the song about prisoners and how they lose their lives either way...getting killed or spending the rest of their life in a cell.
The first line is saying let them live, because water is a symbol of life.  The second line is about being stuck in a cell because protons are always contained inside a cell.

This is the first song I ever wrote.  It was one of those days I was pissed off at everyone (Especially people back home) and I wrote this...

I can't escape
Feeling depressed
Feelings of hate
Slowly grow in my chest
No place to go
Where can these feelings stay
Push them in
Just the same
I don't need you telling me
How to live my life
Please stop giving me
All this pain and strife

I don't need you anymore, leave me alone
I'm sick of how you always piss and moan
Don't try to take away all I've been shown
So please, just leave me alone

Back home you were
My best friend
Now I really feel that
It all did end
You tease me more
Now it brings me down
Stay away from me
Until I leave this town
I'm sick of all the bullshit
That you put me through
I can only hope someday
It all comes back to you

I don't need you anymore, leave me alone
I'm tired of our yelling on the phone
Some day you'll surely reap what you have sown
So please, just leave me alone

Mind your own fucking business
Stop criticizing me
Let me be the person
That I wanna be
Don't try to fucking mould me
Into someone I'm not
If it were up to me
I'd have you taken out and shot

I don't need you anymore, leave me alone
I'm sick of how you always bitch and moan
You are the reason I hate coming home
So please, just leave me alone

Non-conformists?
Ha, yeah right
You are all the same
Under my and others' lights
For being individuals
You sure act a lot alike
Stop being a hypocrite
Get out of the car and on a bike
With the influence of one
The dazed follow her
But I'm not swayed that easily
Even when you said you weren't

I don't need you anymore, leave me alone
You're the lowest level of cowardice, the drones
Don't villainize me cuz I won't put her on a throne
So please, just leave me alone


A little info on some of this... Verse 1 goes to basically everyone back home... Verse 2 to my former best friend... Verse 3 to the leaders of my former church youth group... Verse 4 to said former church youth group (the car/bike reference is because they're all big in environmentalism and crap... the thing about everyone following "her" is after someone tried some divide-and-conquer shit, and almost had it work).

I'm working on another song, based on my favorite book, Catcher In the Rye.  Here's the chorus:

Just get me to that corner
Don't let me disappear
Feeling sicker every minute that goes by
I've only lost a part of it
Why must it go that way?
Why can't I be the catcher in the rye?

I'm still working with that a bit.

One of my 102 songs :

With out you

Walking, thinking of my life as it is
Without you I thought I?d be lost
Not knowing if I could stand to be without you
But now I can see clearly, for what I?ve seen I going to make it through

You and I like a grand colossal tower of love
But the moment I read your testament of love, my heart sank thinking of you thereof
Its hard to believe what you want, its hard to deny my feelings for you
But now I cant try and replace you, the beauty of what was to come is gone now

Taking things for what they aren?t, I wish Id known
I was foolish to take the obvious, I wish Id have be shown, the real you
So obvious laying there, in front of my eyes
I now can?t forgive these lies
I must go out alone from now on
I must be one in myself, without you from here to the end of my time
Relying on my thoughts and my feelings
You couldn?t go there for me, neither will I ever want you too

But saying you are by yourself isn?t easy
But if we have our differences and our own ambitions then life will play out for us
For now Im letting go of your hand
And letting you go where you want to, letting you choose your fate for you
I just hope that maybe, just one time, that we could see each other again
And think, for just one second, what could have been

Losing you is like losing a part of me
When I think of how Ill be inside without you my heart begins to bleed
Im forced to let go of something I love and care for
Im forced to say goodbye to you but head for the other door

This is one I never finished

Saying goodbye isn?t as easy as you might think
To you Im just a friend but to me your something I cant explain
When ever I talk to you my happiness inside seems to come in sync
But now that you choose to go away I can feel this bursting sorrow inside me that drives me insane

Wishing I had one more day with you
Wishing I had one more chance
Wishing I could have done the things we never go too
Wishing for one last moment to be near you

I cry to myself every night, praying that you might change your mind
But then I try to think about what?s best for you, even if that means leaving me behind
You mean more than anything, more than words can tell
But having to say goodbye to you, only begins my sad and lonely hell
No one there to comfort me anymore, no one there to smile
No one there to help through my sorrows, no one there for me for a long while

A sappy one for a girl I know


When you see her a smile crosses your face
She brings a light to the darkness, a hope to every place
I wish that she was here everyday
I wish to hear her soothing voice, to hear the words that she?d say

All the times that I was never there
Every time that I wish we could have shared
I lost something that I wish I still had with me
I wish that I could still see her now, to she how she would be
Without Me

So great, so beautiful, so nice to hear the sound
Even if I felt high and mighty, the first sight of her would bring me to the ground
A love of a lifetime, one that I never will receive
Endless hospitality, now only her loss will I grieve

All the times that I was never there
Every time that I wish we could have shared
I lost something that I wish I still had with me
I wish that I could still see her now, to she how she would be
Without Me

Here's something that was supposed to be a Poetic, Poe type of short story.  I never got past the first paragraph because it was too painful to write.

These past few months I have been deeply troubled
I've seen more sorrow than I have tears to drown it in
My philosophies on human nature in general and children especially
Have been challenged not by argument but by observation
Life as I thought, bears no credence in what I think
Where once I sought shelter, now I flee and shudder
When once I feared death, now I embrace an eternal slumber
To what, you may ask do I owe my deep cumber
To whom, but without tears not even a name could I utter
For the very thing that was the core of my soul
And unsuspectedly made me whole
Now wroughts the deep stark toil at the core of my soul
And in its wake, is a deep dark hole

 

Okay, i've never posted a song on here before, so be nice, but be honest. [nervous]

It's to a very slow, repetitive, kinda creepy riff...

--------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Verse:
I?m all alone here in my room,
Somewhere where I can relax,
I feel like I am back in the womb,
And I can get my thoughts back on track.

In my special room, it's so cool,
A place to go that has no rules.
No need for pain and shame or fears,
A place of art and hate and tears.
I don?t wanna come out,
I could stay here for years.

Chorus:
In my special room, I feel calm,
Somewhere I can get to no harm.
And I can blow their fucking heads off,
One by one.

Verse:
Outside the people talk to you,
You ought to hear the things they say,
Those lousy fuckers have no clue,
Why can?t those cunts get out my way?
And we put up with this shit,
Day by day,
So go back into your special room,
It?s a nice place to stay.

Chorus:
In my special room, I feel calm,
Somewhere where I can get to no harm.
And I can blow their fucking heads off,
One by one,
Just put a knife in their throat,
Yeah that sounds like fun.

 [smoking]I like the songs.... [smoking]

               Gotta Go!


   I already knew she hated you,
   But I had no idea she hated me too!
   So i sit on my bed with my head in my hands, thinking   
   She should never ever had got the chanse!
   Then i got to the phone to call her home
   She just wasnt there

Chorus:
   So wadda ya know?Shes gotta go!
   Before she ends up beeing my foe
   She was kinda sweet and really neat
   But now shes just a fucking ho!
   She treat me like shit and now i need a hit
   But im kinda trying to QUIT!

   So I went to a friends place and finding her there
   Feet spread up high in the air
   Then i pulled out my gun, cuz i wanted som fun
   And I pointed it straight to her face

Pre Chorus:
   Shes trapped like a mouse in a maze
   I dont wanna be in her place!
   I could see the fear in her eyes
   MY GOD!shes such a discrace!

Chorus-

Pre Chorus:
   I know the guns is fake
   But i just wanna see her shake
   what happend next is i slap my fist right on his face!


Chorus-

   She gotta go! Gotta go!
   Go away! Get outta here!
   im gonna put her back!
   In the ground, where she belongs!



something i came up with while riding the bus... heard someone said, in norwegian, "i already knew she hated you"

 [ok]

yo [ok] [peace]
my songs called invading me and im not going to write the lyrics but the basic idea is when a girlfriend/boyf/friend/mom n' dad gettin on to ur back and dissin u/bitchin on about u
it rocks and has a big guitar solo  [peace] [love] [hihi] :) ;) ;D

why not post this here song at HTGTH...

>>>>>

WASTED

i wanna look into
your beautiful green eyes
just once more
they'll make it seem
like i ain't so sore

i really hate to feel
kept seeing whatever i could see
i don't have any empty words for you
a very special girl

enjoy to the fullest
what you get out of life
i'd hate to see you in tears
respect the one who hears
what have i been doing all these years

i know you knew what i want
an' it aint what you need
i used to always manage
stopping myself bleed
i think i'm broken
and not gonna get fixed

we'll all see this night
that i'm thinking of
i'm smiling at you from this space
you may see the true ones
you never learned to love in life

it was us-two different wavelengths
now i'm without you here
i may be with you always right near

here's heading to another place
maybe on the day
the life i used to live
will reflect in my mother's face

check on the preceeding
please say no
but i don't hear anything anymore

maybe it's alright to waste
all this time, my time
was a waste
now i'm wasted


                  - the dirt

Not bad guys, we could have the lyrics for one or two rock classics posted here before we know it.... [smoking]

Heres one of for one of my friends that I used to hate.  I wrote this when I was 12 so give me a break  :P

  For The Love Of God
  Written By Torrey Kenakin

   

  I see the face of the person that you were
  And everyday I can tell that you never learn
  It's all inside that counts to me
  I don't understand it when you say "cant you see"
   
  For the love of god
  Spare from this s***
  You don't seem to know when to quit
  So spare me for the love of god
   
  You say that I am annoying
  Another figure for you're enjoying
  Try and see a little different than you do
  And try and make me forget what I knew about you
   
  For the love of god
  Spare from this s***
  You don't seem to know when to quit
  So spare me for the love of god

  Ooooo is a simple solution
  Not something that violates your constitution
  For you it's about yourself
  You and no one else
  Would it hurt you so much to try and help me
  But apparently it kills you to try and see things my way

  Whoa you have always been this way
  But I never wanted to see it like this and say
  "This cant be because you are more than that"
  Or so I thought
   
  (Fading Out)
  "Back Off B****
  B**** B**** B****
  F****** B****"  ;)

Rights reserved and all that bullshit.

Heres one about drugs in general that I wrote 3 months ago.

Look Inside   
Written By Torrey Kenakin

You say that seeing is believing
Guess you never opened your eyes
You say that time helps with healing
All those fears and lies
You that your mind has no feeling
Guess you never imagined yourself
You say that your soul keeps on pealing
Guess you should find yourself a little health

Guess you should just thinki about life
Guess you should just leave us all tonight
Guess you should've just wished it all away
Send it along, so its never here to stay
You wished it would all just go away
Sending it along, let someone else feel the delay
Look Inside

You said that the powder controlls your life
Guess you never fought back
You said it decieved all you thought was right
Guess you never wanted to get back on track
You said that it was all a game
Guess you never thought to quit
You said that it was to all to blame
Guess you never kicked this shit

Guess you should just give it all away
Guess you should just give up and pray
Guess you should've thought of a better reason
Instead of ruining your life not to blur what?s right
You wished it would all go away
Sending it along, let someone else feel the delay
Look Inside

Rights reserved and all that bullshit.

This isn't a war related song or anything, 'cause I wrote it long before the war shit ever happened. I got pissed off.  Whenever I'm write I'm usually pissed off.  I really haven't done any of those love type bullshit songs yet, unless they were about sex or something. I think I wrote this back in October last year.  Again, I never revised this, so I'm sure I have errors in it, or whatever the fuck, but I jut have to get down what I'm feeling first without being politically correct, or gramatically, correct,  or correct at all. Blah :P.

"Humanity"

I feel butterfly wings rolling about
Change has come once again
Was happy living without
Reasons to pretend
That any of this ever happened

With all these bombs blasting
Memory falls on blinded eyes,
As history goes on quietly passing
Will we take the time
To find in destruction
Peace of mind

In seven days the world had begun
One day now, for it all to come undone

Know to many people are too idealistic
I've got nobody to blame
Only try to release
Hatred through peace
For progression to ensue
People need to change

Human rights anymore so viciously abducted
Innocent people's lives destructed
Where are we going tomorrow
If we don't start today
To try to know accusing isn't the answer
'Cause the truth remains hidden
Among the many lies people say

In seven days the world had begun
One day now, for it all to come undone

It's not about love
It's not about complete unity
It's about respect
For one another's humanity
How are we to see
How things will be
If we aren't the ones to start
Talking less with our heads
And thinking more with our hearts

Everyday we move less in the same direction
But farther and farther apart
It's not about who's right or wrong
It's about whose willing to make a difference
Somebody's got to be humane enough to start

Some time is never time enough
If you've got the time enough to be understanding
Have the compassion enough to love
'Cause the whole world dies
Looking through the eyes
Of destruction and hate
We all see the corruption of power
Will we see the power of peace
Before it's to late

In seven days the world had begun
One day now, for it all to come undone

It's not about religion
Its not about how things should or shouldn't be
It's about a better today for a brighter tomorrow
It's only about humanity
How are we to see
How things will be
If we aren't the ones to start
Talking less with our heads
And thinking more with our hearts

I wonder if fighting is the only thing these children know
But if they are the providers of peace for tomorrow
Shouldn't we allow them the necessary tools to grow
'Cause if warfare is all their  innocent eyes see
Will they know enough to look deep down in there soul
To find that it doesn't matter what other people believe
That it all has to start in everyone of our hearts
The error of our ways we must see
Today is soon going to be tomorrow
Our own selves we must learn to follow, peacefully

'Cause it isn't about hate
People's undecided fate
It isn't about conformity
It's about you and me
Living together in unity
Showing one another
The power of humanity


Copyrighted, blah, blah,blah, yadda, yadda, yadda don't steal my shit, 'cause I ain't stealing yours and all that fuck.

Okay I actually worked on this. I really don't know what it is, because I'm sure if I wanted to I could make it into a song. I don't know what the hell I was thinking when I wrote this and really has no train of thought, or a point at the end. The title has really nothing to do with the song. The only difference between this song and many of the songs posted on here, it's not about a break up, or being pissed off.

"Tripping"
by Ambur N.

Tonight I'm leaving,
this dead end town.
Going to Las Vegas,
to live underground.

So I'm walking down,
this long, long road,
my feet, they're screaming,
to lighten the load.

I met a transexual,
who lived on it's knees.
It had three parts,
a life, a love and a right to be free.

I continued on walking,
as the sky, it grew dark.
I was tired and weary,
so I stopped at a park.

I saw a man with a guitar,
he told me a million myths,
with his sad, dirty songs,
and old Led Zepplin riffs.

I decided to move on,
because the sky grew dim,
I stopped to watch a rape victim,
learn how to swim.

A man stopped,
and asked me for the time,
I said sorry sir,
but I do not have a dime.

He smiled, then waved
as he walked down the street,
tommorow had come,
and I hadn't missed a beat.


If you seen my last song I posted on here, this is a BIG improvement. So, I'm proud of this one and don't steal it. Though I don't know why anyone would want to. Oh and sorry if you were offended (my mom was).

 :) well i didnt see your last one, but i think this one is very good, well done.
i've decided to not write a song of my own, but instead to make teeny weeny alterations to one already released. i've chosen 'how do i live?' by leanne rimmes. read it! i think it sounds much better now  ;D

How do you live?


How do you get through a night without me?
If you had to live without me,
What kind of life would that be?
Oh you, you need me in your arms, need me to hold
I'm your world, your heart, your soul
If I ever leave, oh baby I would take away everything
Good in your life, and tell me tonight...

How do you live without me? I want to know
How do you breathe without me, if I ever go?
How do you ever, ever survive?
How do you, how do you, oh how do you live?

Without me, there'd be no sun in your sky
There would be no love in your life
There'd be no one left for you
And you...Oh baby I don't know what you would do
You'd be lost if you lost me
If I ever leave, oh baby I would take away everything
Real in your life, and tell me tonight...

How do you live without me? I want to know.
How do you breathe without me, if I ever go?
How do you ever, ever survive?
How do you, how do you, oh how do you live?
Please tell me baby, how do you go on?

If I ever leave, oh baby I would take away everything.
You need me in you, oh baby don't you know that I'm everything
Good in your life, and tell me tonight...

How do you live without me? I want to know
How do you breathe without me, if I ever go?
How do you ever, ever survive?
How do you, how do you, oh how do you live?
How do you live without me?
How do you live without me, baby?
How do you live?
How do you live without me?
How do you live without me, baby?


hehe.

Man, you guys like inspired me to write songs, so now I have like.. 10. The one I'm sharing though, is actually kinda funny, because theres a member on the board (??) who has this name. It was written by me and my freind Liam.

"Fifth of Whiskey"
by Ambur Nolan and Liam Deranum

I'm looking for some inspiration,
for this song of mine,
I've got, two fifths of whiskey,
and a bottle of wine.

I've got this girl,
sprawled out on my bed
she's begging for a pill,
for the ache in her head.

Chorus:
Lord have mercy,
God bless my soul,
I'm only 23,
but I'm much too old

The rain pours down,
as the day rolls on,
I've got a fifth of whiskey
and a hit of a song.

The licks and the songs,
they just repeat,
like a shirt on my back,
and shoes on my feet.

Chorus

For some reason I think a girl should sing this song. (Most of my songs are written for a guy to sing.) If I ever find a girl to sing it, I'll probably change the words.

This is one of my poems.  It sucks.  It's kinda mellow, moody, and depressing.  I was feeling really sad, violated, and lost when I wrote it.  It's really simple, the meaning is very simple, but the meaning can be interpreted in many different ways.  It was just one of those things you carry like a ton of bricks on your shoulders.  Just had to get all of it out :'(.

"NoBody"

Look at me
See who I turned out to be
Realize that in these eyes
Lies a person who is nobody

I once believed in dreams
That nothing is as hard as it seems
Than conscience came and redeemed me
From the person I believed I could be
And took me away from what I believed to be true
Found in my head a somebody suffocated dead
A person I once thought I knew
Though my eyes realize
The lies that before they couldn't see
Yet just another broken down person
Who would always be nobody

I saw your face today
Unlike all the others
Yet hauntingly the same
Your eyes visualized
All the pain I felt eternally
Struggling to find inside of yourself ~ Anybody
A hopless mind traced in remnants of the past
Dwelling over the person you would never be
Together for a second we were one
Though we were nobody


Okay, I feel really naked right now.  Like this is the most personal thing I've ever shared with anybody ever.  

no it doesn't! it's very touching and my personal favourite of the ones that have been posted in this thread. not many people seem to give feedback to this stuff. i don't usually, but that's not to say i dont like the other stuff, do, but i felt i had to reply to this one because i love it


*throws you some clothes* it's a cowgirl outfit  ;) the red one called 'rough rider'.

http://www.threewisheslingerie.com/cowgirl.asp

Same Story... Different Bitch


I'll tell you a little story  
'bout a girl I knew,  
she was one of a kind,  
maybe one of the few  
 
I told her that I want her  
and she said that she loved me,  
then she fucked me in the ass  
and she said "You're history"  
 
CHORUS:  
Same story, different bitch  
she might not be a preacher but she's got the right to preach  
Same story, different bitch  
The girl is screwed, you just got fooled and now she's out of reach
 
 
Some people said she was the one,  
with whom I'd get along,  
and others said she's just a fuck,  
that bitch is just so wrong  
 
I never listened to the ones  
who said she was a bitch,  
and it was motherfuckin' late  
when I found she was a witch.  


Repeat Chorus


I really fell for every line  
she said to me that night,  
and when she stopped I fingered her  
and then turned off the light  
 
 
I didn't think that it would last,  
it went on for three years,  
but then the bitch turned on her switch  
and left me back in tears  
 
This song I sing to you right now  
is based on a true story,    
It really happened years ago
but you don't have to worry  
 

Cause many people cum  ;) and go  
but I went down in glory,  
I wrote this song forgot the bitch  
but I have to say I'm sorry  
 
I should have mentioned her real name    
when I started this song  
So you won't fall for the same game  
and stay where you belong  


Her name was... fuck that, no more lawsuits for me bitch...


2002 (C) Christos Stypaggidis
All rights of these lyrics reserved. Unauthorised copying and broadcasting of these lyrics prohibited.

Here Today... Gone To Hell

I'm doin' time
because I stole
because I stole
a fuckin whore

I fucked her twice
but never paid
and all she said
was "man You're great"

unfortunately
her pimps were there
they beat me up
it was unfair

They kicked my ass
inside a cell
was Here Today
But Gone to hell...

(fast guitar solo)

I had this girl
so fuckin cute
to me she was
the sweetest fruit

but then one day
got back from work
to find her with
my mate - that dork

she said it's not
just what you think
she felt misunderstood
like Pink

The point is
you can never tell
you're Here Today...
but Gone To Hell...

I listened to my God tonight
He couldn't tell what's wrong from right

He knows he fucked up with this world
He thinks he might be getting old

He tried to save me from my sins
To save us from our kings and queens

And then He tried to cure my pain
But in the end He called me insane


Chorus:

It's needless to lie
It's needless to cry
It's needless to try
And fall from the sky

It's needless to say
You'll do it your way
When all you can do
Is shut up and pray


2nd Verse:

I listened to my God tonight
But couldn't help Him end his fight

He said that people shouldn't die
By all those guns they had to buy

He tried to talk me into church
He said "Believe but never search"

But He could see inside my eyes
I knew my truth, I knew His lies...

Repeat Chorus x 3

Closing:

I listen to my God sometimes
Because He always stops my crimes...


2003 (C) Christos Stypaggidis
All rights of these lyrics reserved. Unauthorised copying and broadcasting of these lyrics prohibited.

All of my secrets,  
And all my goodbyes,  
All of my dreams and thoughts,  
Are trapped in your eyes

Everything that I used to know,  
And all that I don't,  
Maybe I'll show you someday,  
And maybe I won't

Chorus:  

But whatever happens,
You should know,  
That I love you still,  
And time will never change,
The way that I feel

Baby believe me,  
Believe that it?s true,  
I never needed anyone,  
The way that I need you

2nd verse:
I'm lost without you,  
Lost in daylight,  
I gotta find you,  
gotta have you tonight

All that I ever wanted,  
And all that I need,  
Was you to stand beside me,  
Without you I bleed

Repeat chorus x2

(music fades out)

(starts again in another tempo, kinda faster but not so fast...)

This was my story,  
My truth in one song,  
I never lied to you,
But I admit I was wrong

Whatever happened to us?  
Where did we go?  
I wish you?re still happy girl
And just want you to know

2003 (C) Christos Stypaggidis
All rights of these lyrics reserved. Unauthorised copying and broadcasting of these lyrics prohibited.

I wrote this last night.  It's kind of weird I guess, but I don't follow any type of format or whatever when I write. I just write what I feel.  This sort of has double meanings.  It's about leaving your past behind, but it is also about leaving behind people who bring you down in life.  It's one of the more positive songs that I've written [ok].

"Leaving Town"

Childhood came and then went
On the outskirts my life was spent
Don't have the time to worry about that anymore,
You know things turn out in the weirdest ways
As much as I don't want to leave, I can't stay
But things just aren't like they were before.

Leaving this town behind
Walking away for the last time
Know in the back of my mind
Everything will end up fine
When I leave...leave this town behind

The sun on this long day has finally set
Still this life I'm living isn't over yet
I know so many things I don't want to know,
The night has come to steal the pain away
It will be back again with the break of day
When light shines on the memory of why you had to go.

Time is supposed to heal all wounds
I hope it will heal this one soon
'Cause I can't bear to live anymore with this pain,
Life keeps going on
Experience and mistakes keep making me strong
In life you always have to be willing to change.

Leaving this town behind
Walking away for the last time
Know in the back of my mind
Everything will end up fine
When I leave...leave this town behind

The road up ahead looks long and winding
Looking into the unknown is blinding
But there's something new always to be found,
So I'm picking up and going my own way
In this place I can no longer stay
Today is the day I'm leaving this town.

Thanks for your nice comments before tim :-*

yep!  [ok] another very good one hip, it holds together very well. the only problem i have with it is it's positiveness, lol. depressing poems are better, methinks.  here, have a kiss in return  :-*

This is a really weird song I guess.  I was really uhh fucked up when I wrote it, so it's positive and depressing at the same time.  It's a "fuck you preppies" song.  Rock 'n' fucking Roll dudes ;D

"One Day I Went Psycho"

Never said any of the things I needed to say
So none of you heard the things I wanted you to hear
But I don't give a fuck about what you think of me today
There's nothing about any of you to fear
You've all been officially declared dead
I've massacred all of you in my head
I'd forgotten for such a long time
How fun it was to play
Took me a long time to find myself
Until I went psycho today

You take so much
Until you can't take anymore
You never fight
For any of the things worth fighting for
You get lost in the stampede
By people desperate to be in the lead
Up until now I pretended that things were okay
Until I went psycho today

Became sick and tired
Of you treading on my territory
So what was once yours
Now belongs to me
Why should I even care
About people who never give a shit about anybody else
Life's so unfair, don't expect me to share
An ounce of information about my true self
I used to give a fuck
Until I realized it wasn't worth it
And that I had been put through to much
To even begin to give a shit
This life is one big price
To damn high to pay
Sick and tired of being in debt
Until I went psycho today

You take so much
Until you can't take anymore
You never fight
For any of the things worth fighting for
You get lost in the stampede
By people desperate to be in the lead
Up until now I pretended that things were okay
Until I went psycho today

So many voices
Screaming constantly
I have conversations with them all the time
What else am I supposed to do
When I am all alone in my mind
To the other side I've finally gotten through
Never thought I would be able to find the way
But everything became much clearer
Once I went psycho today

How can happy memories make you sad?
Thinking of you used to make me glad
Why did it have to end so bad?
I know, you gave all you had
But I wanted more and what for?
Now I?m alone, drinking, thinking
Sinking down into my bed
With all the voices in my head
Not knowing what to do
Cause I have nothing without you

Since that day you left, I?ve been on my own
Lived my life alone
Searching for a place called home

Grain of the Sea (by Redolance) [drooling]

Love is a grain of salt lying in the sea
crying for independance
the waves keeping her.

She is a shout of joy, cry for victory,
and a lustful occassion.
Love is a grain of salt lying in the sea.

Sometimes her voice is herd while
standing near the streets
the waves keeping her.

She is murdered with insults, boastings,
a laughter during recognition.
Love is a grain of salt lying in the sea.

She is a light to see with at night,
a warm breeze giving blooms in the Spring
the waves keeping her.

She smiles in innocents, benevolent
like rythm to a beautiful song.
Love is a grain of salt lying in the sea
the waves keeping her.

Even though most of your lyrics remind GN'R songs, I must say that it reminded me of my current shitty situation...

Good one dude...

The Meadows of Seeking (The Call of the Torn)

Life is a shadow
benevolent
Father who
roams with
destruction,
your finger
upon the iniquity
of children.
I sit in the
meadows
of seeking,
my heart
a dark cloud
ready to
rain, wondering
an occassion
without marvel,
but the harp
mustn't play
its song
of riddles
that trumpets
calling for
devils.
I look to
see the trees
shaking in the
wind, its
whispering vocals
accusing.
The fowl and
all creatures
that crawl
said to me staring,
"Our hearts
lye in our
keeper's hands."

Differnt style every day
Short skirt, long jacket?
It works, either way

Fresh, shaved and clean
It?s Friday night
If you know what I mean

It?s this girl I know
With a heart of ice
And eyes just as cold

She takes her money before she goes
It?s just business she says
And everybody knows

Not looking for love, just some fun
If she would
I?d guess she?d run

It?s this girl I know
With a heart of ice
And eyes just as cold

Drinking beer and smoking pot
It?s her way to laugh a lot
Or maybe not?

Live fast and die young
It?s the only way
And she really gets some

It?s this girl I know
With a heart of ice
And eyes just as cold

hey,

we play guns covers in and around bristol (UK) as well as our own stuff - ill try n get a guns cover uploaded, but for now here's a song of ours called 'changing tides' :

http://www.inextremisonline.co.uk/In%20Extremis%20-%20Changing%20Tides.mp3

Hope you like it.
Please give feedback - rip it apart, we need all the criticism we can get as we're recording four new songs in two weeks time.

Thanks,
Bob

p.s. our website has another track on the main page called 'innocence' which is more rocky, and u can download changing tides there too if the link above fails : www.inextremisonline.co.uk

Here's the lyrics:

Something's hurting in my side
I've been caught in the changing tide
All I ask of you is to remain true to me
Cause I'm lost in the growing sea

Hey you there with the broken soul
Your eyes are sad but your standing tall
It's up to you I'm sorry, please make it through
Hey you there with the scars in your eyes
Listen up I won't tell you twice
I'm in the way, I need you

When I wake up I see the sun, but it is burning me
When it pleases something is left undone, so tie it up now

Hey you there in the black disguise
Your naked thoughts light up the skies
It's time to see the truth, please make it through
Something's hurting in my side
I've been caught in that changing tide
It's up to you I'm sorry, please make it through.

When I wake up I see the sun, but it is burning me
When it pleases something is left undone,
So tie it up
So tie it up
When I wake up something is left undone,
So tie it up
When I wake up I see the sun is burning

that doesnt seem to work - try this direct link:

http://www.gnr.pwp.blueyonder.co.uk/inextremis/In%20Extremis%20-%20Changing%20Tides.mp3

hey, im kinda new to heretodaygonetohell.com..and iv just seen this msg board. hope u like my stuff! (btw, they're copywrited, so dont be naughty! [ok]

Spanking Monkeys

Get your whips out
and lets begin
into your PVC now
aint it fun to sin
feel the pain
it's kinda nice
I'm getting off
I spank you twice
I'm not too sure
ir it's right for kids to see
do you think it's wierd
I'm spankin a monkey?

I've always had a fetish
for things that you'd find sick
for instance screwing dead people
that's where I get my kicks
their rotting corpses
can't complain
so I pump them harder
I'm an attraction for the insane
I'm not too sure
if it's right for kids to see
do you think it's wierd
I'm abusing a dead body?

...hehe, it's not finished yet, but what do you think!?
before you ask, no I don't spank monkeys, and I don't abuse corpses... ;)
tell us what ya think
luv
franni
xoxoxoxoxox

 [hihi] i like it

This is from a few years ago.  I think if I remember correctly I wrote this when I was 14 or 15, and came to the realization that men are assholes.  It's a "men suck more balls then I ever will song".  Sorry to all the few good men out there, you know me still luv ya's [love] :-* [love]


"Just Like a Man"

Pushed down
Shoved away
Looking around
For the right words to say

You open your mouth
Only to blow out hot air
Then looked surprised and confused
When you find out I don't care

Isn't it just like a man
To never completely understand
Isn't it just like a man
To make numerous unreasonable demands
Isn't it just like a man
To never give a damn
Aren't you just another typical man

Your ego encompasses you fully
There's no way around it
Can't see through to the otherside
I keep on slipping away bit by bit
'Cause you claim to have big balls
But then you don't use them
So I'm convinced that yours are really small
Just like most mens

Isn't it just like a man
To never completely understand
Isn't it just like a man
To make numerous unreasonable demands
Isn't it just like a man
To never give a damn
Aren't you just another typical man

Is it really that hard to be thoughtful
Is it really that hard to have feelings you share
What is so wrong with giving out reasons to like you
Why now should I even care

Was it all to get me into your bed
Did you imagine the sex would be great
How long did it take you to realize...
You can't use your DICK as bait

'Cause I have a tendency to reel people in
And then spit them back out
Without even giving it a second thought
Or having an ounce of doubt

Because when you hurt my heart
Then there's nothing else I would rather do
But rip out your heart out
And hurt yours too

That's not being insensitive
That's not being unfair
That's reciprocating
The only feelings you knew how to share

Isn't it just like a man
To never completely understand
Isn't it just like a man
To make numerous unreasonable demands
Isn't it just like a man
To never give a damn
Aren't you just another typical man

Isn't it just like you to be another typical man
Who will keep on trying...but will NEVER understand

i like it... men are pricks at the best of time.

Your ego encompasses you fully
There's no way around it
Can't see through to the otherside
I keep on slipping away bit by bit
'Cause you claim to have big balls
But then you don't use them
So I'm convinced that yours are really small
Just like most mens"

oooooh, yeah  [hihi]

xoxoxoxoxoxoxo

This is a short poem I wrote about my first love.

Hey, Michael
I've been loving you since I was riding a tricycle
and when I got a little older
you were the only one that could make my stomach flutter
and melt my heart like butter
you're my castle in the sky
my only wish
my sweet piece of pie. [love]

I'm still trying to search
Why am I trying?
Why doesn't it emerge?

Looking at the clock,
time is what it takes
Holding thorns or releave,
what difference will it make?

Sitting here looking at my hands,
wondering....
what makes them shake?

Still searching my way,
hiding myself behind my guitar...

When will I find this stain?
Why is it so deep inside my heart?
Will the strings release my pain?

Heres a song i wrote for my band

My funeral

Written by Certaxe

Enter the black hardened door of the yard
in witch a coffin is in the ground
as its lowered you and others weep
why oh why do you weep for me?

koruz--
Im dead ha ha ha ha ha ha
and this is my funeral
I watch forever i must
from ashes to ashes
from dust to dust
--

Why cry for me?
I bury for fate in this Earth
<<solo MANIFESTO>>
No no no no no no
Never shall I rise again
Nailed into my coffin
never to rise
oh why do you weep?
(rep K)

<<solo MANIFESTO>>
Lower in the ground
6 feet under rotting flesh and bone
this is my fate
<<solo Holly>> - &&to fade&&
<<solo MANIFESTO>>
"He must not rise again"
but ill sleep here until the day
the nails they rust and my body raised
ill find you and give you
<<Solo MANIFESTO>>
My fate
(Rep K)

Raised, ill be the king of pain
my past life obsolette
a walking blastphomy
ill be true sacrilige
I rape the priestess
I am coming
<<solo Holly and MANIFESTO>>
I am coming for you

I've written a few songs, but they were all really slow ballad/dirge type things (although better than the song below).  I mean, some of them sounded pretty cool and artsy, but I wanted to try and write something with a little more balls, more of a rock 'n' roll song.  The best I got was a stupid KISS-type song that originated just from my thoughts of wanting to be a rock star.  Anyway, tell me what you think.  By the way, it's not a finished song, more just like random scribblings.  But I want to see if I should bother continuing and working on it.

Working titles - ROCK 'N' ROLL DREAMS
                      -  SEX, DRUGS, AND ROCK 'N' ROLL

I was a high school loser
Til we started that band
The key to heaven was
The guitar in my hands

A hundred sweaty clubs
And a thousand sleepless nights
At the end of the tunnel
I see my rock 'n' roll light

I wanna be...a guitar hero
I wanna be...a star, not a zero
I wanna watch my dreams unfold
I want sex, drugs, and rock 'n' roll

That's all I've got so far.

Being male, obviously my opinion is going to be biased.  But I just thought it was interesting to note that if I were to write a song like that about women, I would be branded a sexist, misogynist pig.  I gotta confess, when I hear women talk like this about men, it makes me want to just crank up Use Your Illusion and blast a little "Back Off Bitch".  But if I put all that aside, I think that your song is actually pretty good.  I mean, it's angry, but it does feel like a SONG, not just a lot of complaints.  Almost something you might expect from Axl Rose or Eminem if they were women.  So I'll give it a thumbs-up.  [ok]

Er...by the way, is there any truth in the belief that women always go for assholes over "nice guys"?  That's just the way it seems to me.

If you men are "offended" by my diatribe concerning the opposite sex, switch the word "man," with "woman," tinker with the verses a bit, and there ya go.

When I wrote this, I wanted to rant and rave and get shit off my chest, yet still keep a universal feel to the thing as well, be it a woman, or a man, could relate to it in the end.

It's one of those, go fuck off and get as far away from me as humanely possible type of songs.

Yeah, I wasn't really in the most pleasant of moods when that one got written. If nothing else it was a great venting moment.

Cheers boys [beer]!!!

Always.  Women will tell you until their pretty little faces turn blue that they want nice guys, but who do you actually see them dating?  The assholes!   :P

   I will have to agree with you on this one Dizzy.  So many women are gluttons for punishment.

    **abhorrent**            ......'copyrighted'
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I DON'T NEED YOU,NEVER SURE I DID
FUCK ME OVER, TOO MANY TIMES TO COUNT
I BLAME ME
I LET YOU IN AND YOU USED ALL THE THINGS I SAID
MADE THEN YOUR OWN, BELIEVED IT WAS YOUR DUE
YOUR DAY IS COMING MAN....
RETRIBUTION IS AT HAND
I AM FERMIUM,CLOSING OUT YOUR LIFE
BITTER?NEVER, PAY BACK IS A BITCH
AND I HAVE YOU IN MY SIGHTS
ONE FLICK, ONE FINGER, I'LL ALL BE OVER
TOO EASY...I WANT YOU TO FEEL
LET THE PAIN SPEAR YOUR SOUL, RAPE YOUR HEART
JUST WANT TO GIVE A LITTLE BACK
LISTENING TO LOVE SONGS TO STOP THE BLACK
TURN THE CLOCK BACK
JUST TO WHEN I DIDN'T HATE
IT'S TEARING ME APART

"Buried Treasure"

Bare hearts and souls
Stripped clean of feeling
Wounds and scars have made us who we are
Though we refuse to let bygones go perchance of healing
Why drown in a past
That will refuse to change
Forsaking the future
And placing upon it  blame

Empty buckets we will fill
Full to the top with so many things
Acting as treasure chests
Holding the many gifts life brings

It must all be buried treasure
That I can't seem to find
I've looked high and low
And just about everywhere you could possibly go
But have reached the end of time
Never did I take a moment to see
The person it was inside of me
Or spare a dime for a piece of mind
The buried treasure has been
Locked within me all this time

If I'm granted the privilege of seeing tomorrow
Will I only be wasting my chances living off of yesterday's sorrows
I've learned the hard way that time isn't something you can just simply borrow
But something that is gone before you even know the path you want to follow

Full buckets we will empty
Overflowing to the top with so many things
Discarding our treasure chests
That hold the many gifts life brings

It must all be buried treasure
I've looked everywhere for it
But to it I must be blind,
I've searched high and low
And everywhere you could possibly go
Yet never took the time to look for it inside.
Could you spare me a dime
So I could buy a piece of mind
In hopes of finding buried treasure
That I've desperately longed to find
'Cause never before could I see
The person who was inside of me
Before I reached the end of time
We all must be like buried treasure
That none of us ever find

I wrote this song initially because I'm kind of a skinny guy, and people don't think I can do anything, but I was trying to write about how there's a lot of anger lurking beneath the surface and I can do a lot more than you think.  The lyrics are pretty stupid, because it kind of devolved into a song about killing someone and having revenge, which isn't really what I want to write about.  But anyway, here it is.  It's very influenced by Kill 'Em All-era Metallica, after I learned how simple the words to "Whiplash" were.

"Vengeance Is Mine"

You may have thought you knew me,
Thought I couldn't hurt a fly
Looks like you thought wrong, punk
'Cause now you're gonna die
Pompous little bitch
Thought you were really tough
Maybe you'll think different soon
Because now I've had enough

(CHORUS)
Paper tiger's papercut
Doors of fate are slamming shut
Had enough of being kind
Now your life is out of time
VENGEANCE IS MINE

Run pig, run
I'll let you set the pace
You won't stand a chance
When fate wins every race

(CHORUS)

Watch you may, your own morality play
See the villain meet his end
And to all those that would cross me
Heed this warning that I send

(CHORUS)

"Wasteland"         (Copyrighted)

It's a cold night here in my corner of the world
The wind howls as mournfully as a lone wolf
Crying out with all the essesnce of it's lonely soul
To the absolute nothingness that surrounds him
The emptyness............

It's a cold night here on my mountain
The stars shine down as boldly as precious gems
Sparkling with all the hopes of one's imagination
With all the dreams that may come true
They are so far away..............

It's a cold night here on my island
The ocean roars as deeply as thunder
Sending wave upon black wave crashing onto these shores
With a vengefull wrath unrivaled by our own mythical Gods
The turmoil..............

It's a cold night here in my wasteland
The ground is as barren as the face of the moon
Eternally frozen like Dante's hell
With all the comforts of a bed of nails
I think of it as home.............

EDIT: I guess I should copyright this huh?.........Ok......

Okay .. here's something I wrote .. once upon a time ...

Untitled

(Theme - My Hypocritical Life) (If you can think of a suitable name ... please tell me)

king of my castle
slave to my pride
friend to my enemy
with darkness I hide

Stuck in a box
I loathe to the bone
I lie to get out
lie to not be alone

in company I keep
heathens of trust
believe what I said
believe what I must

far flung from reality
my world is not mine
never said it was
it never was fine

open
eyes
listen
lies

flick your switch
turn on the light
switch your flick
turn off the lie


(Erm .. copyrighted and all that crap ... WHY? I dunno .. some of it may be good .. )

Well, well.........wonders never cease...the Wagster posted.......and it was the "poem" no less.........good stuff man..................<over-enthusiastic thumbs-up>...lol.......

Try this one on for size ..

======================
letting her go (Copyrighted ... )
======================

first, thought I might say ...

why would you,
believe something
have faith, want to see
what might never have meant to be

but, pain's a hateful thing ... I might have said ..

You mean less, I said to her,
color my world in shades of gray...
kill my mind, and spawn no feeling,
you never have or ever will make my day...

instead i let her go ...

Never trust, I told her,
Believe and you will be proven wrong
never tell the world your truth
never sing loud your heart's only song...

you'll want less, I told her,
when you realise how much there is to give
you'll die less, for each day you realise
the beauty of the life you're going to live...

you'll walk on, I told her,
albeit reluctantly,
for you'll know they kill,
but choose, not to see ...

you'll dream big, I told her,
of something good
something we can ..
something we should

Live for your dream, I told her,
live through your dream,
never accept defeat,
inevitable as it may seem...

don't fret the bad, I told her,
don't pain when you're hurt
instead learn to stand up,
and dust off the dirt...

when winter comes, I told her,
you'll look for all that once was,
and you'll cry for it never will be again,
then you'll feel it all pause...

don't fall down, I told her,
when you go, lie down,
accept what's been dealt to you,
always with a smile, never a frown ...

Latest by me, called : WAKING UP/ COPYRIGHTED



When I open the shutters, all I can hear is the terrible noise the street sends to my ears.
I decide to get washed and dressed, I know half of the building is doing the same,
I end up with cold water to shower, I?m freezing and I point the finger with blame,
But I have to go out to face the world a bit; the end of my sacred isolation is near.

So I do what I have to do, and I end up getting dressed, slowly, gaining more time
I feed the cat, remind myself to check every room to close all the lights
I go towards the door and open it, getting a breeze of cool air, tell myself ?Alright?!
Finally reach the main entrance and there I am, outside, still feeling fine.

I know it won?t last, it never does, there is always something that pisses me off quickly
Like some old lady walking her dog, dog that shits on the pavement in front of me
Or some driver who goes too fast in the street, enough to eventually kill a kiddie
And again, the people, looking lost and frightened, hiding behind a mask of nasty.

Yeah, I know I?m pissed off, that?s it, the day starts, I am out and have to stay out
I?m told it?s good to breathe some air, air that?s polluted anyway, air that stinks
I cross the road and get to the bank, see armed men in a van, I think it?s the ?brinks?
They seem lost too, paranoid, doing a 360 with their heads out of pure fright

Lovely world of ours, lovely people, lovely everything, yeah, I?ll tell myself ?i?m out!?
What am I supposed to fucking do? If I smile, I might annoy some sad soul that day
If I cry, I know people will avoid me, it?s themselves they see, them I could portray
So I keep neutral, for everyone?s sake, I lose the smile, the tears and the light

I haven?t even started the next hour, there I see young girls eating a hamburger
Oh fucking diet, fucking weight, fucking McDonalds, dirty food that smells so good
I have to rush towards the metro to forget, I try to bring on the French attitude
I forgot the look at my watch, no, I don?t wear any, I ask someone about the hour.

Christ, I?m late, lost in contemplation, I have to run, catch the train, fast!
But I don?t feel like it, I know I?m pissed off, I go back home to make a call
The meeting is annulled, I fake a story, end up with a ?sorry for it all?
And make myself a cup of coffee, slowly, wanting to make now last.

Oh dear home, even with my shutters closed, you are my nest, my hole,
Outside is just grim, I didn?t really need to go, I?ll do it again, another day
I just wanted to feel good, not depressed by people, wanted to have my way
I go back to bed, bliss, slowly drift, knowing it wasn?t worth that day after all.

Very nice Jess !!  : ok: :yes:

"And In Sorrow I Drown" by Brian ("Drew")

You play with my head
You screw with my thoughts
You lie to my face
And tell me my faults

You pick me up
Then you bring me back down
You rip out my heart
And in sorrow I drown

You only want me
In just one way
Me as your game
When your ready to play

As though I give in everytime
And again I fall victim to your crime
When I ask you if you have special feelings for me
You laugh and say, "Are you fuckin' crazy?"

You do not see things, the way I do
You say I'm young and naive, and such a fool
There have been times, when I've offered you my heart
But you only tell me. "That's not very smart!"

Day after day
You say I should go
But I only return
To hear you say "NO!"

Sometimes I hate you
And make you wanna pay
For all the hurt
You throw my way

Even though I fall victim
To your game
I try to convince myself
It's not me who's insane

You pick me up
Then you bring me back down
You rip out my heart
And in sorrow I drown

Untitled-2 by Brian ("Drew")

laying on my side
watching the time tick away
wanting this torment
to end with the day

although i get up
i lay right back down
not wanting to show
my face to this town

the day is warm
but my heart feels so cold
i'd rather waste the day
as this feeling takes hold

begging the night
to come quickly
so i can take my pills
and sleep silently

for i end another day
wishing of a better tomorrow
a smile would be welcomed
instead of all this sorrow

Good stuff man..... : ok:
I like...........

This is like my third post here..... I feel kinda awkward showing my work since I don't really share it much just as written word...


Fade Away (Wright/Williams)

All those years I've spent
Giving you your track
Just another word to say
Bringing all the memories back

Nothing more to say
Get on your knees and pray
Never had the clue
It was all coming back to you

To walk through this world alone
Is a fate that's worse than death
To watch a dying friend
Fade his last breath

I won't fade away
I am here to stay
You can put be down
And push me round
But I won't fade away

You try to be normal
Wearing clothes that are formal
But inside your heart
You feel torn so apart

I won't fade away
I am here to stay
You can put be down
And push me round
But I won't fade away

I'm not like the others before
I know what I'm in for
I'm not going to lay down to die
I'm not going to sit and cry

I won't fade away
I am here to stay
You can put be down
And push me round
But I won't fade away

Thankyou MCT ! I appreceiate your feedback very much !!  :yes:

Really nice work Toast960 ! Very encouraging !!  : ok:

time to add something, i already made the chorus, and i've got all the music set, but i only just added the lyrics now........man i love them now (despite what u guys might think) please dont steal them. cheers  :beer:

"Nothing to lose" by Oddy copyright

I'm going no where fast
Never thought i'd finish last
But what saves my soooouuuuuuul
is the desire to

rock n rooooooooooooll

Everything's a haze
I can't change my ways
I got nothing to dooooooo
And i got nothing to loooooooose

People say i'm crazy
but you'll never stop me baby
Like twisted sister i just can't stooooooooooop
I say to you

I waaaaaant tooooo roooooooock ooooo yeah

Everything's a haze
I can't change my ways
I got nothing to dooooooo
And i got nothing to loooooooose

rock it!

*1min crazy guitar solo*
*breakdown to a change of pace*
heeeeeeeyeaaaaaa hey heeeey heeeeeeeeeey
(heeeeeeeyeaaaaaa hey heeeey heeeeeeeeeey)
heeeeeeeyeaaaaaa hey heeeey heeeeeeeeeey *lower*
(heeeeeeeyeaaaaaa hey heeeey heeeeeeeeeey) *lower*

heeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeey! aaaaaaaaaaoooooooow *tyler like scream*

I'm going no where fast
Never thought i'd finish last
But what saves my soooouuuuuuul
is the desire to

rock n rooooooooooooll ohhhhh yeah!

Everything's a haze
I can't change my ways
I got nothing to dooooooo
And i got nothing to loooooooose

*just hand clapping and drums*
(everybody now!)
Everything's a haze
I can't change my ways
I got nothing to dooooooo
And i got nothing to loooooooose

*huge pick scrape breaking into music, lead guitar carries on basically freestyling*

Everything's a haze
I can't change my ways
I got nothing to dooooooo
And i got nothing to loooooooose

oooooh yeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaahheeeeeeeyoeaaaaah!

all lyrics are by Oddy, don't take, hopefully that'll reach the 6min mark, thats wat todays rock needs in my opinion.

Rock on!

by the way i meant longer songs is what today's commercial rock needs, hahahah not my song.

This is not my brainchild......but what the fuck.......

There was a young lady named Susie
Who everyone thought was a floozy
She liked boy scout troops
and Shriners, in groups
"What the hell?" She replied. "I'm not choosy"
---------------------------------------------------------------------------

A limerick of classic proportion
should have meter and rhyme and a portion
of humor quite lewd
and a fashionably crude
impossible sexual contortion

This is for the Wagster.........

A lady who lives in New Delhi
has habits disgusting and smelhi.
She likes to eat feces
of various species
(The recipe is tattooed on her belhi)

Here you go people this is a song my brother wrote hes in a band called anemia and he wanted me to put one of their songs up here to see what yall thought there a cross between Static-X and KoRn.


                          Anemia
                          "Recreate the Hate"

You think your perfect and great,and you think I'm a loser,well I have all this angst and pain,I really do hate you,sometimes I wish bad things on you.

I want to watch your life burn down and see you go to hell,because that is what you deserve.

You try to ruin my life,but your only ruining your own.I have all this hate that I want to recreate.

You dislike me,but I hate you.I wish you would just.(ha ha).I want to recreate the HATE,I want to recreate the angst,I want to recreate the HATE.

(Screaming part)

                                  RECREATE.
                                  RECREATE THE HATE.
                                   RECREATE
                                  RECREATE THE ANGST.

 :rofl:..........................sounds like your brother is a very happy young man................ :rofl:

That song makes me think of Hanson............. : ok:

Here is one I wrote a while back...

WHat ya think guys?

Forgotten But Remembered

I never thought I would come to this,
Kept so far away from something that I wanted so bad.
I never came close to what I would have had and what could?ve been.
With people so one dimensioned I can?t never ever win.

Taking long breathes and leaving shorter sighs is my life?s demise;
Long and painful with a short ending without a cause? is what it will come down to.
Creeping up on me is a feeling I can?t stop,
It makes me hollow sometimes from the bottom of my heart to the top.

I?ll be remembered after forgotten;
Knowing that I never meant that much to you hurts me inside
Swings into me like a razor?s edge.
My feelings now, that?s something I just can?t hide anymore.

For what I know and what I show is something different from you.
I?m sorry for the times we fight;
Didn?t know I?ll be forgotten without knowing I was remembered.
To me you were always my bright oh so ever lasting light.

Even though I already said, in a very indirect way though, that those limericks weren't mine.........I shall say again...just to avoid controversy.......I didn't make them up.

well the light still flickers in this cold little room
we've been at odds lately
have I been singin' out of tune?
do we gotta a chance left baby?

Well I feel the cold cement under my feet
standin' in this room
just tryin' to figure
whatever happened to you an me
from a mansion full of grace
to a little room, empty and misplaced
yeah I guess we got lost in the things
lost for days
wandering around this maze

there's never enough
from the benz to the diamond rings
you loved it all untill one day you loved it more
well honey I'm layin on this cement floor
just thinkin of times between you and me
but animosity is takin' control
so woman you better find yourself
before the greed gets a hold
and your forced to sell it all
just to stay out of the cold

cause girl you spent your time in pursuit
collecting things while life passed you by
now your youth is gone
and your head's up in the sky
while fantasies of riches soar
your reality is on the corner
beggin for more

yeah whatever we had is gone
I'm sleepin' on a cement floor
tryin' to figure out what went wrong
and your still bangin at the door
trying to get your hands on anything
cause all you ever wanted was more
yeah your drove me into poverty
breaking my heart
but you still can't figure it out
that the only thing we have for sure
is the one thing you don't even care about

cause girl you spent your time in pursuit
collecting things while life passed you by
now your youth is gone
and your head's up in the sky
while fantasies of riches soar
your reality is on the corner
beggin for more

Well I can't believe this mess
they threw me into county the another night
then they tried to get me to confess
to crime I didn't commit, yeah

Well I can't believe this mess
the judge stared me right in the face
and told me I better confess
if I ever wanna leave this place

Well justice ain't never looked so ugly
I closed my eyes for a second
and the whole system is tryin' to fuck me
from the county recorder
to the local reporter
no one cares enough to see
how this system makes a simple man bleed
yeah they'll draw blood on the working class
they'll turn us against one another
it's all happened so fast
that one day you'll find yourself
pickin' on your own mother

well it's the rich and elite
using misinformation
making the working class bleed
do they ever stop condesending?
lady justice is fuckin' me
and my neighbors are judging me
but before they know it
they'll be joining me

gnr157, cool, I like it!

Latest by me : Sometimes ( don't think it's good but still)


A word can sting like a dart, sometimes
Some sentence wounds deep in
Probably didn?t mean anything
A heart can break, sometimes

How the heart goes sore, hurt
How the hurt drenches my pores
How my pores want to melt
Melt, pain, and don?t want more

Sometimes I love you, need your touch
Sometimes, I hate you do much too
Sometimes, sometimes, do I live for sometimes?
Do I live to wait for you to love me, sometimes?

A word can show the road, sometimes
A way I was afraid to take, before
Because of a reaction, not anymore
A heart can be proud, sometimes

How would you feel to know?
How would you see my tears?
How these tears drench my face
Face to face, no where to go.

How would you feel to know?
How would you see my fears?
How these fears blocked my needs
Need to know, here to know...

Sometimes I love you, need your touch
Sometimes, I hate you do much too
Sometimes, sometimes, do I live for sometimes?
Do I live to wait for you to love me, sometimes?

Sometimes I think of you like you want me to
Sometimes I make a wish to forget about you
Sometimes, sometimes, do I live for sometimes?
Please be mine, now, love me, once, be mine.

one of 2 songs i wrote today... quite odd for beeing me  :nervous:

My New Era


Its time for a new life.
My past has been gray.
The wisdom has faded.
And all gone away

Time for some changes,
Paint my world bright.
But it aint that easy,
To leave it behind

Welcome to a new era!
where the gray fades away
Ev'rything comes bright n' clean
Though nothing seems to be for real

Wash away the colors of the past
Leave the past behind
I aint the first, and not the last
Start a new life
It aint easy, aint gonna come fast
Welcome to a new era
Cheer up, Remove the broken cast
The gray fade away
   
Welcome to a new era!
where the gray fades away
Ev'rything comes bright n' clean
Though nothing seems to be for real

I want on top of the world
Stay there for a while
Paint my psycodelic brain black
But i sure aint goin' back!

Welcome to a new era!
where the gray fades away
Ev'rything comes bright n' clean
Though nothing seems to be for real


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thisi s what i do when im trying to get some sleep 5o'clock in the morning when i should be driving my dad off to the doctor at 9 the next day.......  : ok:  
the other song needs some petting before i dare do anything with it!!  : ok:


oh, and * an C with a ring around* Captain P?l!

Wrote this today

When things come to an end

My heart beats faster than usual today
And my head spins in many directions
I tremble of anger, I cry of delusion
I shout all the things I couldn?t say

I wish I could trash the whole place down
Break any memory in pieces
I have to wait more, more patience
I wish I could destroy that man

So much anger, so much hate
Him, his family, his ways
I thought it was my destiny, fool?s fate
I thought I was destined to decay

Only took one morning to realise
I am going to be free once more
I couldn?t call for help, stupid pride
Now I do, calling family ashore

Who knows where I?ll be in 6 months?
Who cares, as long as I am safe, happy?
Will be talking my pride, my cat, my stuff
And hopefully, will chance a new me.

I am a lost heart, a broken one, on the mend
I am like all souls who have grieved a love
Like all souls who needed to be loved
Like anyone, when things come to an end.

Wrote this 10 mn ago :

DAD

You have not been gone a year
Every day reminds me of you
Every month, layer by layer
The vision of you falls through

I wish you were still by me
Shouting, telling me to grow up
Telling me of what I should see
Simply me not giving a fuck

In your own words, you were there
I couldn?t tell you, I loved you
Now I do, everyday, so sincere
Hoping you hear me Illyanou

How I wish I could pick up the phone
You?d be telling me about your days
I?d know just by your voice, your tone
We had found our own little ways

In your own words, you were there
I couldn?t tell you, I loved you
Now I do, everyday, so sincere
Hoping you hear me Illyanou

Now more than ever, I need you
The only comfort, imagining your presence
Life is hard right now, without you
Without my father, without your advice

In your own words, you were there
I couldn?t tell you, I loved you
Now I do, everyday, so sincere
Hoping you hear me Illyanou

You have not been gone a year
Your birthday is getting closer
February will be sad this year
I miss you dad, I miss my father.

Jessica, those are beautiful.  Keep on writing more!  :)

thank you, i hope i haven't depressed you too much, it was enough to depress myself for 6 months... :crying:

Thank you for posting this beautiful poem.

Beautiful...hope your doing fine...very special shared thoughts here.  Thank you.

I am working on a new song titled "Magic Moment". I am inspired to share a song but out of respect I think I'll wait.

After reading "DAD"...

C

 "Redemption"- Part 1 - (Copyrighted)


In darkness, on my knees
In a forest full of rotting trees

Far away from prying eyes
From the monsters I despise

Monotonous prayers invade my mind
As answers here, I seek to find

From a God who isn't there
A God I search for in despair

For I have crawled through all these years
Burdened by my sullen fears

Of what some robot thinks of me
Of why I'm here, what I'm to be

And as I watch my fears unfurl
Trapped inside my sterile world

I feel that I've nowhere to turn
For simple things I've yet to learn

Of life, and love, and harmony
Oh how I wish my eyes could see

If only that these things were real
For me to touch, to taste, to feel

"All This Time"

Looking for answers that I may never find
Only to discover I had them all this time
Masterful manipulation of somebody else's mind
You can love somebody whole-heartedly
Only to discover they never loved you all this time

Reflecting back on a year and a half
I lack words to express what I once had
What I once would give blood for
Doesn't matter anymore
The one playing the game all this time
Has unfortunately won
In this devestation I find
It was already over
before it had even begun
But I'm not the only one
Staring back at the same reflection
You can run away leaving what you created unfinished
As over time I find so much has diminished
Still what I longed to be completed
Will now never be done
Still the decision was yours as well
I'm not the only one

Accepting that truth to somebody else
Can sometimes only mean lies to yourself
I find after all this time
The answers to your questions
Layed deep within my mind
Though the words you would speak
Sounded temptingly sweet
Blackened intenitons are only meant to blind
As I look back
Upon the last year and a half
I realize you never really even cared all this time

Feelings in vain never felt
Alongside everybody else you I cannot help
Step over to the other side
Without my former self too far behind
There is nothing more I would like
Then for the two of us into one~ melt
But upon our heads lies the burdens
And nobody else
You have the answers as do I
But we share them not with each other
Only with ourselves

As in every ending there is some beginning
Places you never expected to find
Person under anoither person you never thought you would know
To the world what is it your truly giving
As in another person's mind you've been living
But haven't we been  each others victim though

I can't seem to mind
What I've failed to accept all this time
Certain situations leave a person far from being whole
Though in remenants I find
What I never wanted to accept all this time
You never wanted love
Just somebody to control

This is the most recent one I wrote.  Still working on a tune for it.

"I've Had Enough"
Written by El Drewman
Jan. 25-28, 2004, Boston, MA

VERSE ONE
You made me feel like shit
When I did nothing to hurt you.
Make me feel I wasted
So much time on being nice.
And then you kicked me in the teeth
And lied about me too.
You never seemed to get enough
Attention is your vice.
You threw it all away and thought
There's nothing I would do.
You thought that you had won it all
But you didn't know the price.
You can slam me all you want
Find another to pursue.
But will you do it all again
When other problems arise?

CHORUS
When you go through it too
I hope it's hard, I hope it's slow
So you can get a little taste
Of how you treated me.
You took it out from under me
I give it back to you
You showered me with hatred
And now my anger grows.

VERSE TWO
Those who once liked me before
Just listen to your myth
Put on the charm, feign innocence
They'll do all that you need.
When I ask what you said of me
You choose to plead the fifth
If you're trying to ruin my life
You've nearly begun to succeed.
Now I'm out to clear my name
Across every valley and cliff
But wrecking my name with everyone
Appears your life's new creed.
I wanted to keep our fighting clean
Wish it didn't come to this
You fuck with me, I fuck you back
Just following your lead.

CHORUS

VERSE THREE
You want my wrath, you got it now
Though it follows silently.
You may not see it right now
But you'll realize it soon.
Reaction coming quiet
Won't fall on you violently.
I'll work it slowly all around
I'm starting with this tune.
I won't let you tell your lies
As I stand by idly.
Soon you'll feel abandoned
On the dark side of the moon.
Fight back all you want
Swinging, missing wildly.
Finally we'll be even
Even though we'll both be ruined.

CHORUS

SPOKEN
Across the paths
And through the halls
Inside my mind
I never fall
I take you down
I've had enough
Revenge comes fast
Revenge comes rough

CHORUS

END
Revenge comes fast
Revenge comes rough
I'll take you down
I've had enough
(Repeat a few times)

Hey that's decent loretian.........I was singing it instead of reading it....lol.......it has an old rock n roll feel...blended with a breath of fresh air from a different generation....namely you......

Hippie...........I like "All This Time".........one question though...........in the end.....it's all a pure reflection right?................I mean....you're not calling for change per se are you?.........or perhaps you are and I never picked it up.........

Thanks man, I really appreciate that!  :)

I've recorded part of it, but my recording stuff isn't working now, so I gotta buy new recording equipment to finish it up...  hopefully, with D's help, it'll sound kinda decent.  I'll post it when it's finished.

"Magic Moment"
  copyright 2004-cdp

(dedicated to a very old soul in my personal life)


It felt like we knew eachother from another place and time
When our eyes locked it was when your lips looked at mine
How could it be that you'd remember me, after all of this time

You know I died that day
As you watched me walk away
Nothing really mattered to me
I left everything behind, but the magic moment

SOOOO I ran away...so far away that you couldn't stay the same
Why didn't you leave it that way
the way it should have been...It was our moment


Everyday now, It's what you wanted the pain I'm feeling,
Is what you always needed it to be...
So run away, so far away, you can't stay this way
If there is something beyond, a magic moment

You know I died that day
As you watched me walk away
Nothing really mattered to me
But the Magic moment

A magic moment...

I love it heartathome. And it makes me remember something too. We have all had a magic moment someday and in my case, i hope i'll get to live another one and that it"ll last this time.

   Track 4

   Bust-A-Cap

chorus:   bust a cap- life flashing rap,
   murderer on the run, DEAD now - could use a gun
   cause hell is mean, demons scream, fight and ream-
   with terror from below, no rock, no fun no ho's........
   was it worth the hit?, no mo rappin, shit!
   darkness calls, blood-stained halls,  the toughest lack balls........

   Anotha tale from tha hood, up to no good,
   mafucka owes me some skrilla,
   can't believe this shit - don't they know i'm a killa?
   fukn runt, puffin blunts, load my clip, through  shadows i slip, creep up behind - outta my mind,
   chillin with his boys - esteemin their car-toys,
   send ya'll to hell - dead witness ain't gonna tell,
   4 dead bodies in a parking lot, fukn blazing gun still red-hot
   pick up the ho's - not taking any no's,
   still on tha murder high - clothes fly - juices dry,
   5-0 sirens pierce tha dark, showed my teeth - fukn shark
   now i'm on the run, with a gun, hope i see tha sun!,
   hit the clubs one last time, slang some rhyme, on rock, outta my mind
   freestyle for tha club homies, time runnin out - on my knees,
   sirens comin gotta run, ain't packin-shit! gun lackin,
   outta ammo, outta luck, here they come-Fuck!,
   back- alley running , home-posse snitched and ditched,
   stashed AK for the homecrew, last back-stab in lieu
   face some hard time for tha night-crime someone dropped a dime
   cause the cops at my house - screaming kids, pushed spouse,
   flea down the block, in shock, outta stock-need more rock,
   old lady's shocked face-other race, jacked her car i'm goin far,
   bright city lights crack the night, tearing away no time to stay,
   red light slip  - cop lights rip - fucked, now the scales tipped
   over the bridge or back to jail? fuck the slammer hop the rail!

chorus:   bust a cap- life flashing rap,
   murderer on the run, DEAD now - could use a gun
   cause hell is mean, demons scream, fight and ream-
   with terror from below, no rock, no fun, no ho's........
   was it worth the hit?, no mo rappin, shit!
   darkness calls, blood-stained halls,  the toughest lack     ballsssssss.......

Thank you.  It's like another family here.  But you have to beware.  :) It comes from my heart but needs to be re-written on the soft spots.  You know how moods are.

Here's something I just wrote, hope you like it. The song is about when there's so many out to please you, but the options, though good also bad, perhaps the song explains itself

on retail

Honey, my hearts is the bargain
And the retail is on
I know it should feel good to be wanted
But that's so far from me

The retail is on
But you can't buy me, even if I'm free

I know we're coming down
I've tried to save it, but I keep hiting a wall

I've tought it over and over for ages
Vision is vivid, I'll get back to you

Honey, my hearts is the bargain
And the retail is on
You can't buy me
tough the prize tag is on

I left you cold hearted
And the retail is on
It feels so good to be wanted
It feels good to be free

Leave a message on the phone
I'll get back at you - on better time

You accuse me of not trying
Honey, If I did't think of us
we would do just fine
Thinking made it bad

Honey, my hearts is the bargain
And the retail is on

Do I need You?
Do You Need Me?
Do We Need This?
Where's The Answers I seek?


There it was, please, tell me what you thought of it.

No replies? Guess you must have hated it ;)

It was good writting, but I thought it was very personal to you.  To understand the personal notion of it, is very complex and new.  Retail,  is genius.  It is very industry.

This is a great place to share.  I came here to share a thought...that would make a good poem or song.  

"Where is the end"

I can't wait for my first breath
I've been waiting for sooo long
just to touch you, in my sleep

how can it be a mistake
when everything I do is wrong
It's who we are
and it all comes back to
the first day in time

when the lights go down and I am alone
I pray for you to come to me again
when the lights go down I feel you there with me
the only thing missing is why

I am not like the blonde who caught your eye
I am more complicated, aint it sweet
Don't keep playing with my mind, I'll win everytime

I don't need a partner, I need a friend
I forgive you, if you forgive me
where is the end,  leave the bright lights home
All I need is you and it's causing everyone pain

Last time I saw you, you felt wonder and devine
why do I have to figure out all the lines
cause if it is love, I wouldn't have to put so much time
don't you realize that I need little time to be happy

Not some fucking "here guess" bullshit.
You have drove me nuts, and I am worried still
Tired and still wonder how you are.
I left you a message today.


I don't shop at sears anymore, I love Walmart

Thanks, and  it was quite personal to me and it means a lot that you had the time to post a reply for it. It is a true song.

I read "Where Is The End", actually I had to read it a couple of times ;)

"why do I have to figure out all the lines
cause if it is love, I wouldn't have to put so much time" was excelent

i always like making new shit up so I wrote this song: hell's garden


                             hell's garden

   your all alone and noones around you you fell like you don't belong in this fucked up world so go and don't turn around you fell it you fell it your all alone
so ..............................welcome to hell's garden ofhatred on your self hell's garden of hatred on your self

and im working on the rest  :peace:

It's like I am walking in a field of roses
They all look the same
I don't stand out here
and no one calls me by my my name

I look up high, to a voice that once upon a time
called out to me, without a doubt is not here anymore
I have been sleeping forever
You have the best of me
when you took it from me
at the corner of Regent and Beverly

When I said No I won't
I didn't mean it entirely
You knew how I felt back then
And you took my freedom away from me

Days went bye and you had to know
that I was just the one for you
I frooze in time and now I am living in your hell

So don't feel alone, and don't worry
you got me baby, everyday I can tell
Take away the mansion, take away the pain
what you've got left here, is a little girl waiting for you

waiting for you to make it clear
I may not understand, I may not act right
All I know is that I am alone tonight
where is the garden that I once was so safe
they took it away, One lonely night

So we all meet there now and then
I can tell you, I never see my friend
cause he's off with the show now and I don't think
I'll ever be right again.

with fucked up love.

I'll try not to spam :D

I wrote this kind of "after the storm", feeling bad and fucked up, ?cos sometimes it just seems there has to be the one who you can blame ? me. The song is about you being blamed and "painted", like when she keeps talking to your friends, and they getting only on side of it all. Oh, and a big part is her not letting go easy, but, well, needing to get some payback. And finally, some friends are there for you and some don?t. Eventually it's about moving on and not giving up.

 
At The Final Line

 
We've walked a long time
though not so far
We don't anymore walk hand in hand
I-ah

 
Honey, when I said I needed you
It was no lie
But, honey, this time It's no ..
.. way .. oh-..no .. oh.. no .. damned..  way...

 
I know you must think to me it's just "go"
Even If I'm off the track
Oh, I may need a spare tire
But you just pass me by
You try to put me last on the racetrack


Like any words for me "Just go"
Oh, I think I can see the true color now
Of those that stood with me and of those
who went down


I see your true color now
And you can paint
What do you want of me?
Paint from me?


Oh-ah slap in the face is not what I got
Uh, you want me to hurt you, but I'll hold back
You want me to hurt you ? so you could get me back
 
We walked a thin line and I-ah
I think I can see the true colors now
Peach isn't a color to me
thought of that?
and all wine isn't red
And I knew you'd attack


Like any words for me "Just go"
I know you hate me for that
And the pain I feel
You never thought you could cause all that
--...I never thought you...---

 <possible solo>

After a week I'll feel fine
Then I'll meet you one final time
At the final line
And I'm back on the track

Like any word "just go"
just words for me
And I know you say it was all me
You perfect bitch
 

Let me know what you thought of it, thanks : ok:?

It is a perfect crime.

how two people can be so wrong for eachother.

It is so... to finally hear a breath of past life and look into a present.
.

Thank you. Blue.

Very inspiring,  I will sleep well enough to dream.

angels, please follow.

I have to try pot again.  

Tell me what you guys think of this okay please?

?Yeah It?s You?


What was it you once said that made me believe
How far did you come up from below
Did you feel relieved when you knew you wouldn?t drown
How I never left without you, only to be found lying face down

When I talk do I sound hollow to you
As I leave your presence does it bother you
When I want to be important does it work
As I leave your presence do you follow

Tonight the sun will fall and night will begin
Stars are the light along with the moon
I hope I can spend this time with you very soon
Tonight I?ll think of you and stay so alone

Waiting to see you next is long indeed
It?s so long it makes me want to bleed
I hope waiting for something is right
I hate to fight and love is always in my eyes something bright

Taking away so much away from nothing it hard to do
I deep down always miss you
Someday we?ll be together for now we?re apart
I hope you know this is really hitting my heart

Sorry this is so long
I know I can?t keep you forever
I?ll go now, hope you miss me, it would be nice
So goodbye love, I?ll see you soon

By Robbie Wiles

No matter what you say, this is where it belongs.

OKay thank you, for having this power trip and all...

Yeah, it's all about power trips.... We just move, merge and stuff just to show our power.

Get real.  ::)


/jarmo

Lastnight

I had an encounter with the higher power last night
after he gave me the will to survive
I realized that, love still lives here in me

After being told that there is only one kind of love
and after I relived the feeling you made me feel
I swear I saw you with me

Only Love can touch me that wa?
Thank God he is watching over me
Cause I don't know what I am capable of
these days, ya, these days
er
I am watching the light on the wall
the reflection from my window at night
spells, L
I don't know why I can't be with with
He didn't tell me.

I don't know why I can't be with you
I guess waiting for me to die and in the morning
arise with me in your arms

I felt love once, yesterday It came back'
so that would make it twice, but I still don't have you
How many days do I have to live without you

The sign on my wall spells L and I am dreaming
that L means you and not just a lonely night again
I felt love yesterday, thank God for signs on my wall

Cause I need to know that there is light
even in the night, even if I don't have you
Please believe me, Cause I only fell in love once
it's still on my wall tonight.

Very sweet..why do men never say these things in real life ?  :yes: : ok:

Love it, inspiring..I guess that love is something we all think about and relate to.

you bet.

This is my latest song I wrote for my band I was wondering what u think of it...

Stranger
Waking up on
A Sunday morning
This old man went walking

Looked at the stranger
In that mirror
Don?t know him any more
Is that me?

All you need is
Something I don?t
Want to be And I
Can?t take it anymore

And you?re eyes look
So far away, but it?s
Only when I?m gone
Far away from you

But you and I got something
But I don?t where it belongs
Maybe in my head, Maybe in
My dreams

And we wake up on
A sunrise that almost
Blinded me with you?re beauty
I want to get away

But I don?t want to
Hold on any more
Because I?m fed up

I got no solutions
To all my problems, yeah!
This is not the answer
That?s why I am looking at
The stranger in the mirror

I?ve lost my ways
Somehow I?m not the
Same any more,
I feel something between
Us

All you need is
Something I don?t
Want to be And I
Can?t take it anymore

I want to be yours
And yours only
I know your out
There

I can?t get away from
You, because I know I
Will dream of you
Always

I feel wrong inside
My mind again, I?m
Screaming for help
But you don?t care

I?m looking for answer
That I can?t find, Tell
Me what did you see
Because that?s not me

Because I got no
Where to go home
Because it?s to late
All the beautiful images
That light your face

I live a big lie
That?s all I believe
Because I got no
Where to go home
Because I am down
On my feet

Take it easy
Take it away
Find you?re self again

All you need is
Something I don?t
Want to be And I
Can?t take it anymore

These lies I believe
From you, Even though
Deep down I know what?s
Right and what?s wrong

Let?s take it away
And I hurt
I don?t want to
Say anything to you

Because I don?t
Know, where I stand
Anymore, this aint easy
To say, but I?m going
Insane day by day
Because of you

Because I cant find
The answers to why
You?re gone, I can?t
Take this anymore

I?ve been torn in two
I hope its not over
Any more

Just tell me the answer
I?m looking for answer
I can?t take much more

I haven't wrote any music to it yet I will do soon though

Dave_Rose;

Very indepth thoughts buddy...I really thought it was down to earth and real towards the middle. I really connected with the chorus.  The tune will do it for ya.  Good job.

Please tell me if you like this, it took quite some time to make it


         Disaster
         of one



my heart it's full of broken glass
once it held something and now it's dark
can you live with a broken heart?
if past was a disaster then what can you expect to come?

You couldn't help yourself
Then what's left for you?
I thought I knew you, my disaster of two
And in the photos there's just someone in your shell
someone nice, but so surreal
I had no reasons - since she dissapeared


;My comitment to you
was a disaster to come
you can't help yourself
you're a disaster to come, my disaster of one;


So my heart may be full of broken glass
but I'm still so fine
I don't feel bad knowing you
I'd just like to get back my wasted time
eventually I'll heal much before you - my disasters of one
Though seeing tears in your eyes hits still like a drill
I hope you can't hurt me
though we both know you all ready did

Being paranoid was something you coulnd't see
I saw it - disasters to come
And now I see a rising sun making the sky gold
I won't lie, I'm much better of now


;My comitment to you
was a disaster to come
you can't help yourself
you're a disaster to come, my disaster of one;


You think there's always time to start to try
you think you can buy time only if you cry
You say you love and miss me, even if it didn't show
you were my disaster at home, and now you're just disasters to come

Blue Cut  -  cool lyrics.  I like the way it seems to play around with time, perception and all that.  I especially like the line, "I hope you can't hurt me, though we both know you all ready did."  Weird shit.  If you've got good music to go with the lyrics, and the lyrics fit with the music, you've definitely songwriting skillz. : ok:




Here's a song I wrote a few weeks ago after seeing the movie Taxi Driver with Robert De Niro, which basically inspired the lyrics.  Musically, it's a dark punk-type song, reminiscent of the Misfits.  Tell me if you like it.

Breakdown

When darkness falls
The streets come alive
Scum of the earth
With their guns and their knives
I drive the city at night
I see her out on the street
Selling her body for the man
That's not the way it should be

Someday a rain will wash this away
But 'till then it'll stay the same
I need a change, I don't care how
Breakdown

Innocence lost
She shouldn't live like this
One last saving grace
Before I fall into the abyss
I'm your street life saviour
I'm living dead
He won't sell souls anymore
With a bullet in the head

Someday a rain will wash this away
But 'till then it'll stay the same
I need a change, I don't care how
Breakdown

Mattman, I'm still working on the music, it's not so easy ;)

I liked breakdown, even if I couldn't put any melody to it but

I'm your street life saviour
I'm living dead
He won't sell souls anymore
With a bullet in the head

was great, but my twisted humor would've put it

"she won't sell her anymore
with a bullet in the head"

but I'll hand it to you, I found it somehow catchy

Here's my latest.  Feel free to comment.

Working Title: APOLOGY
Written: A.M.P., 3-24-04, Boston, MA

VERSE ONE
It all went by too fast
No chance to take it back
I'm alone and left to fade
No one else would understand
I see a change in you
See it coming for a while
See it coming in your smile
I see a change in you
I ask myself why
Feeling like I could die

CHORUS ONE
What can I do? To say I'm sorry
What can I do? To make things right
What can I do? To bring you back to me
I want you in my life again
Please tell me what I can do

VERSE TWO
I am sorry for the pain I've caused
Wishing we could start over again
Time brings healing to our wounds
I won't make the same mistake
Why did you have to change?
Everything was going fine
And I felt the world was mine
Why did you have to change?
Wasn't what I had in mind
With you leaving me behind

CHORUS TWO
What can I do? To say I'm sorry
What can I do? To make things right
What can I do? To bring you back to me
Don't want me in your life again
Please tell me what I can do

To put you out of my mind
Out of my mind
Out of my mind
Out of my mind
Put you out of my...

When I first played the tune for the guitarist in my band, he said it sounded like something you'd hear by Staind (odd, considering I hate Staind, mostly because of Aaron Lewis' whining; but I digress).  This was actually part of an idea I had the other day for a whole album.  It's basically an allegory for my last failed relationship-- I liked her, she didn't like me.  It's like a combination of NIN's "The Downward Spiral" and Stabbing Westward's "Darkest Days."  Here are the track ideas, with current songs I've written for it in (parentheses).

1. You see the girl (no song for it yet)
2. Meet her, and start hanging out (no song yet here either)
3. Intrigued by her (still nothing)
4. Debating over whether to ask her out (How Will I Know?)
5. Further fixation (nothing)
6. Obsession (Be There-- still under construction)
7. She finds out (Obsession)
8. Hatred between the two of you (nothing yet)
9. Desire for revenge (I've Had Enough)
10. Remorse for the situation, and wondering why it had to happen (Apology)
11. Hope for future relationships, and putting this behind you (Exit)

Let me know what you think.

Good lyrics, Duffman...OH yeah!  I can see the Staind comparisions...it's got that same kind of style in terms of sensitivity and everything, but it's not quite so self-absorbed, either.  The album thing is a good idea...maybe it can be your band's Tunnel of Love.



Here's my latest.  These lyrics were a collaboration between me and my rhythm guitarist, who just broke up with his girlfriend.  The music is somewhere between Blink-182, the Ramones, and the poppier side of The Cure.  It's very much a pop-punk song.

Making A Mess

To me she was an angel
To me she was the best
Turned out she was the devil
Tore my heart from my fuckin? chest

Forgetting all my optimism
Watching our future?s end
Will I be another memory
Be her lover or just a friend
[pause]
SCREW IT ALL YOU?RE DONE!

Now all my hopes are gone
What the hell is going on?
They say wounds heal with time
Someone please fix this mess of mine

To hell with all those rules she made
Controlling my every move
She just wanted me to be her slave
And in the end what did that prove

Her voluntary deafness
Causing my frustration
Blame it on a
Failure of communication

Now all my hopes are gone
What the hell is going on?
They say wounds heal with time
Someone please fix this mess of mine

[Interlude]

Goodbye to romance
Goodbye to her hand
Goodbye to sanity
And sex in the van
I?ve seen it all before
And it?ll happen more I know
I don?t have time for girls
When I?m under their control

Now all my hopes are gone
What the hell is going on?
They say wounds heal with time
Someone please fix this mess of mine

Someone please fix this life of mine

Mattman - this was great, I can relate to it, it really hits the issue

Duffman, great lyrics, especially:
"Everything was going fine
And I felt the world was mine"

Mattman's(Making A Mess) and Blue Cat's(Fathers Son):

Both are very powerful. Gives me something to think about. Great writings and cheers to both of you.

Thankyou for sharing.

A guy I know wrote this little haiku.......enjoy.......

_______________________________________________

both my arms broken
both in slings around my neck
will you wipe my ass?


black hair on my soap
my wife will surely freak out
someone get a rake


love is powerful
no having to say sorry
so bite the big one


my face is melting
it must be something I ate
what is brown acid?


LED flashlight
batteries last forever
I think I left it at work


butterfly coming
makes landing on my windshield
scrape it off next light


rodeo next week
lots of rednecks drinking beer
not enough restrooms


sex can be quite fun
we could do the wild thing but
I need window shades


copter searchlight scans
cross my backyard late at night
skinnydipping ends


xponent is done
haiku motor out of gas
time for bed maru

--Rob--

 :-[

Ok, this song may really suck cause I'm just making these lyrics up as I type them here. The name of the song just came to me and I thought I'd try to put some words to it.

Internal Inferno-

There's a burning sensation deep within your flesh
A feeling totally new to you
It certainly is wretched
The pain is not so much physical, but mental in nature
Emotions seem foreign, oh, what anguish
The angst you feel has no reason for existence
Worrisome lives we lead seem almost distant
From the logical path normal people take
Friends tell you to change your life for THEIR sake

(chorus)
There's an inferno building inside you
It'll eat you alive
It shows no sign of stopping
Surely this creature is not divine
You've gotta change your ways
You've gotta seek some help
You can't defeat this demon on your own
This soul must take the proper steps

Bullshit and rumors have taken their own toll
Coworkers, friends, and relatives seem sold
On putting you away and throwing away the key
How can you live in a world where you aren't even free
Your actions are submissions to a mind that is not yours
The doctors admitted they could only treat your cold
How much you wanna bet they've been hiding all along
From the so-called rumor that you're just a "lost cause"
These liberties we are granted upon our sacred births
Are nothing but objective misconceptions which are given from a perch
They are taken away by a force stronger than you or I
The government is no match to this which I despise
I'd love to limit this qualm to the discussion at first sight
But my mind has been fried, I'm unable to see the light
I can't stop thinking about how unlucky I have been
Too fucking bad that we can't all just begin
Start all over, a new beginning, a clean slate

Reaching deep inside in order to reword the inevitable demise
To beseech from God a new tally up on the board
Please just spare me the effort an the time
Sometimes I don't feel like living anymore
The predicament of life or death seems endlessly profuse
Unlimited supply of arguments to give an take
Don't you understand, I don't want you to be confused
Life is too complicated to be for our sake

(chorus)

This internal clockwork has now returned to a sort of normal
A burst of watery synapses have put out the inferno
Now you have until the next time this comes around
Hopefully you've learned your lesson
And can keep your mind an spirit sound

Here are some of my poems, i borrowed the last line from Madagascar for the first one ;):

I am an Island
Lost in the wide and vast ocean of life
While others be part of island chains
My island is left alone where no others will find
Below the waters surface an island may be forged together
With a significant other
My island stands strong and proud by itself
The love of others it sometimes seems
Is closer then I realize
Yet such love is yet to reach the shores of my island
If I am to be left so out from the shore
May I never find my way back anymore


Clouds in the wide sky
High above the cold calm breeze
Soaring over trees
Even on the grayest days
The greatest of clouds arise
Unleashing rainfall on to us

PS, sorry if they suck, i just started writing for a hobby lately

Well, this is my first post on this site... and I probably shouldn't make this my first, being that this isn't all that great (I wrote it in maybe two minutes or less, and haven't revised it). I haven't even titled it. ::)


Shut up bitch
It's not your voice I want to hear
You're behind me all the way
But I feel nothing there
I'll be your bitch just for one day
Just don't say a word
That's the price you have to pay
Don't let me see your ugly face
I'll pretend it's someone else
I'll close my eyes
And see a better place
There are many things we can do
I just don't want to look at you
You can put your arms around me
I just don't want to know that it's you

Maybe one of these days I'll post something more personal (give it five minutes :D) if anyone would want me to post after this.  :-\

This one needs to be corrected, but here it is:

Lost Control

I'll kill you
Don't hurt me
Who are you?
You never met
The other me

I'm sick
I'm going to die
So why do you say I'm healthy?
I'm not one to lie

Don't look at me
I fucking hate you
And now I want to cry

The door is taped
The windows are closed
Because I know
I know they want to hurt me

I heard your voice
But you didn't say
Anything to me

I have magical powers
That were only given to me
You can't touch me or I'll die
I've only lived one hour

And now my story is told
What did I say?
I'll never know
I heard them say
I've lost control

Alright, a few more parts I'm working with.  None of them are anywhere near completion, so any advice is greatly welcomed.

This first one, which is currently untitled, was written after I went to take flowers to a girl for her birthday.  She's a friend of mine, but I like her as more than that, but can't get myself to tell her my feelings, due to a failed attempt at it with another girl back in September that has left me extremely paranoid (that was a really fuckin' long sentence).  So here it is.

I do what I can
But I don't understand
How I can get through to you
I want you to see
What you mean to me
But I don't know how to do it
Anything I could do
I'd do it for you
I'd be anything you may need
I can't promise much
No riches and such
But at least I can give you this song.

The music is all written for it already, I just need to write the remainder of the lyrics (Pre-chorus, chorus, and further verses; maybe a bridge too).

This next one was written on a Greyhound bus from Boston to Cleveland (The first few lines were written in front of my former dorm as I moved out).  I hated living there (I called it Cell Block 6) and was so happy to get out of it.  The people sucked (partially from fallout of the aforementioned situation of liking a girl who didn't like me, and sucking at telling her my feelings) so I wrote this song about leaving.  It's working title is "Parole".

First half of verse one:
Goodbye now to cell block six
Goodbye ball and chain
Goodbye to a year of my life
I won't get back again

First half of verse two:
Goodbye white walls and boring bricks
So long to skies of grey
Goodbye to people I love to hate
Never thought I'd see this day.

So let me know what you thought of these so far, and if you have any advice.  Post here, e-mail me, AIM (StradlinFan84), or whatever.

EDIT: The first song is now called "Get Through to You".

I liked your lyrics a lot, Duffman.  In "Get Through To You", for some reason, I really like the line about "riches and such".  It just jumped out at me for some reason.  That song has got a rhythm and rhyme to it that make it stand out; my only real word of advice would be to make every third line rhyme as well.  For example, right now the rhyming scheme of the song is like AABAACAADAAE.  You should try and make it like AABAABAACAAC, if you know what I'm saying.  The added rhymes will give it more of a flow.  Unless it's a fast, hard song and the third lines are sort of like a shouted response.  Anyway, just my advice.  Great work, keep it up.  : ok:


Here's my latest.  With my band (now called Purebred Mutt), I'm the main songwriter in the group.  What often happens is that the other guys might bring me ideas and I'll work to develop them into full songs.  Only thing is, both of them separated from their girlfriends not long ago, so I'm starting to get bogged down in "why did my girlfriend leave me, relationships are so fucked up"-type shit with no rhyme, rhythm, or anything.  I've developed a couple good punk-pop songs from these, but I needed to get away from that for a while.  I don't want to turn into an emo band.

That's why I wrote "Rock 'N' Roll Junkie".  Nothing to do with the M?tley Cr?e song of the same name, which I've never heard.  This song is just a straight, hard blues designed for rocking.  It's cut from the same cloth as GN'R's "Dust 'n' Bones", "City Boy Blues" by the Cr?e, Metallica's "2x4", and "Roadhouse Blues" by The Doors.  Although I might speed it up later to shake things up, I dunno.  Also, I might add another verse to it.  I know it's not exactly intellectual, but I didn't want that.  I needed a break from writing "serious" and "emotional" songs.  I just wanted to rock.  Anyway, here it is.


Rock 'N' Roll Junkie

Well I'm gonna go hungry and I'm gonna be sick
If I can't get myself another fix
Times are hard and I'm outta control
Need another good shot of that rock 'n' roll
I can't live without it and it won't leave me alone

Yeah I'm a slave to it, and I can't get enough
I just want more of that wonderful stuff
Now I lost my job and got kicked out of school
I might be a junkie, but I'm nobody's fool
So gimme that shit, and you can drink my whiskey too

I'm just a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
I'm just a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
You know I want more when I hear those guitars roar

My knees are weak and I can hardly stand
'Cept when I'm playing in a rock 'n' roll band
So I went to the doctor and got diagnosed
I'm a hardcore addict and I'm getting close
I went to the show and nearly died of an overdose

Well I'm a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
I'm just a rock 'n' roll junkie
Rock 'n' roll junkie
Don't know if I should, but I know that it sure feels good

[Solos, repeating choruses ensue]

Something I just came up with.  
First time I have wrote anything that I could call mine So
I thought I would share it with you guys.

I based it off of what GNR members think/feel now days about the past and where they want to be now.
Keep that in mind when reading it.


Times have changed again
We are living our own lives
In the dreams we once wanted
Because we dont wana to die

What once was our own
Becomes the past of our time
and the things we always miss
wont come back again

But the feelings are the same
and the expectations wont live down
growing deep within
our harts beating to an end

I plan on adding alot more, I will post it when im done if u people like wut I got so far.

Hey guys! Here is a poem I wrote a while back for my girlfriend. I want opinions on the strengths and weaknesses of it I guess.

Yeah it's really original I know lol.

Robbie Wiles
?Marble Floor?
2-9-04 ? 2-18-04

Turning back the old hands of time
I can still see you in my memory that first day
Oh how you looked so fine
I always kept a thirst for you in my heart
I still remember the tough and unnerving moments we shared
We?re together now, nothing kept us apart
Since I fell for you nothing has compared

When you needed me, I was there
Even if you pushed I still pulled
Our early chapters have come to an end
I?m glad for this
My good will for you I send

A marble floor is how we are
You can walk on it and it is still pretty underneath
You just couldn?t ask for more
What we have is our own marble floor

Chorus:
We stay solid and keep together like tiles on the floor
As I smile and it?s sore, you kiss it and I couldn?t ask for more
Our love in its own way is a marble floor
I just couldn?t ask for more (x2)

Interval

How we ever met is beyond me
You?ve always looked beautiful every day and I?ve always thought it was meant to be
I don?t know how else to get through a day without you
Any day with you is more then I could ask
Like a marble floor

The times alone are harder now
I always will miss you
I can still hear you in my head
You?re the only thing that makes me alive and not dead

Chorus:
We stay solid and keep together like tile on the floor
As I smile and it?s sore, you kiss it and I couldn?t ask for more
Our love in its own way is a marble floor
I just couldn?t ask for more (x2)

Turning back the old hands of time
I can still see you in my memory that first day
Oh how you looked so fine
I always kept a thirst for you in my heart
I still remember the tough and unnerving moments we shared
We?re together now, nothing kept us apart
Since I fell for you nothing has compared


What ya think?

so impressed with contributions so far i had to send my own....please dont knick my lyrics else ill cut your teeth out....

Before You Walk Away

before you walk away, ive got one more thing to say,
i dont really want to play, your games anymore....
theres one thing that i need, thats to sit aside and bleed,
these tears from my system, you fucking whore.....

before you turn your back, i can sense a certain lack,
of remorse in your feelings, that tears me up,
if my senses are all true, then theres nothing i can do,
all i know is you, and now misery,

(chorus)
everything i had i gave to you,
you gave it all back broken,
my feelings for you grew,
but you kept your options open.

before you walk away, ive got one last thing to say,
dont you show your face, round here anymore,
before you walk away, ill use all my restraint,
cause i really want to hurt you, you fucking whore...

(chorus)

critism please........ :nervous:

i usually dont do this for fear of being plagarized

but this is a song that isnt gonna be on my cd anyway so fuck it, i may use it down the road though its called

"souless"

every mornin' i wake up the same
drownin in my sorrow with no one to blame
its just the evil worlds burden on me
that hardens my soul and resurrects misery

i have nothing to show for what ive done
25 years and i still dont have anyone
how could hell be any worse than this
ive sufferered enough and i deserve some bliss

chorus

constantly i feel like im in a daze
cant find a drug to cure my pain
id like to die but i fear not being around
cause as soon as i pull the trigger a drug will be found
that will make u happy and never let u down

every mornin i wake up so cold
nothing to love or call my own
i try to find the answers but i give up
living or dying i no longer give a fuck

repeat chorus


life is strange when things change and the demons creep under the door, i try but ic ant defeat them anymore
im giving into the voices inside my head the ones that tell me im better off dead, my soul is not hole ive lost all control now i just wanna die in my sorrow
i feel like im just wastin away to die my soul is gone but im still alive

just reachin out to hold u once more
but u just let me fall into a sea of black right into hells core




im gonna work something up with this, this song was written in a very dark time and place and its a song i dont like performing cause of the demons it brings out in me

Here are some of my poems I have written so far this year, please tell me what you think good or bad :):

Metaphor

I am an Island
Lost in the wide and vast ocean of life
While others be part of island chains
My island is left alone where no others will find
Below the waters surface an island may be forged together
With a significant other
My island stands strong and proud by itself
The love of others it sometimes seems
Is closer then I realize
Yet such love is yet to reach the shores of my island
If I am to be left so out from the shore
May I never find my way back anymore

Tanka

Clouds in the wide sky
High above the cold calm breeze
Soaring over trees
Even on the grayest days
The greatest of clouds arise
Unleashing rainfall on to us

Sonnet

One left behind thought stands out to me, at which I wrote my name in the sand
         The cold showers of the morning dew came down and washed it away
         There my lover ran towards me barefoot in the sand, and she gently took my hand
         Thunder and lightening crashed through my mind as we walked to a place I cannot say
The senseless chatter that commenced I simply blocked out, as I looked into the sky
          What if life had no death, only joy and serenity, happiness that was endless
All I believe my life to be is a time of nonsense as you simply think what a joy it would be to fly
The clouds sometimes appear to be closer then they really are, nature is a place of solitude, a place I want to be in the boundless moonlight
On that beach, I had thoughts of mortality as I wondered quite frequently when I will die
???I am not depressed or lost in sadness, I simply wish to know life best
Life is a treasure that many may take for granted in their lifetime, which makes me sigh
I often get lost in thoughts and a web of questions but all is well when you?re hypnotized by the stillness of your chest

Here is my major thesis I had to write this year, I scored  97% on it but would like to hear your opinions on it:

Native Issues

Today our already distressed association with our country?s aboriginal people continues to disintegrate by the minute. The majority of fault for decades of our country?s economic distress should be primarily bestowed on the aboriginal people of Canada. Legendary alcoholism and inane parental discretion concerning drug addiction involving their young children living primarily within a single-parent environment is both irresponsible and reckless. Colossal unemployment rates tarnish Canada?s image by undesirably fueling our country?s dependency load at annual rates by natives accounting for close to 25% of no participation in the labor force compared to approximately 8% for the total population of Manitoba alone.  In the following essay I, with both statistical and factual information, will exhibit that the majority of natives in Canada live in a gentrified area while not making appropriate investments of any financial salary while surrounding environments for parenting children possibly pose threats and danger to their wellbeing.  Unworthy monthly drainage of government unemployment support and inconsiderate abuse of year round hunting privileges are just a few of the annual occurrences taking place in a native community.

A great number of aboriginal inhabitants of our country are volatile, uneducated, and pose both a social and economic burden on our country?s society. They are the origin of previously unheard of suicide and crime rates, which unfortunately have a direct correlation to education and poverty which is disastrous and can further motivate social disparity when an alarming 34.2% of natives living on a reserve have less then a grade 9 education.

Predominately, the majority of the native population of Canada posses very inextensive, unsophisticated knowledge, and experience in the world of governing politics. The concept of native self-government has remained a hot topic, of massive argumentation and controversy for the past several years.  Opening the door to the realm of possibilities and subsequent consequences to our government giving the native population sole reign over, and dominating control over each and every single one of their actions sure would solve various of our problems, but the backlash form our non-aboriginal community would be monumental
First of all, the Quebecois who initially appealed the notion to the Canadian government back in 1995 to separate from Canada and establish they?re own, segregated, self-governed country.  If our government were to relinquish individuality, and self-command to the native population, they would be in essence fabricating a double standard in which yet another privilege is yielding forth in the native community?s already expansive list of privileges, while the voices of the citizens of Quebec go unrenowned. Substantial greed would eminently follow on behalf of the natives if self-government were instated, with limited taxation, as well exempted taxation on registered property, and inclusive year-round hunting privileges, their truly is noting that natives do not retain.It would in reality remain in this country?s best interest if the notion of aboriginal self-government remains disapproved. For an already hefty, financial solvency that remains lingering over our government while they continue to procrastinate the issue, donating millions, upon millions of dollars over to the notion of self-government would be incautious, and valueless. The Canadian government should alternatively invest any feasible, or expendable, sums of money into more beneficial for our country as a whole such as healthcare, education, and welfare.  The primary advantage if the policy were to be adopted would be to finally have the native population off our government?s backs, so that any corrupt or ludicrous decisions will solely reflect their community and not ours.    

Notwithstanding the certainty and common knowledge that aboriginal peoples possess and offer multifarious skilful expertise, their partaking in the labour force of our country is in fact substantially imminent along with an immense unemployment rate greater then non-aboriginal Canadians.   The prime factor substantiating the current unemployment rate of 31% is the direct correlation between education and available employment opportunities. Such occupations that need to be filled are outturned in opposition to the native population unfortunately when 34.2% have below grade 9 education experience.  Coincidental parallels exist between both a parent, and their child?s failed success in the labour force. A minor?s success in education is meagerly determined by their parents active interest in their child?s education, which is unfortunately almost non-existent when a child travels great distances away from the reserve of which they live on.  The native population of Canada subsequently accounts for a huge fraction of those not in the labour force which by correct definition fabricates our country?s dependency load. Vigorous initiative on behalf of the native population to participate in the labour force has had distinct reasons in the past several years. Take for example 1986-1991, as an entire community, annual income for the native people has increased by 31%, and to this day only continues to grow.  This intricate situation does not look as if a resolution is on the horizon. If our government continues to handout unemployment checks monthly, the natives truly will not learn anything in life. Illegal acts such cigarette smuggling continue to hit our economy very year, with an estimated 1.5 billion dollar loss.  A serious reexamination is needed on our part to reassess the usefulness of financially supporting our native tribes.

Social disparity, or imbalance among native culture is directly affiliated with several secondary psychological factors including depression and domineering stress. When these factors compile it is extremely potential that violent crime will be committed, 41.4% of the time against a family member.  Economic despair and poverty are the foremost factors that question a native?s willpower to contend with every day life. When violent crimes are created are committed, and social disadvantages are publicized the native people alienate themselves from our society, and mistrust for fear of them lashing out against a non-aboriginal citizen perhaps out of residential or financial envy is a common belief. In retrospective years, our native people?s struggle with drug addiction primarily, gasoline sniffing, has become almost mythological in public knowledge. Recent studies have substantiated that continuous inhalant abuse is directly associated with failure, or misfortune in school, unemployment, and the most importantly, social inadequacy.  In public facilities for example, a non-native, or anyone for that matter could easily detect such an addiction by impoverished hygiene, conspicuous essence of the native?s possible inhalant of choice.  Turning to inhalants, due to failure of achievement in many of life?s little aspects of stability, and security unknowingly worsens the predicament as, any association with vile drug use such as gasoline gives a repulsed, or disreputable reputation for the native community as a hole. With ample rehabilitation centres available for treatment, if the initiative is taken, social acceptance may be found with a more enlightening reputation for our native people.    

In the past several year?s, there has been ample cause for concern pertaining to Native hunting privileges and the potentially devastating impingement they could have on our country?s already distressed natural resources pertaining directly to the equality and stability of species such as fish and deer in our environment. For several years now, Treaty natives, and most recently non-status natives have been generously bestowed with the privilege to hunt or fish on any vacant property throughout any season of the year. With such freedom comes great responsibility and consideration that must be innovated when with unbounded limits on how much fish for example can be seized with no license required. Consideration for the non-native population in the hunting profession has unfortunately not occurred since it is estimated that hundreds of natives in the greater New Brunswick area alone annually compromise non-native fishermen the security and success of their livelihood by unnecessarily embezzling and vilifying already floundering fisheries.   Our  government  one  way  or  the  other  needs  to  reevaluate allowing  aboriginal  descendents  the  privilege  of  year  round hunting.  Annual  financial  inheritance  by  not  doing  so  are  being  forfeited  off  of  license  and  registration  fees  for  the  Resource  Management  Board , which  is  in  turn,  is  invested  in  worthwhile  conservation  projects.  An anonymous agency should perhaps be deployed to further investigate and evaluate usefulness and determine who was in greater need of these hunting rights, while remaining within constitutional boundaries and not revoking their rights to provide a legitimate quantity of food for their families.  

In conclusion, these perplexing situations with respect to our native population??? are far too complex to be realistically resolved anytime in our foreseeable future. Potentially beneficial solutions for all parties involved unfortunately come with detrimental side effects. Several factors influencing the perdition, or downfall of non-heated native-white relations is the responsibility of decades prior to this sate of dilemma in which the native peoples who first settled our country were treated as mere hindrances, and unrightfully owners of what is globally referred to as ?our? land while our native neighbors watch from the sidelines. Decades since then, innumerable riots have occurred against non-aboriginal citizens, fueled with utter contempt and, and anarchism spirituality over and over again, yet in the end any defense of beliefs or land ownership is squandered, and the natives are pushed out of society long enough for the native community willfully socially segregated yet again. As mentioned subsequently, substantial side effects to the reclusive and alienated lifestyles the majority of natives chose to live under is nonobligatory, and at any moment can reach a providential turning point in which band decisions exist no more and an education perhaps is not so far-fetched or strenuous. Prosperity to any community, or our society with a slothful or indolent attitude will not amount to anything in the labor force. As a result the annual dependency load of our country only continues to elevate, while more and more salary decrements are sent off to support the unemployed, a large decrement of which are natives. It remains highly disputable as to how productive these boundless money transactions go to sequester support of their families and exceptional or at least improved housing conditions. It is hard to relate to the aboriginal community when so few of us know both what to say and what to do, but one thing remains undisputed, an alteration of living is required for a co-existing existence to remain possible


PS: I apologize if what I said in the essay offended anyone, please give me some feedback on it and my poems, good or bad, and feel free to analyze and opose the side I took for the essay.

This sorta song has been brewing in my head for a while, not words or anything just ideas. So i came to this thread and sat down and in 10mins i was done. The best ideas are thought of on the spot for me, although by your criticism this might not always be true  :hihi:

Find what you've found (hahaha sounds like a good album cover name)

verse:
she wants to be friends,
nothing more,
she just hasn't found what she's lookin for

don't want it to end,
just by chance,
this could begin a life long romance ooooooo

but remember,
you can't get it all.
forget about her
and begin to stand tall

Pre-Chorus:
tomorrow's another day
don't fall to the ground
don't begin to stray
don't get yourself down

Chorus:
what you want to find
will become found.
its only a matter of time
c'mon nooooooow c'mon noooow

Verse 2:
they've got a fancy car
got it all
you just wish you had all the things you saw

you wish upon a star
your desire
might not be right, could be blinded by fire ooooooooooo

so remember
those things don't mean much
you shouldn't care
you've got the human touch

Pre-Chorus:
tomorrow's another day
don't fall to the ground
don't begin to stray
don't get yourself down

Chorus:
what you want to find
will become found.
its only a matter of time
c'mon nooooooow c'mon noooow

Bridge:(Heavy, 1st time electric guitar enters)
People will hate you
People will hurt you
People will hate you
People will kick you when your dowwwwwwn.

Solo:
(best solo i've ever written)


Chorus: x2
what you want to find
will become found.
its only a matter of time
c'mon nooooooow c'mon noooow

Outro:
oooooooooooooooooooo
oooooooooooooooooooo
oooooooooooooooooooo
oooooooooooooooooooo
(yeah its hard without hearing the notes)

i'm mainly a song writer for guitar, but i only usually deal with things musically. This is the first time i've ventured into lyrics properly. remember this was written very quickly. what do you think? :nervous:

This is dedicated to childhood friend, who has turned to be a true motherfucker. I hope you enjoy it, at least I did when I wrote it.

Mr. Coolguy


It's always more than it seems
All smiles but I know it ain't for real
You're just waiting the moment I'm down
So you could kick me in my face

You must hate the fact we had the same chances
But you just couldn't grab when I advanced
Yeah, you found out life is so hard to control
Yeah, and I had to show you how it was done

You're all show,
oh, you're too weak to lift a boulder
you say you don't need a shoulder
and no one anymore takes you serious, you're so Mr. Hilarious

Yeah, so shut up, if you can't run the show
Yeah, shut up if you can't take what's to come
You better shut up since there's a long way down


You try to be so cool
and to everyone else you're just a fool
How hard can it be to find a lady?
Yeah, I know they should ask you
Yeah, they should just  ask from you

You ain't got no money to go
You ain't got no confidence to show
You're Mr. Coolguy who never had a blow

You're such a great image of a man
Mr. Coolguy you just lack what everyone else have
And you think you're almost like a star
It's so hilarious when it's all lies what claim you have

I don't even need my eyes to see
That everyone you know don't think that much of you
It's no surprise, so watch out, don't you talk shit when I'm about
you're just a clown with imaginary fame
I don't even care to demonstrate
The real use of likes of you
Oh, ain't you cool
Oh, do I need to show the real use of you?

This is a song I wrote after a bad depression during my last serious relationship.  It's all true apart from me dying at the end, although it was toutch n' go at the time.  Hope you like it?
Got a tune in my head but hav'nt picked up the guitar with it yet...


"Strong"

Sometimes I.....feel like a stranger.
As I lie here naked thinking next to you.
Don't you know....that we're in danger.
After all this time I feel I've something still to prove.

Why can't I put my finger on it, this emptyness inside?
Is it just me, or do yah feel it to?  Oh baby I can't hide.....

chorus;
Can't hide away.  
Can't hide the void within my soul.
Although I still love yah, it's not complete.
And our existance is'nt whole.
Whole enough....for us to carry on.
If I could have one wish I'd rub that lamp.
And say to gene I wish that I was strong.....

Stuck.....in this rigmarole called life.
You're trying your best but it never gonna be enough.
Like some stupid punk....all I wanna do is cry.
Wish I did'nt think, all this "get me outta here" stuff.

Can't eat, can't sleep I know that soon my time it will be up.
Nothing will escape me from this pain I feel, not even your tender toutch....

chorus;
Can't hide away.  
Can't hide the void within my soul.
Although I still love yah, it's not complete.
And our existance is'nt whole.
Whole enough....for us to carry on.
If I could have one wish I'd rub that lamp.
And say to gene I wish that I was strong.....

It's to late....as my life starts to fade away.
Something inside, swayed the decision its way.
I can see you cry....but I can't here you beg me to stay.
Gotta go now babe, I hope that I'll be back with you one day.

I know I'm going to a better place, and that you will be free.
All I wish with one last breath, is that you will still love me...

chorus;
Can't hide away.  
Can't hide the void within my soul.
Although I still love yah, it's not complete.
And our existance is'nt whole.
Whole enough....for us to carry on.
If I could have one wish I'd rub that lamp.
And say to gene I wish that I was strong.....

I was strong.
I was strong.
Wish I was strong.
But I could never be strong.



Copyright C.B. 30/11/03

I was thinking of an anti-tribute Rage Against the Machine style political song. It's pro facism and very aggressive! I dedicate it to President Bush.

Society Must be Controlled

Fire from the muskets bearing down upon the proles
Scores of people blown apart, bodies full of holes
Words from the preacher putting poison in their souls
Lies from the government, society must be controlled!

Let the bourgeosie put the foot down on the masses
Upon the dissedents the guided Demon missile crashes
Airplanes strafe the crowds blasting bullets in their passes
Prisoners whipped to death in a hundred deadly lashes

Society, society, society MUST BE CONTROLLED!
Society, society, society MUST BE CONTROLLED!
Freedom and peace they must not know.
SOCIETY MUST BE CONTROLLED!

We must put them in their place, masters of their lives
Ignore their wishes and their hopes, do not hear their cries
They cannot fight, they cannot think, they listen to our lies
Anyone who faces us, falls and screams and dies!

Society, society, society MUST BE CONTROLLED!
Society, society, society MUST BE CONTROLLED!
Freedom and peace they must not know.
SOCIETY MUST BE CONTROLLED!

<godly guitar solo>

And so we win the battle, no one beat us in the fight
Corpses of the opposition endless in my sight
There's no escape past our black gates, the borders guarded tight
Our rule is force, our law is true, long live the 7th Reich!


What do you guys think? ;)

Hmm, maybe my first song should sound like Slayer thrash metal, even if lyrically it's Rage style. Don't steal my ideas, please. ;)

My second song is a Spinal Tap like song, a power ballad. I don't think it should be taken too seriously, much like any of my stuff. It's intentionally cheesy. This song is sung Darkness style.

Let me Feel Your Love  :love:

Girl you came to me, and I knew it was time
You're a flower in my hair, falling down from above
You're my property now, your body's all mine
Bend over and let me feel your love!  :rofl:

I heard you say I don't know what love is
In my heart I know how it feels
It's like a hit of cocaine, an aura of bliss
Now let's get high together, I don't care if it kills  :rofl:

OOOOOOOOOO, let me feel your love
OOOOOOOOOO, that tight, tempting love
OOOOOOOOOO, let me feel your love
OOOOOOOOOO, that red, pulsing love

Don't fall asleep girl, I know you're not really tired
So let me dance with you, I'll do the best I can
I feel hard like hot metal, and I'm high and wired
Just let me see your airstrip, I need permission to land ;)

OOOOOOOOO, let me feel your love
OOOOOOOOO, that tight, tempting love
OOOOOOOOO, let me feel your love
OOOOOOOOO, that red, pulsing love

Where are you running to girl, I'm not finished yet
Please don't fly away, my precious white dove
I promise you this moment you will never forget
Will I ever feel a woman's love?  ;D


This song is dedicated to all the other horny young men out there. Someday I know we're gonna score!  :smoking:

That was so cool! I liked the simili/metaphor of the marble floor being like love. I thought it was extremely original, unlike anything I've read before, and that's a good thing. It was beautifully expressed and I think you did a great job.

I had no idea you had a poem on here D!

I appreciate the honesty in it. I can totally relate to that feeling sometimes. Everybody can, I'm sure.

All the poems that I've read on here are really awesome. And, "Let Me Feel Your Love", was so hilarious, Walk!
I wish I could write half as good as you guys can!

Sometimes you just have to open your head into your pen.  It's amazing what'll come out and very theraputic also. ;)

Thanks for the advice. When I write something, be it a poem or story, I always have an audience in mind. It's like I never really write something just to please myself. But, I'm gonna try to just relax and write some things that are important to me.  Maybe something good will come from it.

I've actually written lyrics since 1999 when I found first love :hihi:

Here's a interesting one from Mark:

'THE TRUTH HURTS"

I talk to you like we're tight
but we really can't stand each other.
You call me names after I leave your sight
and expect me to think of you as my brother.

You make jokes about how I really feel
and you disregard everything I do.
One day, things will start to get real
and I'll stop sending those messages to you.

Chorus:
Someday, I'll run away
and all of this will fade away.
I have nobody left to reach out to
If I can't talk to you
then who is it going to be?
You just lost your best employee.

I talk to you like we're tight
but really we can't stand each other.
I call you names after you leave my sight
and I can't stand it when we're together.

I do these things just for attention
and I get mad when I see the results.
You're so stuck on my contention
that you don't know what's occult.

Chorus

Lift me up, I want to be your friend.
Let me down, I want to do it again.
Let it go and just flip the switch
It's my jungle now, bitch!

---

Okay, it took me 2 1/2 hours to write that.

What does everybody think?

Heather
Her names Heather she wears leather
She is missing me
I don?t know how but you get inside my mind
Sometimes you don?t even know I?m there

Chorus

I?ll keep waiting till you come around
If you give me the chance
You?ve been saying
You really think you got me
Remember you can?t save me

So far away lady
A way to kill the sorrow
Drown my sorrows
Party till I puke
And you can?t save me

I got one thing left to do with my life
Is to get with you girl
You got me hypnotized
All you do is lie

Chorus

I?ll keep waiting till you come around
If you give me the chance
You?ve been saying
You really think you got me
Remember you can?t save me

And if you think that I?m golden
You got some hard times ahead
I got a bone to pick
And its you?re one

And everybody thinks you?re a joke
And she aint gonna listen
She aint even gonna care
So don?t despair, don?t live in fear

Chorus

I?ll keep waiting till you come around
If you give me the chance
You?ve been saying
You really think you got me
Remember you can?t save me

Chorus

I?ll keep waiting till you come around
If you give me the chance
You?ve been saying
You really think you got me
Remember you can?t save me

You can?t save me
So don?t even try me
Don?t even try and pull that shit on me
You just don?t have what it takes

Chorus

I?ll keep waiting till you come around
If you give me the chance
You?ve been saying
You really think you got me
Remember you can?t save me

Marc Taylor aka Dave Rose! :hihi:

Tunnels
There?s a light at the
End of the tunnel
But I don?t know where I am going
Someday you?ll see, born and raised
Every single time

This time you see
When you?re crawling on you?re
Knee?s the light gets brighter and brighter
Point me in the right direction
And you?ll win

Chorus

Can you see the light?
Yes, it gets brighter but I don?t know where
I am going, but someday you?ll see
Been around that block a time or two
But we?re gonna do this

The desire still burns
Even though I?m growing old
But the flame still rises, but it
Always works out

Sustained by the stain on my shirt
Wake up and smell the roses
Its getting late and I can?t wait
Let?s go round again

Chorus

Can you see the light?
Yes, it gets brighter but I don?t know where
I am going, but someday you?ll see
Been around that block a time or two
But we?re gonna do this

Chorus

Can you see the light?
Yes, it gets brighter but I don?t know where
I am going, but someday you?ll see
Been around that block a time or two
But we?re gonna do this

It?s been good while
You were here, but
When nothing becomes
Something and you get
Beat, you?ll find away

Chorus

Can you see the light?
Yes, it gets brighter but I don?t know where
I am going, but someday you?ll see
Been around that block a time or two
But we?re gonna do this

Marc T. Dave R

i can be a dickhead sometimes and a real piece of shit this poem is dedicated to someone very special to me that i acted childish and dumb towards and she absolutely means more to me than she could ever possibly know


im free stylin this off the top of my head so if it sucks im sorry


my head is spinning my heart is pounding im goin crazy longin for you
i feel so down, just so miserable wheni disappoint u the way i do

all u've ever done for me is everything i admire u for your strength
maybe one day ill figure out your secrets and become a better man

i can be such a bastard i deserve every bit of my pain
im such a fuckin loser and i dont deserve to even know your name

i dont know why i get so jealous and why im so immature
i do know how much i need u and thats bout all i know for sure

i sit here playin my guitar soloing a beautiful melody
i laugh thinkin of u pook how u are my every fantasy

this poem is my freestyle ill end it now i wont rhyme like i did the other night
i want to call and hear your voice so bad that will make everything all right


i get in my own way but let me assure u this much is true
i would walk thru the flames of hell for a month just to spend one day with u


if anyone thinks this is corny i apologize but understand
that the girl this is about makes me a complete man

Wow, I've read so many great lyrics on here since my last visit.  There are a lot of talented people on this board.  D has some really honest songs -  he's kinda like the Leonard Cohen of HTGTH.  And Walk...you can say what you want about politics - I know a pro-fascist song won't exactly make him Mr. Popular - but "Let Me Feel Your Love" was just really funny to read.  I love a song with a bit of humour in it. : ok:



Here's my latest.  The music is very punk-pop, a lot like "Adam's Song" or something.  Based on a real experience, as you would probably guess.

Prom Night

The night's almost over
And I'm still alone
Everybody's leaving
But I don't want to go home
I saw you in the corner
You were dressed all in black
Slipped through my fingers
Will you ever come back?

It was only one night
But it happened to feel so right
It hurts to find you're wrong
What went on at senior prom?

We went to a motel
I needed to find your touch
You were talking dirty
Like you needed me as much
In the warm summer night
Your body felt so hot
I was so close to you
We both had a shot

But then friends did come in
And you left to be with him
Tell me where did I go wrong
What went wrong at senior prom?

Yeah, it was only one night
But it happened to feel so right
It hurts to find you're wrong
I fucked up at senior prom

when i was young they picked on me
when i grew they picked on me
so what to say or do i just can't feel for you
their all around cause my mind is down
in a dreary dream of what i want this song to be
a hymn of fear to praise the demons in me
but i survived
my spirits high
so what should i do
i guess i'll praise the demons in you
cause im flying high,i survived
so when i look at you i could feel for you
i know those demons thathaunt you
but i figured it out and im alive
only stronger by their hate
and bigger by their love
a love to hate
o what have i become
causr fuck your life
the pain is yours
i feed the demons that live in you
your only nightmare
which they made me
so im gonna give it to you
you bastard
look at me
im that demon that haunt
their hate made me
now they can't break me
cause i know those demons
but i don't feel i create thosedemons that you hate
oh voices come to me
fear those words
hear those words
you ugly fuck
you just can't seak revenge
cause i just blew a hole in my head
i know those demons
i know them good
they made me
crazy in the head
an execution that brought no solution
just tragedy that plegues us all
society breed me
and took me
what a world of demons
but i survived
in this song
is the lesson
so use it wise
just ignore those demons
that they made inside

"Jointsucker"

Wake up at noon today
Make up my mind about the day
Drug up my head all the way
I know the world is gay

[Chorus]
I have never felt so high
I have never hoped to die
Jointsucker...
Mindfucker...
Jointsucker...

Off to work, to the grind
Smoked myself beyond my mind
Probably get stoned again
Give me it, I need a friend

[Chorus]

[Guitar Solo]

I never meant to get so fucked
I guess right now I'm out of luck

[Chorus]

-------------------------------

This is my first post, hell yeah.

 :smoking:

I hope to get some feedbaack on this one

There was this festival Rockperry, and my ex shows up and starts telling these stories about me to my wokrmates. It really damaged my mood, and then it was like over, I've been nice to her everytime we see, asking how she's doing and been for help where I can. Now, I don't care, get bunred and fucked over, isn't my problem!

And here's the song

"all that pleases you"


Honey, things had to end
There was so much I couldn't bear
Yeah, baby, I wish we could be as friends
But when I left you it must've drove you insane

Yeah, I hurt you and you
You lied about me to everyone
So proud about it
Yeah, I know you are

I try to avoid you
But you gotta be where I am
Yeah, isn't it a disgrace?!
And you still love me
What would you give to hold me?
So you could let me fall
I know you want to hurt me
From the bottom of your heart

Isn't it a trying to you?
Being such a bitch
Wouldn't you kill
to see my in a ditch?

You lied to everyone
so proud about it!
Yeah, I know you are!

I never thought I'd say
Of someone I loved the other day
The world would be a better place
If you'd be gone
Yeah, isn't it a disgrace?
You got a witches brain and a cold heart
Isn't it a phase of your vicious mind?
Isn't your mission to make me leave mankind?

It's hard to believe how it got this far
But I can see, how much it pleases you

Damm, I don't know, why it didn't appear, what I wanted to say.

So, I just wanted to say to Jointsucker author, that this lyrics realy rocks.

Thanks

MM

this is a song from the "D" vaults i wrote it april 8th 1999 its called

DENIAL, its sort of half spoken half sung


sometimes i sit around,wondering why i feel so down
does anyone else feel like me? or am i the only one who is crazy


sometimes i sit and talk to myself
sometimes id rather talk to me than anyone else
sometimes im afraid of everything im scared to die scared of change

why cant things ever stay the same
when i get at peace everything starts to change
sometimes i wonder if ill ever be ok
sometimes i feel like i wont make it another day

what is the reason 4 life? when we are just born to die
why is the world evil and mean? happiness always bows to sorrow and misery


poem half spoken,rapped and sung

the depths of my soul are filled with fire
i wish i could be something everyone admired
how come some people are blessed with fortune and fame
why some are homeless goin down in flames
why are some people born with a silver spoon
growin up with so much privledge andmoney they never lose
some of us have nothing and are filled with sorrow and doubt, we dont have a pot to piss in or window to throw it out

this world gives u nothing
but ii takes away your soul
this world gives u nothing
but it slowly robs u of your soul


poem spoken  


we all stand dead waiting to be born
all our wasted life u said will never be to scorn

why i have i led the life i lead
why do i always mourn
its simple needs i cant be dead to love again once more

shame to those who said they begged to be loved again once more
before they loathed the life they led can never be foreclosed

so now i stand where all have begged
to be loved again once more

now i stand my love is dead
ill never be adored

had i finished my cd 3 years ago this song wouldve been on it and been a potential big gun, now it doesnt even make the record, but read and tell me what u think


                      IF I WAS A FIGHTER  i wrote this in 1996 at the tender age of 17



i always run when it comes to love
i get so scared i always give up
im so shy i got nothin to say
then they always leave they walk away... they walk away

u go off find somebody new, im left here just missin u
and there is nothing that i can do.... but if i was a fighter u'd love me 2

my nights are lonely and my days are gray sittin here thinkin of things to say
i can make believe pretend your not taken
but when i think of u myheart is breakin my heart is breakin whoa whoa
chorus:
if i was a fighter, if i was a fighter, if i was a fighter i wouldnt run in the middle of this war i couldnt stand u not lovin me anymoreeeeeee if i was a fighter..... if i was a fighter i wouldnt run in the middle of this war

tell me what i gotta do to win u
cause u dont know what ive been thru
i admit i cry thinkin of the past
when we were together but it didnt last.. it didnt last

u always play a game and i always lose
i dont know what im suppose to do
my feelings are still so strong
and if i was a fighter i wouldnt be alone

everytime u walk by i just fall apart
i keep feelin the pain of my broken heart
i can imagine i can try to deny the fact youre the reason for the tears i cry, 4 the tears i cry, oh yeah

repeat chorus

i wouldnt run, id always be there, whenever u need me, id always care and baby if u would only love me let me be yours... if u believed

if i was a fighter... if i was a fighter, if i was a fighter i wouldnt run in the middle of this war

D.. I gotta say I really liked it, just something for my mood today, it was good, thanks for posting.

"Sold Soul"

I sold my soul so I could rock and roll...
I sold my life so I'll never get old...
I sold myself so I could get ahead...
I sold my life so I'll never be dead...

This is getting old, old, old
My life has been sold, sold, sold
You all have been told...
My soul's been sold!

I sold my person so that I could win...
I sold my guns for a bottle of gin...
I sold my face so I could be a winner...
I sold my soul to the devil and now I'm a sinner...

This is getting old, old, old
My life has been sold, sold, sold
You all have been told...
My soul's been sold!

[Guitar solo]

I sold my friends so I could be alone...
I sold my shit, everything I own...
I sold my gear, to get it back I had to plead...
I sold my crack, in order to get some weed...

This is getting old, old, old
My life's been sold, sold, sold
You've all been told...
My soul's been sold!(sold!)
My soul's been sold!(sold!)
My soul is empty now...
My soul's been sold!

I would like to know any opinions on these lyrics I recently wrote:

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a spine bone that's twisting
a restlessly rambling limb
a muscle tired of resting
a mind bored as well as numb

my skin is branding my forehead
with symptoms I can't name
stoned eyes - and all's been said
I've a pleasure I can't tame

an hour that's dragging by
a day full of languor
I ain't got time to wait and lie
no passion for a rambler

this isn't what you wanted?
this isn't your lifelong dream?
is your mind that demented?
your eyes have lost that gleam?

baby make do with what ya got
don't let your hunger go to waste
what's the use to doubt and rot
get up you'll surely get the gist
soon enough

my legs they know the routes to take
those I learned from God long ago
I'm attending my own anguished wake
when my glass's empty I gotta go

baby make do with what ya got
don't let your hunger go to waste
what's the use to doubt and rot
get up you'll surely get the gist
soon enough

It's okay but it's not something I will call catchy. In other words, it doesn't sound radio-friendly.

BC...Very cool..You should try to put some tune to your stuff, I can feel what/where yopur going...You do play guitar or a friend? : ok:

ChristineP, I play guitar and sure I have some simple tune and I'm trying to make some music, but it's not my strong point. Oh, well... I've played only for a four months or so maybe I'm still getting there ;)

Here's another song, hopefully there'll be some feedback  8)

"Dive in the ditch, bitch"


I'm packin' up my stuff, it's time to go
It's time to go, here life's never gonna be rich
Done my livin', done my living in the ditch
No losing grips since there's just one story, one bitch
One story for every glory loving that bitch

Yeah, time to go, to shine an' show
Yeah, done my livin' low, so give me a pack of smokes
and some lunch to go
Yeah, time to go, to shine an' show
the faster I'm gone, the faster is the switch
an' the losing taste of that final kiss
Losing that and the twisted witch

Last of my dimes, alone in my pocket
some sorry dimes, my unsupportive cheerleader crowd
not enough for anything, kinda like you, honey
What happened to you honey?

I'm packin' up my stuff, it's time to go
It's time to go, here life's never gonna go on
Done my livin' low, done my diving in the ditch
No losing grips since there's just one story, one bitch
One story for every glory loving that bitch

Whoa, baby, who you calling a heartbreaker?
Whoa, baby  cursing me the worst you can
Some fame and glory, cursing up every story
Some fame and stories, like the ending of your glories
Bitch!

Yeah, time to go, to shine an' show
Someone lit my smoke and I'll be gone
No emotion swings to go an' break it
No emotion stings, since I left it
And no more bitch, no more shit!
Be tight lipped now an' sleep in the ditch
Your wings are cut, find someone rich
Be tight lipped, bitch, enjoy your time in the ditch
An' your wings are cut, find someone rich

Bitch.

Here is a song of mine. Take note that English is not my primarily language, so there may be some mispelled words.

THIS I LOVE

I hear you call my name
Echoing like a whisper
Bringing back asleep memories
Embedded in a past full of lies

Windows crack outside
Announcing the haunted season
Its cooling slowly inside
My whole is left behind

And nothing could keep me
Away from this room
Im falling to pieces
And lost without you
Surrounded by darkness
All over my mind
I wish I could see you
Just one last time

Let me show you
What it means to be alone
When the loneliness
Corrode your heart to death
Deep inside me
Is the pain that carries me on
Cause this feeling for you
Keep getting stronger this I love
This I love
This I love
This I love...

  I sure wouldn't want to piss you off!!!!! :no:

this is a song I wrote for a girl I met this summer and I think I fell for her :-[

its called Your Eyes And The Summer Night


a fallin star just travelled through the sky
I closed my eyes and felt my heartbeat
I had this feeling, it came right from your eyes
and that I was meant to find it

So if you ever see yourself a falling star
close your eyes and feel your heartbeat
and you will know just how I felt that night
that night I'd give my all to ride it

to ride to you sipping some Jack on ice
to ride it back to your eyes

If I ever get the chance to meet you in my life again
I hope I have the strength to tell you what I felt
and then just be one of those falling stars that travel through the summer sky
cause your eyes defined the meaning of the summer night


your eyes defined the meaning of the summer night
your eyes defined the meaning of the summer night

Was it that bad?  :-\ Don't worry, you won't

This song I had in my mind for a while - basically the lament of a sexually frustrated teenager, and an indictment of social views that make women apprehensive of having sex.  I don't know if the final results are as good as I'd hoped, but I think the lyrics are alright.  The song sounds a bit like "A Forest" by The Cure - an icy, gloomy sound.

By the way, I'm pleased to tell you that since I wrote the song a few weeks ago, I have since gotten laid!!  So it's more of a historical curiosity now.  Whatever, enjoy.

The Virgin Suicides

Take a walk through the fabled garden
She waits there and laughs at your devil's bargain
Open your eyes, you're too blind to see
That you and I were meant to be

The serpent instructs you to taste the fruit
It's what you've been told nice girls don't do
You take a thing of beauty and you make it obscene
I'm bowing as a slave to the Virgin Queen

Just realize before it's too late
It's a gesture of love you turned into hate
You want to get rid of this parasite
Driving me to my suicide, oh yeah

these are the lyrics to 2 songs I wrote during the summer for the band I was in. Nothing serious, we played the park by my house and it was just for a good time before everyone went back to school. I would love to hear thoughts on them tho.
By the way, I listened to alot of aerosmith over the summer so if the lyrics are very wanna be steven tyler you know why....
GOING BLIND

marijuana's for glaucoma should I take it 'cause I can't take you
The way you move your ass my hearts not the only part of me turning blue
I'm in danger 'cause my angel's the one leading me to sin
forearm exercises your finish line is where I begin
My thoughts are dirty but your eyes aren't cause I make you cry
You're sayin that you lvoe me but all I want is between your thighs

:Yeah and I'm goin blind-whats a libido to do?
Yeah and I'm goin blind-that's why I shouldn't see you:

Can't stand much more that's why I'm on my knees pleadin
Got you on my couch and then I get to plotting and sheming
standing at your door and the rain starts pouring down cold
I wanna knock and cum inside but you're still saying no

:yeah and I'm goin blind-behavior I can't condone
Yeah and I'm going blind-I guess I'll stumble on home:

BIG WHITE TELEPHONE

You say you just want to be friends I'm saying that won't be fair
You get to have all the things you want and I get is to be there
I remember holding your hair back-talkin to god on the big white telephone
Now that you're gone everythings wrong and I'm drinkin here all alone
Chorous:
To have loved and have lost-you're not better off as they say
and if you can't be here-than I wish that you would just go away

I found alotta girls to take your place 15 minutes at a time
But how could it be anything else when you're always on the other line
I won't ever be the bigger person so don't expect me to be mature
keep calling me on my idiosyncrasies just don't call my phone anymore
chorous

I really like this one. : ok:

Please let me know what you think and please make suggestions how to make it better.
Thanks.

Sick world of Bliss (Fallen Stars)

Walk across the starry night.
Touch the star while in flight.
The fallen stars burn anew.
Soon, you will burn too.

Amazing what your mind can become.
A twisted world with all senses gone.
A little help from a friend,
And soon your reality will soon be dead.

Pick up the pieces of a broken bottle, blood flows from your wrists.
In some sick way, the poisoned mind you possess finds bliss.
The stars appear no more, they have faded from view.
And soon you will join them, and burn anew.
Nothing gained.

Amazing what your mind can become.
A twisted world with all senses gone.
A little help from a friend,
And soon your reality will soon be dead.

I can touch the sky.
While my world flows right on by.
I begin to fall.
I am nothing at all.

Your friends did try to help.
But you were lost within yourself.
Look at the pleasure you yourself did construct.
Before you turned and self-destructed.

Amazing what your mind can become.
A twisted world with all senses gone.
A little help from a friend,
And soon your reality will soon be dead.

Amazing what your mind can become.
A twisted world with all senses gone.
A little help from a friend,
And soon your reality will soon be dead.

Ok, this is a song I wrote for a band called TOTAL BLACKOUT in 1995, but it was never used, so I recorded it my self during the summer of 2001. Tell me what you think about it.

I have this woman, that no one knows about
She ain't the type who screams or shout
No, this is the type who goes straight to your head
And she won't leave you untill you'd be lying there dead

She comes to you like pleasure and pain
She comes to you by joint, or vain
And they'd be tryin' to call you on the phone
But no one's answering, coz you ain't home

Set me free, let me be
left alone, with my mind all gone
I wanna leave, let God recive
my pride, in sucide

Why can't we all just lay down on the ground and have sex?

I have now, broken up
but to breake with this bitch, your life have to stop
So here I am, I'm without my wife
I'm all clean now, but without, a motherfuckin' life

So there you have it, now reload your guns and fire at will guys !!

MUSTAINE=GOD

Latest one from me

Lady Isabelle

I sit still beneath the water
Guardian of my land through ages
I still wait for our father
I sit still through life?s phases

Currents come and go above my skull
Northern winds whistle memorable cries
It?s so cold here, the bottom is so dull
Guardian of my land, my hands are tied

All I?m left with is a shadowy face
The one I remember, you, your eyes
I hold on, stuck in this horrible mess
Will you remember your vows?

You and I believed in occult eternity
Centuries have gone by unnoticed
Your new you is by my side already
I need you/him at home with a priest

I cannot go peacefully until you find me
My skeleton rots safely in the deadly sea
I cannot go until the guardian is set free
I cannot go, we played with destiny

Come back to find me in the cold waters
In front of the land that leads to the caves
My hands are tied, forever alive like a sinner
My only tears, gone, with the Scottish waves.

I like this one...good atmosphere.